Shores

While living deep I realise I can Go deeper still to try and find my man The man in I that searches and implores The man that wonders walks along these shores Amphibian I crawl out from the sea And brain evolves as something just like me Then stand up straight and wander on this beach And pain it strikes when I stretch out to reach Where is this place and what should I do here This place that’s full of treachery and fear There’s awesome beauty also everywhere Such beauty that a mind can scarce compare We living things are lonesome and we’re here Together on these shores we hold so dear

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Gert W. Knop

Date: 7/22/2010 4:29:00 AM

Very well penned Sonnet, David! It comes straight from the heart! Would be nice if you could comment some of my writes....Have yourself a nice day in Dublin...Gert

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 7/21/2010 6:59:00 AM

Sorry, It's English or Shakespearean sonnet, alright.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 7/21/2010 6:57:00 AM

Well worded and well penned sonnet. I enjoyed it. Is it Italian or English sonnet?

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 7/21/2010 4:21:00 AM

great write!! I don't like to think we fell out of a tree or the ocean though...

C.C Bloomsfield

Date: 7/21/2010 2:19:00 AM

To be lonesome and yet in search,to be on those shores sounds somehow lonely yet not alone,romantic and beautiful!C.C

Caroline Cécile Delacroix

Date: 7/20/2010 7:24:00 PM

Another interesting and beautiful write, David! But I believe we, amphibians, as you say, are not meant to be lonesome.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/20/2010 7:01:00 PM

and THIS is a very interesting sonnet, David. Some great thinking going on in here! Luv, Andrea

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 7/20/2010 6:57:00 PM

Where's that positive spin my friend? what u write sinks into your inner man.. this is telling u are hurting .. lets cast that off and get busy with the going forward with a prize of a woman ... in your life.. it WILL happen.. its all about timing my friend.. with luv..

Jessica Arteaga

Date: 7/20/2010 6:39:00 PM

lovely sonnet every line is great