Slipping Into Oblivion

I brave the winds to await summer
And long for days when love duly appears,
Long enough till daylights erupt
Into a sizzle of wistful rendezvous--
While along the pier, a boat-ship far
Moves through me with warm delight.
Preparing the foil of roses fresh,
My hand trembles as the sail nears
That tresses moisten from the wait,
As passengers alight from the door;
Still, your silhouette becomes a haze,
Enough for this heart to fade in the night
Slipping into oblivion, a moment erased
By a dream thinning as summer weeps.

 
Rob Carmack, Oblivion Contest
Dec 7 2015

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 3/13/2016 11:10:00 PM
Norma, Enjoyed the way you expressed every line. Please keep writing, hope to see a new one from you again. LOVE LINDA
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Date: 12/24/2015 10:56:00 PM
Sorry that I previously missed replying to this contest being finished. Congrats on your well deserved win my friend.
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Date: 12/20/2015 12:28:00 AM
NORMA, Congrats on your win In Rob Carmack's Oblivion contest. Love ~LINDA~
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Date: 12/19/2015 9:48:00 PM
Congratulations on 3rd place win! I love your descriptions.
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Date: 12/19/2015 2:24:00 PM
NORMA, Congrats on your Oblivion WIN **SKAT**
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Date: 12/6/2015 2:06:00 PM
Wow, Rob. Fantastic.
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Date: 12/6/2015 2:09:00 PM
Norma, great poem. The trembling was real to me.
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Date: 12/6/2015 2:07:00 PM
Norma, that was a great poem.
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