Carrie Richards Poet I do not know?

Silver Streak

All aboard the Rhode Island Line!
We're guaranteed to be on time
Grab your suitcase, grab your coat
Let the railroad be your host
Write a postcard, you will boast
about what you've seen from coast to coast!

We will make the traffic wait
stuck behind  a crossing gate
Boxcars, hoppers, and sleeping cars
strung together, and going far
rumbling down the railroad track

Don't bother looking back
Up the slippery slope
Engine takes the lead
Picking up some speed

Convoluted smoky trails
Consolidated silver tails
Contemplating railroad tales 

Whistles blast!
Whizzing past!

Gone!




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10/17/14  For Andrea's "I Don't Know" Contest

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Reason A. Poteet October 30, 2014 at 4:54 PM Congratulations, Carrie, the random rhyme, not required, but it adds to the flow. Enjoyable read.

Casarah Nance October 29, 2014 at 6:44 AM Oh this was fun to read! Grats on your win ;)

Brenda Meier-Hans October 25, 2014 at 4:23 PM I also love train rides, especially when you are with friends. Congratulations on your win.

Tim Smith October 25, 2014 at 1:05 PM This wonderful Carrie...I take the train everyday to work and next June I'm doing a cross country trip...congrats sweetie

Carolyn Devonshire October 25, 2014 at 11:19 AM Dear Carrie, this is awesome. I've only ridden on trains a few times, but have waited at railway crossings in my car for LONG periods of time. Still, I enjoy the "rhythm" of trains as they seem to sway gently. Remember the song "City of New Orleans" about the trains disappearing from their native land? It mentions the "disappearing railroad blues." Very cool poem, Carrie! Sending a Soup Mail. Love, Carolyn

Joseph May October 25, 2014 at 10:54 AM Sounds like a wonderful scenic ride.....Congrats on your win

Sandra Haight October 25, 2014 at 10:06 AM Hi Carrie, I enjoyed your poem and could almost feel the motion of people bustling to board the train and it streaking away like lightening--like a silver streak. Congratulations on your win. Sandra

Dr. Upma A. Sharma October 25, 2014 at 7:51 AM Grest write Carrie n awesome win! Big congrats !

Maurice Yvonne October 25, 2014 at 6:31 AM Congratulations on your win.

Jan Allison October 25, 2014 at 4:24 AM dropping back with my congratulations Carrie:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Kayod5 Kayode October 25, 2014 at 3:05 AM Congrats Carrie,I'm not surprised.

Dr.Ram Mehta October 25, 2014 at 1:42 AM Nicely penned poem, carrie, congrats on the win

Andrea Dietrich October 25, 2014 at 12:56 AM CArrie, what a great way to use the speed of the train to show it GONE at the end with the one word!! GREAT way to do this type of poem, so I put you high for your inventiveness. Congrats on your silver streak winner.

Ravindra K Kapoor October 17, 2014 at 11:34 PM What a picturesque remembrance of traveling by train. You have made it more wonderful in this great write dear friend Carrie. Train's shape or forms may change but its sweet image in our hearts would continue to live with a sweetness to inspire us for creating such sweet Poem like yours. My good wishes for your contest entry and thank you once again for your precious comments on my Blog. Love and best wishes always....Ravindra K kapoor

Barbara Gorelick October 17, 2014 at 6:22 PM I found myself going faster and faster as I read your poem. Its terrific. ! BG

Maurice Yvonne October 17, 2014 at 6:11 PM Andrea is going to love this one. A great composition. Love it!

Jan Allison October 17, 2014 at 5:41 PM brilliant descriptive write Carrie:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx