Shooting Star

Tumbling randomly without any semblance of grace
Without any companion or a familiar face
No path to tread, no orbit to trace
Just a nameless rock, in the cold infinite space

The distances are large and encounters few
Constant darkness, never a soothing hue
Fear and desolation seem to be my only friends
As I fly through space that has no end

From a great distance I see your light
Burning brightly and I exert with all my might
To turn towards what could be my first sight
Of a world without darkness and fright

Being alone in space leaves me free
Free to make decisions, free to be me
But would I like to be alone, make it my destiny
Or should I be pulled by the love of gravity

But it is tough to resist the allure of light
And I make my decision, hoping it is right
I fly towards you, feeling no remorse
And I feel the pleasure of you pulling me close

I am happy that your love I feel
And I approach you with a lot of zeal
Knowing that my loneliness you will heal
Although your love, my fate it will seal

I feel pain as your love tears me apart
I start to burn, but in my heart
I feel love, in every recess small
It's better to have felt love, than not have known it at all

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Date: 1/25/2017 5:48:00 AM
I like the rhyme, monorhyme intermixed with the abab. Thought processes moving along with the poem gives its flow and impact. Congratulations, Manoj.
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Manoj Kumar
Date: 5/9/2017 8:59:00 PM
Thanks so much
Date: 1/24/2017 4:01:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Mahoj. Beautiful poem.
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Manoj Kumar
Date: 1/25/2017 1:32:00 AM
Thank You Agnes
Date: 1/24/2017 3:55:00 PM
Beautifully done!
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Manoj Kumar
Date: 1/25/2017 1:32:00 AM
Thank You Alona
Date: 1/24/2017 2:27:00 PM
Deep words.....I can almost feel their texture in my soul.... Congrats Manoj, for your third placement in the contest!!! ;-)
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Manoj Kumar
Date: 1/25/2017 1:33:00 AM
Thank You Teddy
Date: 1/24/2017 10:05:00 AM
beautiful Manoj, congrats on your placement :)-luloo
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Manoj Kumar
Date: 1/25/2017 1:32:00 AM
Thank You Laura. Congratulations on the win. God bless
Date: 1/24/2017 3:47:00 AM
So very true, sometimes love destroys us but it is always worth the risk. Your poem did not need to have an explanation, it is clear in its grace and beauty! Congratulations on your deserving third placement! 7 : )
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Manoj Kumar
Date: 1/25/2017 1:33:00 AM
Thank You Connie
Date: 7/3/2016 6:39:00 AM
Unique, enjoyable expressions take us to love's destructive destination and I was willingly absorbed by each moment of the trip. A great read, unpredictable and rocking. Why choose Free Verse for form when rhyme is so prime in your poem? Again, I enjoyed this winning write ... CayCay
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Manoj Kumar
Date: 7/17/2016 11:08:00 PM
Thanks CayCay
Date: 6/25/2016 7:56:00 AM
Nice spin on the contest and congrats on your 2nd place win! Jesse
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Manoj Kumar
Date: 7/17/2016 11:09:00 PM
Thanks Jesse
Date: 6/23/2016 9:30:00 AM
hearty congrats dear Manoj ...Kudos...well done!!!!!............love, Anu:)
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Manoj Kumar
Date: 6/24/2016 1:31:00 AM
Thank you Anu:)
Date: 6/23/2016 7:19:00 AM
My dear Manoj! I am so glad that you are back after quite some time. And what a fabulous entry - with a fabulous entry and a fantastic placement. Congratulations! And let's see more of your great poems. ~karam~
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Manoj Kumar
Date: 6/24/2016 1:31:00 AM
Thank you Sir
Date: 6/17/2016 7:45:00 AM
oh that ending really resonates with me. This one is kind of sad and yet I love this kind of a poem. The metaphor of the lonely star shooting through space!
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Manoj Kumar
Date: 6/24/2016 1:32:00 AM
Thanks for taking the time to read Andrea. Thanks for the kind words
Date: 6/17/2016 7:43:00 AM
so glad you found that rondeau of mine. If you ever want to know other forms and my favorites in those forms, let me know. Now let me see this new poem of yours.
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Date: 6/16/2016 5:01:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your creative lines.I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Thanks for stopping by and reading my work..Sara
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Manoj Kumar
Date: 6/17/2016 1:45:00 AM
Thank you Sara. These comments mean a lot coming from a person of your stature. God bless:)
Date: 6/16/2016 12:29:00 PM
Dear Manoj, a beautiful poem which is deep and emotional, Kudos!...love, Anu:)
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Manoj Kumar
Date: 6/17/2016 1:42:00 AM
Thank you Anu :)
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