Silent Goodbye

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I forgot myself today
as melancholic melodies 
overwhelm each beat
of my wandering heart.

The sanctimonious sun deceives
as a bitter breeze breathes
against sullen silent surfaces.

Recycled emotions penetrate
with a repetition of deep sighs.
My spiritless soul strays, but is
happy to be lost in lyrical lament.

As the Nightingale chants its
continuous regretful resonance,
the tip of my tongue aches
to whisper your amorous name, but 
holds back knowing you can't hear.

Without your enchanted vision,
neglected eyes perish. 
Without your perfumed presence,
senses remain scentless.
Without your tender touch,
fragile petals won't blossom. 

As a cascade of sandcastle emotions
infiltrate stubborn sierra barriers.
Violent tears erupt,
demolishing hardened walls.
What used to be bitter breaths and 
spiteful sighs are now regretful cries.

Your silent goodbye still haunts
as the lips grieve for one last kiss.
I forgot myself today,
but have not forgotten your love.

The Silent One
Simple Musing
29 November 2017 
(Fiction)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 9/10/2018 10:06:00 PM
your emotive urge always swims n sinks to the mind of reader. Fantastic poem as usual. Blessing
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Date: 8/29/2018 3:25:00 PM
Beautiful.
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Date: 4/6/2018 4:05:00 PM
Beautiful Poem, Oh Silent one...
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Date: 3/20/2018 10:24:00 AM
I play this song on the piano...lol Not regularly, but have before. There are so many beautiful memorable lines in this poem - I really like, "As a cascade of sandcastle emotions infiltrate stubborn sierra barriers." Wow! "I forgot myself today" Last line is deep as well, how you bring it back from it's presence in the beginning, finishing it with final thoughts. Always, Laura
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Date: 2/7/2018 10:01:00 PM
Beautifully written, silent one.
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Date: 12/26/2017 11:48:00 AM
Superb piece wonderfully expressed. Musing is in boom, loved to read this artistic one. Loved always my lovely friend, bl
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Date: 12/5/2017 7:50:00 PM
Amazing but why should I be surprised! You are very gifted my good buddy! Proud to call you a friend!!! Your Canadian Benny Hill! CHEERS!!!
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Silent One
Date: 12/8/2017 6:37:00 AM
Thank you my friend, so nice to see you..
Date: 12/4/2017 9:50:00 AM
One would never guess it was fiction, the way you touch us with your words, Silent One, exceptional writing, Sir (I'll call you that just this once, please) :)
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Silent One
Date: 12/4/2017 10:37:00 AM
No need for sir, but thank you..
Date: 12/3/2017 9:41:00 AM
Truly amazing! You are obviously very gifted. Kind of makes me want to cry or get drunk! Love it! Absolutely a FAV for me!
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Silent One
Date: 12/4/2017 10:39:00 AM
Thank you Pat..
Date: 12/3/2017 2:10:00 AM
Excellent. A beautiful introspective profound write my friend. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.
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Silent One
Date: 12/4/2017 10:45:00 AM
Thank you..
Date: 12/2/2017 6:05:00 PM
I need another glass of wine after this... I still remember! I have to forget....
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Silent One
Date: 12/4/2017 10:48:00 AM
Go steady on that wine my friend, people who are intoxicated act a bit silly sometimes..
Date: 12/2/2017 5:59:00 PM
A poem for a captive audience. love this wonderful poetry
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Silent One
Date: 12/4/2017 10:49:00 AM
Thank you Harry..
Date: 12/2/2017 11:09:00 AM
very sad and beautiful like always Hugs Eve ~`*
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Silent One
Date: 12/2/2017 3:16:00 PM
Thank you Eve.
Date: 12/2/2017 9:35:00 AM
An emotionally charged poem w/feelings of deep love expressed, SO. Your pen reaches deep into the heart of things. Exquisite poetry. Love and joy always.
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Silent One
Date: 12/2/2017 3:17:00 PM
Thank you Freddie..
Date: 12/1/2017 9:57:00 PM
Silent One, your deeply melancholic lamentations strum my heartstrings with your lyrical lost love prose. I think you excel in this form, I just adore how your thoughts unfurl emotionally line by heartfelt line. Your lovely alliteration enhances the deep feelings of your poem. The sad violin is musically stunning and adds a haunting sadness to the atmosphere of your poetic presentation. Your heartache and heartbreak is artistically and superbly expressed..
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Silent One
Date: 12/2/2017 3:19:00 PM
Just fictional... Thank you Susan..
Date: 12/1/2017 9:03:00 PM
Fiction but very well expressed emotion of sadness. I particularly like the stanza that begins: without your enchanted vision and that one line: a bitter breeze breathes. Great use of alliteration there. Other great lines of images I enjoyed as well in this simple musing!!
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Silent One
Date: 12/2/2017 3:20:00 PM
Thank you Andrea..
Date: 12/1/2017 2:37:00 PM
WOW I am at a loss for words. Your deft pen has brought back goodbyes that haunt for ever.
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Silent One
Date: 12/1/2017 2:38:00 PM
Thank you Patricia..
Date: 12/1/2017 12:14:00 PM
The lament of heartbreak...Great write Silent
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Silent One
Date: 12/1/2017 2:38:00 PM
Thank you Joseph..
Date: 12/1/2017 1:21:00 AM
Reading this piece while listening to the music adds another dimension to the experience.
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Silent One
Date: 12/1/2017 2:51:00 PM
Thank you Richard..
Date: 11/30/2017 11:34:00 PM
Heartache and loss in abundance. Such emotion and imagery. Sadness and a bit of craziness written by your magic splendor. This is another great poem you have written.
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Silent One
Date: 12/1/2017 2:51:00 PM
Thank you James..
Date: 11/30/2017 9:34:00 AM
Love the music...love your poem...and love you too my Silent friend...a friendly love, of course, lol...happy holidays...^WW^
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Silent One
Date: 11/30/2017 3:07:00 PM
Thank you WW...
Date: 11/30/2017 7:43:00 AM
A beautiful introspective profound write Silent One!~Che :)
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Silent One
Date: 11/30/2017 3:04:00 PM
Thank you Cheryl..
Date: 11/30/2017 1:22:00 AM
Exceptional work as always Si, your words and lines out of this world. I love the last two lines, concluding is perfect. I agree with one of the comments below, it would make a perfect song. The haunting strains of the violin are the perfect choice for this.....Maria
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Silent One
Date: 11/30/2017 3:02:00 PM
Thank you Maria..
Date: 11/29/2017 10:40:00 PM
"I forgot myself today" ... what an amazing opening line. Love the melancholic feel to this.
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Silent One
Date: 11/30/2017 3:01:00 PM
Thank you Becca.. Everyone forgets themselves, sometimes...
Date: 11/29/2017 8:39:00 PM
I saw your title earlier and I immediately scrolled by, I was afraid to read it thinking you were going to leave...again! Lol! I can't help feeling the pain in the silent of your goodbye. Sad yet so beautiful! I love it :) hugs and smiles :)
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Silent One
Date: 11/30/2017 3:00:00 PM
Thank you Akkina.. No not leaving...
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