Shining Star

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shines a face from faraway past - twinkling eyes, softest smile, silky hair .... a stylish hat, gorgeous shoes, even a glittering pendant. so perfect ...holds my hand tight, dances a fairy-dance, listens to stories with unperturbed attention... dream of a teacher! in kindergarten, surrounded by angels, all shine like the dazzling stars in illuminated sky, one face ...doesn’t have words to express herself, not that she does mind. as cheerful and chirpy as a parrot, she utters something, with confidence, does it make sense to the world? wonder how the languages were created, wonder...those signs.. who invented! this tiny girl, floats like a sailboat, no care in the world touches her, has created her own language, she tells everything she feels, it’s we, as much as we try, don’t understand. April 15, 2021 FIRST PLACE For Writing Prompt "Shine" Poetry Contest Sponsor: Constance La France

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Constance La France

Date: 4/21/2021 4:13:00 PM

Mala, so sweet, congratulations on your placement in my Writing Prompt Shine Challenge with this beautiful Free Verse poem, so well penned, and I like your chosen image too, love _Constance

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 4/21/2021 4:26:00 PM

Thank you, Constance. I feel so honoured! Your themes and prompts inspire me to write. Really appreciate my placement. Love ~ Mala

Sam Kauffman

Date: 4/21/2021 10:09:00 AM

Mala, truly you have captured the shining star of childhood - of possibility, creativity and light. Your words brought me back into that place of childhood. Wonderful story told in flowing verse and vivid imagery. Congratulations on your win! Much love and many blessings to you!

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 4/21/2021 3:41:00 PM

Thank you, Sam. Your comments always inspire me. Really appreciate your thoughtful words. Love ~ Mala

Jcb Brul

Date: 4/18/2021 7:10:00 AM

So enchanting! Your love for kids is well-depicted in this beautiful poem. More to come!!

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 4/21/2021 3:39:00 PM

Thanks, JCB. I cherish my relationship with my students, and it influences my writing. Love ~ Mala

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/17/2021 4:17:00 PM

so so sweet. What a star she is.

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 4/17/2021 4:23:00 PM

Andrea, You are a teacher - you must have had experiences with special children. I had this child in my first year of teaching ...can't forget. Love ~ Mala

Gershon Wolf

Date: 4/15/2021 4:08:00 PM

Your enchanting description of this girl is a wonderment, Mala! Leaves me suspended somewhere between awe and dazzlingly luminous joy. Enjoyed! Happy Hearts, Gershon

Gershon Wolf
Date: 4/16/2021 1:04:00 PM

btw: Your 'shining star' of a girl is so cute that I could pinch her cheeks right through the picture! Adorable write, Mala.

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 4/15/2021 4:13:00 PM

Dear Poet, I was, honestly, not sure if I was able to express my feelings about this little girl, who was my student in real life. After reading your comment, I am thrilled! Thank you. Really appreciate your inspiring comment. I was very touched by your poem. BW ~ Mala