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Silver Betrayal

as dark	
clouds cumulate
sol goes into hiding
until betrayed by a silver
lining

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Contest: Cinquain Express Train
Sponsor: John Anderson
Placed 1st
© 30th May 2017

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Andrea Dietrich

September 28, 2020 at 1:39 PM

decided to revisit another trophy win of yours. This was so well deserved

Paul Callus

September 29, 2020 at 5:44 AM

Revisits are as welcome as the first visit, Andrea :) At present busy with proofreading and writing lyrics for songs. Time to post some fresh material on Soup!! Regards // paul

Vladislav Raven

July 19, 2018 at 8:34 AM

Hi Paul, an excellent Cinguain from a golden pen. Your words paint a wonderful canvas in the mind. In so few words you encapsulate the vision. I wish i had you skill in doing so. Very belated congratulations on your trophy win. Your words shall always sing in the mind. Have a wonderful Thursday Paul. Your friend always....Mike.

Paul Callus

September 29, 2020 at 5:42 AM

Once again thank you for your encouraging and complimentary visit, Mike. I have noticed that several of my replies to your comments keep disappearing! Have a nice day, my friend. // paul

Susan Ashley

November 19, 2017 at 10:05 PM

Paul, your write is just breathtaking! Such splendid, animated imagery and word play making superb poetry. Beautiful artistry my very talented friend.. and a well deserved congratulations for bring home the trophy too! Warmest wishes..

Paul Callus

November 21, 2017 at 3:03 PM

Thank you for the beautiful feedback and your continuous support, Susan. If somebody is talented, then it is undoubtedly you; I'm always in awe of your writing. ~ Warm regards // paul

Freddie Robinson Jr.

August 24, 2017 at 4:39 AM

I love this poem, Paul. Succinct w/wit and a marvelous play on words. Is that a silver trophy ...lol! Wonderful Cinquain poem, my friend. Love and smiles.

Paul Callus

August 25, 2017 at 12:12 PM

Thank you, my friend. Silverware is hard to come by:) Best regards // paul

Debbie Duncan

July 2, 2017 at 10:54 PM

Great write, congrats on your trophy win :)

Paul Callus

July 5, 2017 at 4:18 PM

Thank you, Debbie! A pleasure to have you stopping by:) Regards // paul

Bl Devnath

June 26, 2017 at 11:07 AM

Class one poem my lovely dear friend. A great congrats to you. Loved always, bl

Paul Callus

June 26, 2017 at 3:30 PM

Many thanks, my friend. Best regards // paul

Joanna Daniel

June 2, 2017 at 7:39 AM

This is excellent, Paul, congratulations on your trophy win, well deserved:) I like that thought of sun being betrayed..

Paul Callus

June 4, 2017 at 10:22 AM

Thank you for stopping by, Jo. Your congrats and feedback are truly appreciated. Regards // paul

John Michaels

June 1, 2017 at 1:39 AM

Congratulations on your stunning write. A very well-deserved First Place! Regards, John.

Paul Callus

June 4, 2017 at 10:20 AM

Thank you, John. A win is always an encouraging boost. Regards // paul

Jan Allison

May 31, 2017 at 5:17 PM

dropping back with my congrats I knew this would be a winner Paul:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

June 4, 2017 at 9:21 AM

Hi Jan...incidentally I've just commented on your winning entry! Thank you for revisiting. Hugs // paul

Rob Carmack

May 31, 2017 at 4:21 PM

Congrats Paul.

Paul Callus

June 4, 2017 at 9:57 AM

Thank you, Rob. Regards // paul

Alexis Y.

May 31, 2017 at 2:05 PM

WoW! Paul, You penned a well written Cinquain. Congratulations on your top win. It was most definitely well deserved: -) Alexis

Paul Callus

June 4, 2017 at 9:57 AM

Many thanks, Alexis. First place was definitely a surprise! Regards // paul

Laura Leiser

May 31, 2017 at 11:25 AM

Excellent, Paul! Congrats on your top win, well deserved! :)

Paul Callus

June 4, 2017 at 9:45 AM

Thank you, Laura; both your comments and congrats are appreciated. Regards:) paul

Janis Medders Tobechi

May 31, 2017 at 11:07 AM

I knew this would be a winner. Congratulations on your trophy win.

Paul Callus

June 4, 2017 at 9:38 AM

Thank you for the faith you showed in it, Janis, and for the congrats. Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux

May 31, 2017 at 10:41 AM

Also a big congrats on first place!

Richard Lamoureux

May 31, 2017 at 10:40 AM

Ha ha, very clever my friend!

Paul Callus

June 4, 2017 at 9:37 AM

Thank you Richard; pleased you enjoyed. Hope you're keeping well. Regards // paul

Dean Wood

May 31, 2017 at 8:08 AM

Nice job Paul! A very nice piece. "Cumulate" I like that! - Dean

Paul Callus

June 4, 2017 at 8:59 AM

Thank you, Dean. Regards // paul

Maria Williams

May 31, 2017 at 7:51 AM

This is so clever Paul - The sun gets caught out, serves him right for trying to hide - doesn't that happen in real life too! Congrats on the trophy, it is well deserved and well won!...Maria

Paul Callus

June 4, 2017 at 9:36 AM

Your generous comments are truly appreciated, Maria; thank you! Regards // paul

Eve Roper

May 31, 2017 at 7:38 AM

Wonderful imagery, Paul, in such a few lines... Congratulations on your 1st place win~*

Paul Callus

June 3, 2017 at 10:23 AM

Thank you, Eve. Now I know what these trophies look like:) ~ Regards // paul

White Wolf

May 31, 2017 at 7:00 AM

Well done, Paul! Lovely piece! Congrats mate

Paul Callus

June 3, 2017 at 9:56 AM

Thank you Rick. Congrats on your fine winning entry. Regards // paul

Reason A. Poteet

May 31, 2017 at 6:35 AM

picture perfect, Paul. Love the connections here. Congratulations on your well-hewn piece and your placement.

Paul Callus

June 3, 2017 at 10:13 AM

I am so pleased that you like it, Reason. Thank you for the lovely comments and congrats. Regards // paul

Joseph May

May 31, 2017 at 5:47 AM

You get the gold with this silver lining Paul..Congrats on your win

Paul Callus

June 3, 2017 at 10:04 AM

I like how you put it, Joseph:) Thank you. Regards // paul

John Beam

May 31, 2017 at 5:05 AM

Congratulations Paul on win.

Paul Callus

June 3, 2017 at 9:48 AM

Thank you, John. Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

May 31, 2017 at 4:32 AM

Oh, I love this wonderful Cinquain Paul. It has a double meaning. These little guys are a challenge to create and yours is so deserving of first place trophy! Congratulations my friend. Encore, encore! Bravo!! 7 ; )

Paul Callus

June 3, 2017 at 9:25 AM

Thank you for your generosity, Connie...I bow to you:) wishing you a lovely weekend. Regards // paul