Shoo Fly

This fly's been avoiding me As I have a fly swatter He is quite a large horse fly Finally he's near He lands square on my shoulder Can't swat him, he will bite me And he did, ow, he can bite Andrea's bitten Russell Sivey Entrant into Linda-Marie's "!!!BITE ME!!!" contest 4/6/2012

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 4/19/2012 6:37:00 PM

Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Karen Croft

Date: 4/16/2012 2:26:00 PM

congrats!!

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/16/2012 11:45:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved placement in Linda-Marie's "Bite Me" contest Russell. Love, Carol

Joann Grisetti

Date: 4/15/2012 8:05:00 AM

Congratulations on your first place. And they do hurt.

Gautami Phookan

Date: 4/15/2012 3:25:00 AM

Congrats Russell,, Cheers for awesome first place!!

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 4/15/2012 1:46:00 AM

Congratulations on your super win Russell xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/14/2012 11:13:00 PM

Russell, a super congrats!!! this was a fun contest... good night ;-) xox~PD

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 4/14/2012 8:54:00 PM

Congratulation, Russell. Hooray, first place!! Blessings, Rhonda

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/14/2012 8:43:00 PM

awesome to see the shoo fly that bit me got first place. that dang thing. Big congrats, Russell.

Joyce Johnson

Date: 4/14/2012 8:33:00 PM

Funny one and a big winner Congratulations. Love, Joyce

Deborah Burch

Date: 4/14/2012 7:46:00 PM

Congratulations Russell!! on your win! those horse flys are huge!! lol big hugs,love deb

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/14/2012 7:19:00 PM

congrats Russell on a first place win for a super entry luv..

Tim B

Date: 4/6/2012 2:50:00 PM

Well written Russell, as noted you really build the suspense. Those flies will always come to bite, sometimes the more we want to swat them, the more impossible it is made for us to do so. Darn flies :). Good stuff, have a great day.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/6/2012 11:11:00 AM

I can just hear Andrea screaming, "Get that fly away from me!" This is witty and wonderfully written, Russell. I like the way you build the tension before both of you get bitten. Winning wishes for my friend! Love, Carolyn

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/6/2012 8:52:00 AM

don't forget to enter your poem Russell.. u do not have to wait for Andrea to write one luv..

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/6/2012 8:41:00 AM

hey, how did I get bitten when it was YOUR shoulder? hahahaha. Ok, let me go find this contest to know what the heck is going on around here!!! thanks for the BITE. Luv, Andrea

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/6/2012 8:22:00 AM

great one Russell and so glad I did not confuse u.. now u must lt Andy know u "bit her" so she can enter and "bite" another.. u did all perfectly.. u are special luv.. thankxx for setting a grand example.. and how cool to bite my best friend on PS.. oh boy.. good luck.. luv.. and easter blessings too.. if u have time.. see my blog on Good Friday..