Richard Lamoureux Poet Pantoum

Slave

She wrapped herself in a beautiful lie
Bound so tight she was unable to fly
Slave to some pictues in a magazine
The essence of her could barely be seen

Bound so tight she was unable to fly
Choices she had made but didn't know why
The essence of her could barely be seen
The face of a woman who's only a teen

Choices she had made but didn't know why
Taking her love from a much older guy
The face of a woman who's only a teen
Absorbing sad from the places she's been

Taking her love from a much older guy
Minutes became years as her youth went by
Absorbing sad from the places she's been
Wanted happy but became sad and mean

Minutes became years as her youth went by
Life of desperation and getting high
Wanted happy but became sad and mean
Pain began early when she was fourteen

Life of desperation and getting high
She wrapped herself in a beautiful lie
Pain began early when she was fourteen
Slave to some pictures in a magazine

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Freddie Robinson Jr. October 28, 2016 at 7:53 PM Very powerful poem, Richard. Real, gritty and honest depiction of a sex slave. This pantoum form, I will have to seriously consider giving it a try ... I like how a message/theme can get repeated that you want to impress upon the reader. Great job, maestro. Much love to you. RW

Verlena S. Walker August 17, 2014 at 6:45 PM Rick, I visited your page and read Best Richard Lamoureux Poems. I enjoyed what I read immensely. How long have you be writing Poetry? Oh, and "Slave" is unique. Verlena Richard Lamoureux August 17, 2014 at 6:54 PM I wrote poetry back in grade school, but stopped until I was in my forties. I wrote steady for about a year and a bit and stopped for seven years. Now for the last three years I have been writing regularly. My first book came out this January and I have received tremendous reviews. It started out as 75 pages and grew to 320 as a result of a mentor pushing me to dig deeper. I am glad he did.

Casarah Nance June 20, 2014 at 8:52 PM Hey you are kinda good at this poetry thing, okay really you are great and everything I read of yours impresses me even more. ;) Richard Lamoureux August 17, 2014 at 6:55 PM How did I miss this one Casarah? You are good for my ego.

Gina Montalbo May 2, 2014 at 6:51 PM Wow so true great write...loved it..... Gina Gina Montalbo May 3, 2014 at 9:31 AM Well my mom has told me to be proud of who and what i am she made me as perfect as i can be so what you see is what you get men who look for perfection miss the little things that make a woman perfect the perfect woman is the one that completes you... Gina Richard Lamoureux May 2, 2014 at 7:03 PM Thanks Gina, I appreciate you looking at one of my less recent poems. I sometimes thin it must be difficult being a woman with all the unreasonable expectations nowadays. Often what women think men are looking for is far from reality. What do you think???

Donna Jones May 1, 2014 at 9:21 AM Richard...going to favs with this one to read over again ..it is a rare gem...too true to be enjoyed lightly..I mean that in a good way...you did a wonderful job...awesome work Richard Richard Lamoureux May 1, 2014 at 9:42 AM I am honored! Thanks so much Donna you are sweet.

Carol Eastman April 8, 2014 at 9:01 PM A very unique poem. Well done! The title caught my attention. Richard Lamoureux April 9, 2014 at 8:32 AM Thanks Carol.

Sarai Virden April 7, 2014 at 4:11 AM A sad kind of lovely poem. This one had me entranced. Hope you are well Rick... Hugs Richard Lamoureux April 7, 2014 at 7:51 AM Hi Sarai, I am very well thank you. It is always nice to start the day with a hug, thanks.

Jerry T Curtis April 6, 2014 at 7:14 PM Man, You really worked this one Richard. If my hat was on, I would be taking it off to you ! Richard Lamoureux April 6, 2014 at 9:32 PM Thanks Jerry.

James Tate April 6, 2014 at 2:50 PM Richard, I like your style, command of poetry. Slave is well written. Thanks for your comment on my comment on Craig's poem in the hourglass shape. Richard Lamoureux April 6, 2014 at 9:33 PM My pleasure James, thanks for dropping by.

Patrick Nigros April 6, 2014 at 2:28 PM im loving ths poem, "she wrapped herself in a beautifull lie" , one day when life takes me to Canada, i want to shake your hand and say "your such a blessing here on the soup" Richard Lamoureux April 6, 2014 at 2:43 PM I would be honored to shake your hand. Where are you from?

