Slow Death

He lay dying_ slowly did his life pass
Watching others as they moved about room
As his heart failed, fluid filled him enmass
More than his body could handle consume

Legs swollen so that look like muscle man
Stomach swollen sounds as ripe watermelon
Lived a good life years beyond most lifespan
Pain in eyes _ don't really need this athlon

God how can in life some have to suffer much
The depth of their suffering you have shown me
Through the death of this pet whose  so soft touch
Touched our hearts to depth in death _ made me see

Instant death_ here;  then gone_ suffering little
So sad_ long death slow torture overbattle_

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 5/23/2011 6:15:00 AM
A very sad piece, Sara. I can certainly relate to this one, having lost both our dogs to cancer. Lovely tribute to your beloved pet.
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Date: 5/20/2011 12:06:00 AM
A very sad moving poem,, battles are never good no matter the ending,,,thanks for sharing Sara,,, god bless,...p.d.
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Date: 5/17/2011 9:25:00 PM
Once again, my heartfelt condolences. I'm hoping and praying that God gives you strength and takes this heavy burden off of your heart. Always, R.M.
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Date: 5/17/2011 5:26:00 PM
Yes subtle hell is here ... suffering with a passion true... wonders often when my ration.. will come n take me too... sad verse babe :( If it rattles round inside your head slap it on puter till its fed Blinkered are we bout the cosmos but order planning thinks instead makes sense some plan xo Don
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Date: 5/17/2011 4:26:00 PM
My condolences on losing your pet Sara - a family member, Sara. A beautiful poem to express your devotion. ~Soulfire~
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Date: 5/17/2011 3:19:00 PM
Sara, it is so painful to lose your pet and watch him being put to sleep. My heart goes out to you for your recent loss. You described this feeling so well. Excellent writing. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/17/2011 1:37:00 PM
Sara this really touched my heart deeply, i shed a tear while i read this most heart filled piece. I know how you feel, you have read my poetry about my dog Murphy who i had put to sleep last year after 12 years. i feel your pain, so deep, your hurt is heart breaking, but in time the pain will go away a little bit anyway. Thank you for commenting on Then Came the Rains.
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Date: 5/17/2011 1:30:00 PM
Sad truth on the death of anyone but especially a sweet and loved pet .. a member of the family ... a treasured companion always.. a nice tribute to Rocky ..Sara... time heals all wounds and he is in a better place my friend.. nice expression of the luv he gave and so sorry he endured this suffering before the end... prayers for Rocky on animal prayer line luv..
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Date: 5/17/2011 12:50:00 PM
this is very good nice job! cory
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Date: 5/17/2011 12:46:00 PM
The bitter truth of live many can relate, sad but touchy write, Sara
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Date: 5/17/2011 11:49:00 AM
Very true words you have penned here Sara.It seems you have written this seeing someone dying slowly.That is a very sad experience...
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