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Sitting on the Fence at Twilight

Sitting on the Fence at Twilight

When the sun waved good-bye in the afternoon,
I’d say hello to the smiling Man in the Moon. 
Perching on our gray concrete fence,
I’d swing my brown legs to a happy cadence.
From my solid fortress, I could see
a daily circus of human activity.

On a single bicycle rode the Fabros, a family of four;
how they all fit, it was a mystery to be sure.
The street vendor, old Papito, would hawk his treats;
oh! those warm, sticky, honey buns and tamarind sweets.

Sashaying in her tight-fitting skirt of tomato-red,
Cousin Clarita balanced a green basket on her turbaned head.
Then came buxom Aunt Alfreda huffing and puffing by,
to give me a piping hot, home-made, savory meat pie. 
I’d blow on it to cool it off first, just
before biting into the flaky, buttery crust. 
 
As day soon faded into hues of twilight,
I’d spy the occasional shiny satellite,
a tiny, silver snail slowly revolving in the sky,
moving so silently above, way up high.

For a child of seven, this was such a wondrous time…
right until the old town clock chimed nine.
Then Mama would ring her bell calling me inside,
and I’d leave the stars still twinkling outside.


04-24-2018


Contest:       An Early Childhood Memory
Sponsor:      Line Gauthier
Placement:   3rd 

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 11/19/2018 10:48:00 AM
Great imagery, Pandita - really captures the moment. "A tiny silver snail..." is such an interesting metaphor! Congrats on your win. Kind regards, John.
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Date: 5/24/2018 12:23:00 PM
Could feel like it had been me on that fence. Great writing.
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Pandita Sanchez
Date: 5/24/2018 3:23:00 PM
Hannah, I am glad that this piece affected you in such a way that you felt like you were the one experiencing that moment in time! Thank you for your superlative compliment! Best regards. Pandita
Date: 5/22/2018 10:19:00 AM
I KNEW I remembered your name! This was one of my favorites in the top ten. Thanks for your kind comments.
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Date: 5/22/2018 11:03:00 AM
Awwww - you have certainly put some sunshine in a day that was puckered-up to be gray! Hope you are enjoying your day too! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 5/20/2018 11:33:00 AM
What a picture. Art as much as poetry I think.
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Date: 5/21/2018 11:27:00 AM
What a wonderful compliment, Brian! Thank you so much for visiting and leaving me your kind words that brighten my day! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 5/20/2018 10:48:00 AM
I'm right there in the picture! So picturesque with originality.
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Date: 5/20/2018 11:03:00 AM
Hi Sunlite, thank you for stopping by, my friend, I really appreciate your kind complimentary words - thank you very much! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 5/13/2018 7:02:00 AM
I enjoyed this poem the first time I read it--thought it was special. Glad to see it climbing the best poem list, Pandita.
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Date: 5/13/2018 8:54:00 PM
I am so delighted! Thank you so much dear Vijay. I always appreciate your wonderful encouragement and support! Hugs and best regards, my friend! Pandita
Date: 5/10/2018 1:46:00 AM
Hi Pandita ( lovely name). Some dreamy descriptions of childhood fantasy. Lovely write
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Date: 5/10/2018 7:32:00 AM
Awwwww! Thank you dear Jannie, for complimenting my name and this piece! I really appreciate your visit and support! Hugs and best regards. Pandita
Date: 5/8/2018 7:13:00 AM
Brightened my morn reading this fine poem about such delightful and sweet childhood memories my friend. Your talent gives to others my friend... A fav...
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Date: 5/8/2018 7:26:00 AM
My dearest Robert, it's always a great pleasure to hear from you!I hope you've been keeping well! Thank you for reading this piece and complimenting it! Thank you, my friend! Love and hugs. Pandita
Date: 5/6/2018 9:09:00 AM
Wonderful nostalgic write Pandita, priceless memories thanks for sharing, and congrats on your win!
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Date: 5/6/2018 9:13:00 AM
Hi John, I really appreciate your kind congratulatory words and compliments - thank you very much! Hugs and best wishes. Pandita
Date: 5/4/2018 12:14:00 AM
Pandita, this is outstanding descriptive story telling of your childhood evening. FAVE
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Date: 5/4/2018 1:17:00 PM
Andy, your compliments always brighten my day! Thank you so very much for the fave! Have a beautiful weekend, my friend! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 4/29/2018 11:11:00 AM
As sweet and captivating as childhood memories are! A talented poetess giving as the pleasure to share her sweet moments! Stay bright dear Pandita.
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Date: 4/29/2018 11:23:00 AM
Awwwww! Thank you - thank you, dear Besma, for your sweet superlative, complimentary words that mean so much to me! Best regards and hugs. Pandita
Date: 4/26/2018 6:55:00 PM
My dear friend, Pandita, I was completely captivated by you and your beautiful childhood reverie. Your lovely poetic lines brought me with you, back in time to sit upon the concrete fence under the stars.. a magical write full of gorgeous imagery. I so enjoyed your winning poem, congratulations on your excellent win, my lovely friend.. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 4/28/2018 4:31:00 PM
My sweet Susan, I am so delighted that you enjoyed this piece and that it was able to transport you along with me on this journey into a magical time in my early life! Thank you my dear friend! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 4/25/2018 8:56:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Pandita, wonderful poem ..Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 4/26/2018 7:22:00 AM
Hi Eve, I really appreciate you kind congratulatory words and compliments - thank you very much! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 4/25/2018 4:33:00 PM
What beautiful poem and so nostalgic... And I see congrats are in order..
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Date: 4/26/2018 7:21:00 AM
Thank you - thank you, SO! I always appreciate your supportive words and compliments! Have a wonderful day, my friend! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 4/25/2018 2:43:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Delightful!
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Date: 4/26/2018 7:19:00 AM
Hi Susan, thank you my dear, I appreciate your kind words! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 4/25/2018 2:22:00 PM
Pandita - glad to have read this one and congrats.
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Date: 4/26/2018 7:19:00 AM
Hi Rob, so happy to hear from you! Thank you so much for your kind congratulatory words! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 4/25/2018 10:06:00 AM
Fabulous imagery. A fun poem, Pandita. Congrats on your well deserved bronze medal win.
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Date: 4/25/2018 11:49:00 AM
Dear Line, thank you so very much for the honor! I am so delighted! Hugs and best wishes.
Date: 4/25/2018 8:31:00 AM
Very well written Pandita, I enjoyed this wonderful poem. But for some reason, I am now hungry..hmmm..(lol) Hugs to you // Charlie
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Date: 4/25/2018 9:05:00 AM
Awwww - thanks, Charles for your kind congratulatory words and compliments! Hehehehe - I know you would have enjoyed those meat pies and honey buns! Hugs to you too, my friend! Pandita
Date: 4/25/2018 6:14:00 AM
Delightful, pleasant read..sweet childhood memories, expertly captured in rhyming verses...excellent, as always, Pandita.
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Date: 4/25/2018 8:24:00 AM
Thank you so much for your lovely compliments, dear Vijay! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 4/25/2018 12:33:00 AM
wonderful detailing of a memorable time at 7, pandita! beautiful poem!..huggs
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Date: 4/25/2018 8:57:00 AM
Hi Nette, thank you so much for visiting and leaving your sweet complimentary words! Hugs and best wishes. Pandita