Jan Allison April 5, 2014 at 12:32 PM Fabulous powerful poem Richard tackling such a difficult subject loved the repetition of the lines. Hugs Jan xxx Richard Lamoureux April 6, 2014 at 8:45 AM Thanks Jan.

Poet Tacito April 5, 2014 at 9:08 AM What you describe is a hugely ongoing problem here in my city. It's such a shame. Tremendous & hard-hitting write. Richard Lamoureux April 5, 2014 at 9:39 AM I'm sorry to hear that, I guess no place is immune.

Monterey Sirak April 5, 2014 at 8:21 AM Such sadness in your words. Too often young girls look for outward validation of beauty and worth when it is within them. Richard Lamoureux April 5, 2014 at 8:50 AM It is indeed sad.

Demetrios Trifiatis April 5, 2014 at 7:52 AM A poem of incomparable beauty that depicts the truth and conveys a message! How many young are lost in this manner is beyond numbers! The worst thing is for someone to become a slave to his passions! Bravo! A 7 for beauty and substance! Richard Lamoureux April 5, 2014 at 8:51 AM Thankyou I appreciate your kindness.

Arthur Vaso April 4, 2014 at 10:22 PM Hi Richard, havent been around lately, so catching up on some reading, This is another great poem! Hope all is well with you! Richard Lamoureux April 5, 2014 at 8:52 AM Thanks Arthur, all is indeed well with me.

Shadow Hamilton April 4, 2014 at 5:58 PM beautiful yet tragic Rick very powerful pen hugs Richard Lamoureux April 4, 2014 at 7:51 PM I checked earlier to see if you posted a new one. Let me know when you do. Thanks for the visit, hugs Rick

Ken Carroll April 4, 2014 at 5:21 PM Awesome write Richard with a moving story line.. Richard Lamoureux April 4, 2014 at 5:22 PM Thanks Ken.

Red Fiery April 4, 2014 at 10:56 AM Richard , you have highlighted a difficult subject with brevity. I had to read it over and over again..you are so creative. I missed reading your poems...but they brought me here...hugs Red Richard Lamoureux April 4, 2014 at 12:41 PM A big hug back to you! I have missed your visits, welcome back. How have you been?

Kelly Deschler April 3, 2014 at 5:05 PM I can really relate to this poem. I personally know someone who is headed down this same road, and I hope that she turns around before it's too late...This is a truly amazing write, Richard! Richard Lamoureux April 4, 2014 at 12:43 PM My wife runs an eating disorder program here in Kelowna. Most people don't realize what a serious problem it is. Kelly Deschler April 4, 2014 at 11:49 AM I agree, Richard. This person that I mentioned is a close family member. She has been dyeing her hair blonde since she was 15, and she barely eats anything to maintain a perfect body. I want her to see that there is so much more to her than just a pretty face. Richard Lamoureux April 3, 2014 at 8:25 PM We need to cultivate the inner beauty. It is so hard in a society that is infatuated with appearance.

Eileen Manassian April 3, 2014 at 10:53 AM WOW! What an awesome write on such a difficult subject, Richard. You did very well in highlighting the pain and sorrow many women go through to become accepted. Hugs Richard Lamoureux April 3, 2014 at 8:26 PM In many cases men are to blame for how women see themselves.

Keith O.J. Hunt April 3, 2014 at 10:50 AM Grim, but noble write Richard! Richard Lamoureux April 3, 2014 at 8:27 PM Thanks Keith, it's good to add a male perspective.

Nette Onclaud April 3, 2014 at 10:42 AM gut-wrenching reality of dis[placed women filled with your deep expressions.. awesome!.. huggs Richard Lamoureux April 3, 2014 at 8:28 PM A big hug back to you Nette.

Aiyah Torres April 3, 2014 at 10:12 AM poor young women.. . they are the victims of this rotten society... and their "essence" became food for the mouth of starving evils!!! .. . this is one superb write, Rick!! ... SALUTE!!! :o)) Richard Lamoureux April 3, 2014 at 8:29 PM Males are starting to be effected as well. There is much higher anxiety in our young men nowadays.