Shining a Light

You captivate me with your ambiance-
even inside my misguided muse I seek
you with all that my soul has to offer.
I’m hypnotized by the way you look at me
without searching for my becoming flaws,
astounded that the strength in your touch
can make me weak without warning.
You say I am opulent; abundant in beauty-
I wonder if you know you are the magic
that holds the stars up in the eventide sky.

You bring a clarity into my life showing
me what's truly right, denouncing what's
wrong, shining a light into my shadows;
you have brought meaning into a world
that I had thought was meaningless, 
telling me you are incomplete without me.
My essence sparkles when you are near-
brighter than any celestial being.
My existence melts into your warm softness
taking my breath from this magic we create.

A collaboration...



Contest: introduction by collaboration 
Sponsor: silent one
Date:10/2019
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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Hamilton Avatar
November 16, 2019 at 12:26 PM
Great collab Brenda, Lu loo picked a great partner, t's uncanny, really the similarity in style and expression, I did not know exactly what attracted me to your writing, now it all makes sense! congrats to you both!
Chiri Avatar
November 16, 2019 at 9:39 PM
Thank you John! Laura came to me telling me she thought our style was similar and until I wrote with her I didn't realize it before! She is a great writer I'm glad I can attempt to keep up with her! Much appreciated John!;)
Goldsmith Avatar
November 15, 2019 at 12:29 PM
Great Win. The two of you did a "Very Beautiful" poem.....
Chiri Avatar
November 16, 2019 at 9:37 PM
Paula thank you! I appreciate that!;)
Agustin Avatar
November 15, 2019 at 8:32 AM
Wow! Congrats! God bless you.
Chiri Avatar
November 15, 2019 at 10:43 AM
Beata thank you!;)
Gauthier Avatar
November 14, 2019 at 9:58 PM
Congrats on your collaboration and win, Brenda. Well done.
Chiri Avatar
November 15, 2019 at 7:25 AM
Line much appreciated;)
Ligon Avatar
November 14, 2019 at 5:03 PM
This is beautiful. Congrats to both of you!
Chiri Avatar
November 15, 2019 at 7:25 AM
Juliet thank you!;)
Warrior Avatar
November 14, 2019 at 3:25 PM
Back with a (((big huge))) Congrats!!...sissy poo...bro bro proud :o)
Chiri Avatar
November 15, 2019 at 7:24 AM
Thank you bro bro! As always I love reading your comments!;)
Warrior Avatar
November 14, 2019 at 3:26 PM
...and Luloo too :o)
One Avatar
November 14, 2019 at 1:57 PM
What a wonderful collaboration between two great poets.. is this what they call girl power? Great lines in both parts... The aim of this contest was not how high someone places, it was to introduce poets who do not enter contests.... Thanks for taking part..
Chiri Avatar
November 15, 2019 at 7:24 AM
Thank you S1 much appreciated!;)
Robinson Jr. Avatar
October 25, 2019 at 3:30 PM
This is soul ethereal, a dreamy affirmation of love, Brenda. Your golden girl pen shines w/womanly wisdom cast afar, and near and dear to the heart. Platinum caliber poetry, my dear friend. Love and more love always.
Chiri Avatar
October 27, 2019 at 3:46 AM
Thank you so much Freddie I really appreciate your comments as I'm sure lu loo will too! This was a fun collaboration and our styles are similar which made it turn out perfect!;)
Robinson Jr. Avatar
October 25, 2019 at 3:36 PM
Btw ... was listening to this song when I started reading this jewel of a poem. "Novocaine Heart," by Kandace Springs. Love and joy always. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PHlJWhnKVtw
Warrior Avatar
October 22, 2019 at 8:21 AM
((((Wowsers))))...beautifully & elegantly executed by two great poetesses...I bow(with tears running down my face)...and very honored to part of your presence...bro bro :o)
Chiri Avatar
October 22, 2019 at 9:03 AM
Ahhh bro bro thank you so very much! You are a great bro let me tell you! What would I have done if not for you and our sane sisters influence! It really makes me happy to see you think my writing has blossomed! You truly have brought a very big grin to my face!;)
Warrior Avatar
October 22, 2019 at 8:30 AM
Bren, your writing has blossomed beyond measure...you have an alluring appeal...I saw that from the beginning... I pick my sissys well...and of course, Lu Loo, a poetic magician in her own right...love all my sissys...bro bro :o)
Fleming Avatar
October 21, 2019 at 2:35 PM
Lots of richly endowed words come to mind here: sumptuous, luscious, delectable, lavish. It is almost as if you have taken all the best tasting ingredients for a beautifully tasting cake -- and thrown them all into the mixing bowl! An incredible poetic feast, girls -- very well done! My very best regards to you both. :) john
Chiri Avatar
October 22, 2019 at 9:05 AM
Thank you Laura really I enjoyed writing with you so much and you are right our skills are very similar!;) we did very well on this I think!;)
Scars Avatar
October 22, 2019 at 6:51 AM
and don't be silly sweet Brenda, you are amazing :)-luloo
Scars Avatar
October 22, 2019 at 6:49 AM
thank you John, it was my pleasure writing with her :) -luloo
Chiri Avatar
October 21, 2019 at 2:41 PM
John I am so glad you enjoyed this one so much! I did not think I could match Laura's words she is such an amazing writer! Thank you so much!;)
Green Avatar
October 21, 2019 at 1:42 PM
You two write very well together. This was a beautiful collaboration, Best wishes in the contest
Chiri Avatar
October 21, 2019 at 2:25 PM
Thank you Chris you so so kind!;)
Chiri Avatar
October 20, 2019 at 1:14 PM
A collaboration with Lu Loo! It was a pleasure to write with her!
Scars Avatar
October 22, 2019 at 6:50 AM
I could have sworn I posted a comment here yesterday? Anyways, I was honored and your part is perfect :) Be blessed and thanks again :)-luloo
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