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Silent Goodbye

I forgot myself today
as melancholic melodies 
overwhelm each beat
of my wandering heart.

The sanctimonious sun deceives
as a bitter breeze breathes
against sullen silent surfaces.

Recycled emotions penetrate
with a repetition of deep sighs.
My spiritless soul strays, but is
happy to be lost in lyrical lament.

As the Nightingale chants its
continuous regretful resonance,
the tip of my tongue aches
to whisper your amorous name, but 
holds back knowing you can't hear.

Without your enchanted vision,
neglected eyes perish. 
Without your perfumed presence,
senses remain scentless.
Without your tender touch,
fragile petals won't blossom. 

As a cascade of sandcastle emotions
infiltrate stubborn sierra barriers.
Violent tears erupt,
demolishing hardened walls.
What used to be bitter breaths and 
spiteful sighs are now regretful cries.

Your silent goodbye still haunts
as the lips grieve for one last kiss.
I forgot myself today,
but have not forgotten your love.

The Silent One
Simple Musing
29 November 2017 
(Fiction)
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Dutta Avatar
September 10, 2018 at 10:06 PM
your emotive urge always swims n sinks to the mind of reader. Fantastic poem as usual. Blessing
Lovejoy-Burton Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 3:25 PM
Beautiful.
Johnson Avatar
April 6, 2018 at 4:05 PM
Beautiful Poem, Oh Silent one...
Breidenthal Avatar
March 20, 2018 at 10:24 AM
I play this song on the piano...lol Not regularly, but have before. There are so many beautiful memorable lines in this poem - I really like, "As a cascade of sandcastle emotions infiltrate stubborn sierra barriers." Wow! "I forgot myself today" Last line is deep as well, how you bring it back from it's presence in the beginning, finishing it with final thoughts. Always, Laura
Payton Avatar
February 7, 2018 at 10:01 PM
Beautifully written, silent one.
Devnath  Avatar
December 26, 2017 at 11:48 AM
Superb piece wonderfully expressed. Musing is in boom, loved to read this artistic one. Loved always my lovely friend, bl
Ellison Avatar
December 5, 2017 at 7:50 PM
Amazing but why should I be surprised! You are very gifted my good buddy! Proud to call you a friend!!! Your Canadian Benny Hill! CHEERS!!!
One Avatar
December 8, 2017 at 6:37 AM
Thank you my friend, so nice to see you..
Daniel Avatar
December 4, 2017 at 9:50 AM
One would never guess it was fiction, the way you touch us with your words, Silent One, exceptional writing, Sir (I'll call you that just this once, please) :)
One Avatar
December 4, 2017 at 10:37 AM
No need for sir, but thank you..
Adams Avatar
December 3, 2017 at 9:41 AM
Truly amazing! You are obviously very gifted. Kind of makes me want to cry or get drunk! Love it! Absolutely a FAV for me!
One Avatar
December 4, 2017 at 10:39 AM
Thank you Pat..
Sathasivam Avatar
December 3, 2017 at 2:10 AM
Excellent. A beautiful introspective profound write my friend. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.
One Avatar
December 4, 2017 at 10:45 AM
Thank you..
Salehi Avatar
December 2, 2017 at 6:05 PM
I need another glass of wine after this... I still remember! I have to forget....
One Avatar
December 4, 2017 at 10:48 AM
Go steady on that wine my friend, people who are intoxicated act a bit silly sometimes..
Horsman Avatar
December 2, 2017 at 5:59 PM
A poem for a captive audience. love this wonderful poetry
One Avatar
December 4, 2017 at 10:49 AM
Thank you Harry..
Roper Avatar
December 2, 2017 at 11:09 AM
very sad and beautiful like always Hugs Eve ~`*
One Avatar
December 2, 2017 at 3:16 PM
Thank you Eve.
Robinson Jr. Avatar
December 2, 2017 at 9:35 AM
An emotionally charged poem w/feelings of deep love expressed, SO. Your pen reaches deep into the heart of things. Exquisite poetry. Love and joy always.
One Avatar
December 2, 2017 at 3:17 PM
Thank you Freddie..
Ashley Avatar
December 1, 2017 at 9:57 PM
Silent One, your deeply melancholic lamentations strum my heartstrings with your lyrical lost love prose. I think you excel in this form, I just adore how your thoughts unfurl emotionally line by heartfelt line. Your lovely alliteration enhances the deep feelings of your poem. The sad violin is musically stunning and adds a haunting sadness to the atmosphere of your poetic presentation. Your heartache and heartbreak is artistically and superbly expressed..
One Avatar
December 2, 2017 at 3:19 PM
Just fictional... Thank you Susan..
Dietrich Avatar
December 1, 2017 at 9:03 PM
Fiction but very well expressed emotion of sadness. I particularly like the stanza that begins: without your enchanted vision and that one line: a bitter breeze breathes. Great use of alliteration there. Other great lines of images I enjoyed as well in this simple musing!!
One Avatar
December 2, 2017 at 3:20 PM
Thank you Andrea..
Cresswell Avatar
December 1, 2017 at 2:37 PM
WOW I am at a loss for words. Your deft pen has brought back goodbyes that haunt for ever.
One Avatar
December 1, 2017 at 2:38 PM
Thank you Patricia..
May Avatar
December 1, 2017 at 12:14 PM
The lament of heartbreak...Great write Silent
One Avatar
December 1, 2017 at 2:38 PM
Thank you Joseph..
Lamoureux Avatar
December 1, 2017 at 1:21 AM
Reading this piece while listening to the music adds another dimension to the experience.
One Avatar
December 1, 2017 at 2:51 PM
Thank you Richard..
Swartz Avatar
November 30, 2017 at 11:34 PM
Heartache and loss in abundance. Such emotion and imagery. Sadness and a bit of craziness written by your magic splendor. This is another great poem you have written.
One Avatar
December 1, 2017 at 2:51 PM
Thank you James..
Warrior Avatar
November 30, 2017 at 9:34 AM
Love the music...love your poem...and love you too my Silent friend...a friendly love, of course, lol...happy holidays...^WW^
One Avatar
November 30, 2017 at 3:07 PM
Thank you WW...
Hoffman Avatar
November 30, 2017 at 7:43 AM
A beautiful introspective profound write Silent One!~Che :)
One Avatar
November 30, 2017 at 3:04 PM
Thank you Cheryl..
Williams Avatar
November 30, 2017 at 1:22 AM
Exceptional work as always Si, your words and lines out of this world. I love the last two lines, concluding is perfect. I agree with one of the comments below, it would make a perfect song. The haunting strains of the violin are the perfect choice for this.....Maria
One Avatar
November 30, 2017 at 3:02 PM
Thank you Maria..
Teagan Avatar
November 29, 2017 at 10:40 PM
"I forgot myself today" ... what an amazing opening line. Love the melancholic feel to this.
One Avatar
November 30, 2017 at 3:01 PM
Thank you Becca.. Everyone forgets themselves, sometimes...
Downing  Avatar
November 29, 2017 at 8:39 PM
I saw your title earlier and I immediately scrolled by, I was afraid to read it thinking you were going to leave...again! Lol! I can't help feeling the pain in the silent of your goodbye. Sad yet so beautiful! I love it :) hugs and smiles :)
One Avatar
November 30, 2017 at 3:00 PM
Thank you Akkina.. No not leaving...
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