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Singing the Old Age Blues

My knees crack and creak 
       like an old barn door 
And I can't just take a seat 
       anyplace, anymore.
I can no longer get up if 
       I try to sit on the floor.
My hearing is pretty good, 
       but my vision is poor.

I am starting to hunch at 
       my shoulders and back,
And Doc says I must stop 
       straining my sacroiliac.
This old body needs naps, 
       with the energy I lack.
My ankles are shaky with my 
       balance out of whack.

My feet are too small, and 
       I've got a fungus on my toe.
Nothing seems to help cure it, 
       as it continues to grow.
My hair falls out by the handfuls, 
       it's beginning to show.
My efforts seem useless, so 
       I'm just going let it all go!

9-13-16

Knees, shoulders, back, sacroiliac, body, ankles, feet, toe, hair

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Sponsor Viv Wigley
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Ricci Avatar
May 19, 2017 at 5:25 AM
Good Morning Connie. I turned to this entry at random. This is the smile and chuckle for the day. Thank you for that. Yes, this has two sides, the seriousness of life and the fun with play. I choose the fun with play. Your words are true. And to your ending I say yes, just forget everything and let all go. Wonderful in its entirety. Enjoy the morning and day.
Callus Avatar
October 26, 2016 at 3:38 PM
Oh dear, Connie...you are not alone in this predicament:)) I have no problem with aging, but elders deserve better treatment, especially after all those years of hard work!! Thank you for an entertaining write:) Regards // paul
Marcum Wong Avatar
October 26, 2016 at 4:14 PM
The secret is in teaching our young to understand and respect that as you age you still feel young but your body changes causing limits as to what we can do. I get this point across with pictures of me when I was young doing things I can't do now. Thank you for your visit and nice comment Paul . : )
Austin Avatar
October 23, 2016 at 9:33 AM
This one is so good I just had to read it again. All but the feet - I can wear a size 14 and I like to do so my arch is so long. Have a good Sunday. Love, Dave
Marcum Wong Avatar
October 25, 2016 at 3:39 AM
Thank you Daver. I can't believe how fast time is going. Before we turn around it's going to be Christmas. Take care, Connie : )
Duggan Avatar
October 8, 2016 at 8:41 PM
Oh I love this one Connie, I, like most of us can relate to this and nearly every thing is me, but as you say we just have to let it all go, great write my friend......Vera
Marcum Wong Avatar
October 12, 2016 at 3:17 PM
Thank you Vera. I have been taking a short poetry break because of eye strain. Blessings, Connie ; )
Adams Avatar
October 6, 2016 at 7:28 PM
Oh, wow, do I relate to this one, Connie. Great job, and you hit me at every point.
Marcum Wong Avatar
October 6, 2016 at 7:41 PM
LOL...Thank you Cona. I don't wish to repeat my youth but I could sure use that youthful body again! Thank you Cona. : )
Dalei Avatar
September 28, 2016 at 8:16 AM
This is nice, Connie. Well penned every stanza...........// Manmath
Godwin Avatar
September 24, 2016 at 11:19 PM
Very well done! We must laugh, eh? And you did that, created a swell of laughter in me that got Tim's attention. I wrote for this contest, but only in my head while drifting off to sleep (that laughter REALLY got Tim's attention) and I never got a chance to sit with it. I truly enjoyed your clever write ... CayCay
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 30, 2016 at 4:45 PM
Thank you very much CayCay. I almost never have humor in my poetry so it is nice you found this humorous. Cheers, Connie ; )
Dietrich Avatar
September 22, 2016 at 7:07 PM
I was thinking this was for the old age contest and was wondering where the congrats were, and then I realized it was in a contest that is yet unjudged, right? I sure hope this one wins. It's so awesome, Connie.
Marcum Wong Avatar
October 4, 2016 at 1:06 PM
Thank you Andrea. I have read some of the entries and they have me beat by a mile. I just wanted to enter Viv's contest because I like him and wanted to support his contest. ; )
Deschler Avatar
September 21, 2016 at 5:57 PM
Aging is an inevitable part of life, so why do we worry so much about looking younger? I agree, we just need to let it go... A great poem for the contest! Some good humor in this one, Connie. Nice work!
