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Purely fictional...lol!

SHOOTING BLANKS I’m shooting blanks into the day, when I can’t have my way, and talking to myself, Of pain, of bitter truth, and lies. I cry, And leave a stain, a heart in pain – yes, both. Then love grabs hands, “can’t we just get along?” My knees drop low, to beg, forgive - he laughs! Tis all a joke! I’m played as fool! I aim my hate into his eyes, this time no blanks. It stings so hard, he falters sweet. I laugh! This time he cries. He hears me say a line: “why man, can’t we just get along,” - to mock! Bang, bang! Your dead! And I am not. I walk. 11/17/2016

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Date: 12/3/2016 4:40:00 AM
Wow, that's a great blank verse poem! Very well done... Good luck in the contest :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/3/2016 8:15:00 AM
Thank you, Darren!
Date: 11/28/2016 12:43:00 PM
Chop 'em off at the knees! Well executed;-) Enjoyed ~ john
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/28/2016 12:57:00 PM
Thank you...lol!
Date: 11/17/2016 7:25:00 PM
oh my, you took the title of the contest into account as well!! GREAT blank verse, Kim. Not too many really understand what it is, but you sure do.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/17/2016 8:01:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea! :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/17/2016 8:01:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea! :)
Date: 11/17/2016 11:19:00 AM
highly-spirited piece, kim.. you delight with your wise female spirit..huggs
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/17/2016 11:23:00 AM
Thank you, Nette! xo

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