Sleep sweet boy

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Just an experiment to see if I could rhyme (or near rhyme) Each word of each couplet. Each 2 lines rhyme in every word! I think it makes enough sense to call it a cohesive poem.

Sleep tight your mom guards thee Keep light for song bards be Singing to you all through dreams Bringing true blue fall moon beams Don't take breath from dear sweet boy Won't wake yet,come near, meet joy

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Tom Woody

Date: 2/13/2025 8:03:00 AM

The longing and yearning for your son is a recurrent theme in your poetry. For now, he sleeps in peace until the great day - John 5:28,29

Tom Woody
Date: 2/13/2025 8:40:00 AM

I try not to think of it from a "church" standpoint. I simply believe what Jesus believes - John 11:11-14

Crystol Woods
Date: 2/13/2025 8:23:00 AM

Thank you for your encouragement and counsel. We have slightly different understanding of scriptures in this area but I know your a brother in Christ who loves the Lord, that's what matters to me. Whether he sleeps or waits, we will meet again! With love in Christ, C xo

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 2/12/2025 2:24:00 PM

Very good Crystol, I like verse that rhymes, your couplets do that perfectly, line by line… Beryl

Crystol Woods
Date: 2/13/2025 8:24:00 AM

Tysm! It was something I wanted to try. Xo

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 2/12/2025 3:22:00 AM

Good penning Crystal, I write mostly rhyme myself so I really love rhyming pieces. Keep rhyming! Take care,Gordon

Crystol Woods
Date: 2/12/2025 6:23:00 AM

Thanks! I was hoping to make it all smoothly go together... not sure i met that goal but I like the idea! Xo