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Meme by Mel Leach

Shooting Star

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Voice: Jason Williams

STARS IN THE SKY 

I'm standing on the shore and high above
The roar of waves and rustling of the trees,
A light is shining in the darkening sky,
While sun is drowning in its warmest glow.

I look up waiting for the one to show,
Its magic glow will warm my frozen heart.
That special light that sun nor moon can bring.
A sparkle jumping to my inner self.

I aim my wish up high and from my chest
My heart pleads to my shooting star above:
"Lift me up high and make me see from far
How you reach out and set my being free."

My white star softly strokes my hair and smiles,
While from his hands the moondust spreads around.
My bright star lifts the darkness from my soul,
In several myriad coloured specs of light.

And in his hands I beam and come alive,
Accept the dark night just for what it is:
A blanket, warm, to keep the light inside,
Embracing starlight deep within myself.

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8th place in contest: Shooting blank verse
Sponsor: John Lawless

Copyright © Darren White | Year Posted 2016

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Jason Williams Date: 12/17/2016 7:30:00 PM Oooh, this is the one you wrote for me! I'm so glad you introduced me to poetrysoup Darren. You'll probably see more of me, now that I'm finally figuring out how to navigate this confusing site. hehe. You already know I love this one. Thanks for penning this request for me boo. ;-) Login to Reply Darren White Date: 12/17/2016 11:56:00 PM Your poem, your voice, your request. It is all for and from you <3

Sandra Haight Date: 12/11/2016 7:49:00 PM Beautifully written in Blank Verse form, Darren, with such excellent meter. Congratulations on your placement. Sandra Login to Reply Darren White Date: 12/11/2016 10:17:00 PM Sandra, thank you, I love this poem myself too, very much :)

Janice Canerdy Date: 12/10/2016 10:43:00 PM A 7 for this beautiful, WINNING poem, Darren! Janice Login to Reply Darren White Date: 12/10/2016 11:38:00 PM Janice, thank you, I am honoured with a 7 :)

Reason A. Poteet Date: 12/10/2016 10:05:00 PM Congratulations, Darren. It deserved a bit higher placement in my estimation. But when there are many good entries of blank verse, it is hard for a host to choose. Love the rhythm of your words. Login to Reply Darren White Date: 12/10/2016 11:37:00 PM It's quite alright, I am happy with my placement! Thank you for reading it and yes, I agree, the rhythm and cadence is very much alright, I worked hard to make it a continuous, soothing lullaby.

Deborah Burch Date: 12/10/2016 9:40:00 PM Congrats Darren!!!! Big Hugggs! Deb Login to Reply Darren White Date: 12/10/2016 11:36:00 PM YAY, Thanks :) Hugs back.

Agnes Krampe Date: 12/10/2016 6:10:00 PM Beautiful, Darren. Congrats on your placement. Login to Reply Darren White Date: 12/10/2016 11:35:00 PM Agnes, thank you.

Doug Vinson Date: 12/10/2016 2:46:00 PM I love astronomical stuff, Darren. : ) Your voice sounds like mine, especially mine when I had more your years. Lots of us rarely if ever hear our own recorded voice, and I guess those voices age with us. I usually read silently or whisper to myself, sounding out rhythm and meter, counting syllables, etc., bent forward and down over the computer. When I actually try and read aloud, sometimes I can hardly speak. Login to Reply Doug Vinson Date: 12/10/2016 2:59:00 PM Well, nice to hear your boyfriend, both your voices, in effect. Darren White Date: 12/10/2016 2:49:00 PM Oops, I forgot to add that this is my boyfrien'd's voice! Will change that straight away. I myself stutter so badly that me reading my own poems would be a real joke hahahaha. I understand that reading aloud thing perfectly.

Paloma P Date: 11/16/2016 9:17:00 AM Lovely, I especially like the last stanza, it could stand on its own. Good luck Darren. :) Login to Reply Darren White Date: 11/16/2016 9:23:00 AM You are right :) I have written the poem for my boyfriend. Because of that I will leave it intact. it could very well be the last stanza only indeed... And thanks.

Jan Allison Date: 11/15/2016 11:43:00 PM so beautiful, so uplifting Darren. the imagery is so so lovely. Good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx Login to Reply Darren White Date: 11/15/2016 11:45:00 PM Thank Jan, we'll see what happens :) Darren White Date: 11/15/2016 11:45:00 PM And good morning to you!

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 11/15/2016 8:20:00 AM - A warm and lovely poem, Darren ... a picture of beauty - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Darren White Date: 11/15/2016 8:37:00 AM Thank you Anne-Lise :)

Arthur Vaso Date: 11/14/2016 9:51:00 PM Many a poem on this title, however this one is exceptionally good! Great write! Was a pleasure to read this! Login to Reply Darren White Date: 11/14/2016 10:53:00 PM Thank you so very much, that is a great compliment :)

Chris Green Date: 11/14/2016 2:47:00 PM Really nice Darren, good luck in the contest Login to Reply Darren White Date: 11/14/2016 2:48:00 PM Thanks, Chris :)