Shoo Fly

This fly's been avoiding me As I have a fly swatter He is quite a large horse fly Finally he's near He lands square on my shoulder Can't swat him, he will bite me And he did, ow, he can bite Andrea's bitten
Russell Sivey Entrant into Linda-Marie's "!!!BITE ME!!!" contest 4/6/2012
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Guzzi Avatar
April 19, 2012 at 6:37 PM
Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
Croft Avatar
April 16, 2012 at 2:26 PM
congrats!!
Brown Avatar
April 16, 2012 at 11:45 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved placement in Linda-Marie's "Bite Me" contest Russell. Love, Carol
Grisetti Avatar
April 15, 2012 at 8:05 AM
Congratulations on your first place. And they do hurt.
Phookan Avatar
April 15, 2012 at 3:25 AM
Congrats Russell,, Cheers for awesome first place!!
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April 15, 2012 at 1:46 AM
Congratulations on your super win Russell xx
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April 14, 2012 at 11:13 PM
Russell, a super congrats!!! this was a fun contest... good night ;-) xox~PD
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April 14, 2012 at 8:54 PM
Congratulation, Russell. Hooray, first place!! Blessings, Rhonda
Dietrich Avatar
April 14, 2012 at 8:43 PM
awesome to see the shoo fly that bit me got first place. that dang thing. Big congrats, Russell.
Johnson Avatar
April 14, 2012 at 8:33 PM
Funny one and a big winner Congratulations. Love, Joyce
Burch Avatar
April 14, 2012 at 7:46 PM
Congratulations Russell!! on your win! those horse flys are huge!! lol big hugs,love deb
Sweetheart Avatar
April 14, 2012 at 7:19 PM
congrats Russell on a first place win for a super entry luv..
B Avatar
April 6, 2012 at 2:50 PM
Well written Russell, as noted you really build the suspense. Those flies will always come to bite, sometimes the more we want to swat them, the more impossible it is made for us to do so. Darn flies :). Good stuff, have a great day.
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April 6, 2012 at 11:11 AM
I can just hear Andrea screaming, "Get that fly away from me!" This is witty and wonderfully written, Russell. I like the way you build the tension before both of you get bitten. Winning wishes for my friend! Love, Carolyn
Sweetheart Avatar
April 6, 2012 at 8:52 AM
don't forget to enter your poem Russell.. u do not have to wait for Andrea to write one luv..
Dietrich Avatar
April 6, 2012 at 8:41 AM
hey, how did I get bitten when it was YOUR shoulder? hahahaha. Ok, let me go find this contest to know what the heck is going on around here!!! thanks for the BITE. Luv, Andrea
Sweetheart Avatar
April 6, 2012 at 8:22 AM
great one Russell and so glad I did not confuse u.. now u must lt Andy know u "bit her" so she can enter and "bite" another.. u did all perfectly.. u are special luv.. thankxx for setting a grand example.. and how cool to bite my best friend on PS.. oh boy.. good luck.. luv.. and easter blessings too.. if u have time.. see my blog on Good Friday..
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