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 22, 2016 at 12:29 PM
I agree, I don't feel the need to try to look as young as my daughter's. I enjoy being a grandmother and don't mind took my the part. Thank you Kelly. : )
Dietrich Avatar
September 16, 2016 at 8:17 PM
hey, you gotta put this in Sara's contest too. I have that one poem of mine that also fits into the Victim / Victor contest. But I need to use the title Victim Victor in that contest. Trying to decide what to do about that!
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 16, 2016 at 8:54 PM
The syllable count doesn't match Andrea. Wish I could use it for both because I seldom ever write humor. Thanks, Connie
Haight Avatar
September 15, 2016 at 8:11 PM
I really enjoyed this poem, Connie! Humorous, but with so much truth we can all identify with...well, our generation, at least! Well done and best wishes for the contest! 7 Hugs, Sandra
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 15, 2016 at 10:08 PM
I wish there was NO truth to it at all Sandra. How did my body fall apart without me taking notice? It seemed to happen overnight. Thank you so much for your nice comment Sandra. : )
Austin Avatar
September 15, 2016 at 12:56 PM
All of the above, dear lady. You are hitting on all cylinders. I might add a few little pains, but you nailed the big ones. Got a creaky old chuckle out of this one. Love, Dave
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 15, 2016 at 10:11 PM
Thank you Daver. Wish someone would have warned me I wouldn't be able to hike and climb when I got older. It came as an unhappy surprise. Lol. ; )
Inman Avatar
September 15, 2016 at 10:38 AM
Connie, it seems you've described me quite well in your clever write. I smiled all the way through.
Muideen Avatar
September 15, 2016 at 7:49 AM
What an interesting piece. Thanks for sharing.........A.M.
Leiser Avatar
September 14, 2016 at 9:01 AM
Good one, Connie! Wish our bodies could just hold up better with age...! Enjoyed the read :)
Sathasivam Avatar
September 14, 2016 at 3:58 AM
Excellent and very interesting write. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 15, 2016 at 10:12 PM
Thank you Ravi. ; )
Merryman Avatar
September 13, 2016 at 4:55 PM
Connie, this is great! Your humorous poem resembles me.Lol Best wishes in the contest! Blessings!
Dietrich Avatar
September 13, 2016 at 3:33 PM
Excellent humor and wit, Connie. I can see you worked on this one. If he only choose three winners, I wish him luck. I am seeing too many amazing entries around here. Thanks for all your kind words on my poems. I am feeling so out of it, can't ever get caught up here. hoping I can do a lot on the weekend. :Luv, Andrea
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 14, 2016 at 11:25 PM
Thank you Andrea. You know I almost never write humor, but I just wanted to join Viv's contest. Get some rest...poetry can wait. ; )
May Avatar
September 13, 2016 at 8:31 AM
Love the humor in this one Connie...best wishes
Bhattacharya Avatar
September 13, 2016 at 1:59 AM
Very funny, Connie, I enjoyed it. At the same time, this poem constitutes the agony of old age. :(
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 13, 2016 at 3:17 AM
The agony is in the fact that I can't move around fast anymore or hike. I did manage to go horse back riding for my birthday though. Thanks Sarban. Aloha, Connie
Kroll Avatar
September 12, 2016 at 4:08 PM
I sure can identify with this, especially today. Got a bug I guess or it has me...
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 12, 2016 at 8:49 PM
I am sorry to hear that Kathleen...such a lovely name! I hope you are feeling better soon. Thank you for commenting on my poem. Aloha, Connie : )
Turner Avatar
September 12, 2016 at 3:00 PM
I love this funny poem Connie. I can identify with almost all of the problems you have written about. Great humor!
Smith Avatar
September 12, 2016 at 2:39 PM
If it's not one thing it is another...nice write Connie
Allison Avatar
September 12, 2016 at 2:27 PM
This is absolutely hilarious Connie and will really appeal to Mr Viv's sense of humour :-) hugs Jan xx
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 12, 2016 at 3:41 PM
Thank you Jan I almost never write anything humorous. I'm just not good at it, so I'm happy you think this is funny thanks a lot, Connie
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