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This silhouette against evening sky Etched into my longing eye That trailing gown Coloured setting sun in shimmery Little waves of water, and melancholy My feelings drown In suffocating thoughts of loss Such fragrant perfume, lip-gloss In softly brown longing, framed past loves we live Hanging above dressers, that give A sepia crown Or a halo vague, as my memory Failed one more time, my enemy In this lost town. *** April 11, 2017 Copyright © Darren White

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Sara Ella

Date: 4/12/2017 1:22:00 AM

This is like two poems in one and paints a sad picture but it is cool the way you combine the two. Glad that you are back and hope you are getting better Darren <3

Sara Ella
Date: 4/12/2017 1:22:00 AM

I LOVE the picture too!!! <3

Anne-Marie Coreggia

Date: 4/11/2017 10:46:00 AM

Darren, that is such a sweet and sour poem; it seems imbued with melancholy at long departed loves that are fading from memory, in a 'lost town' that you revisit with sadness. A gorgeous write 7:) Amitiés

Darren White
Date: 4/12/2017 12:24:00 AM

Thank you, and yes, you're indeed close to what I intended to do :)

Tim Smith

Date: 4/11/2017 7:14:00 AM

It transcends a feeling of loss with someone we love heading off into the sunset... Usually the hero rides off....So maybe you were rescued : )

Darren White
Date: 4/11/2017 7:26:00 AM

I think you've understood that well. It's not a death, but absolutely a farewell of sorts. I was rescued :)

Chris Green

Date: 4/11/2017 7:10:00 AM

This is really cool my friend, like two poems for the price of one. The offset lines could be a stand alone poem on their own. The theme, the feel and the overall movement of this piece is fantastic.

Darren White
Date: 4/11/2017 7:24:00 AM

I love writing these little lines that could almost be a poem all by themselves... Thank you for liking this one my friend :)

Lisa Ricci

Date: 4/11/2017 6:34:00 AM

Oh No. This is marvelous. Be proud of it and that you decided to post it as well. Honestly. It speaks Darren. Besides, how could you not post such a rhyme pattern and style (ha ha) Score one for me (another ha ha)

Darren White
Date: 4/11/2017 6:37:00 AM

Pfft :D

Lisa Ricci

Date: 4/11/2017 6:06:00 AM

Good Afternoon Darren. It is marvelous to see a post by you. Excuse me marvelous to see a gorgeous post by you. This entry is exquisite. I also call this Free Verse for your words are effortless and flowing. May the shimmering setting sun reveal her magic of everything so the lost town will be the found city. Always is it an honor to turn to your page. Have a wonderful afternoon. Well done in its entirety.

Darren White
Date: 4/11/2017 6:17:00 AM

Hello Lisa. I am delighted that you like my poem. I was doubtful about it, inspiration after hospital is a bit dodgy.

Maria Williams

Date: 4/11/2017 4:26:00 AM

A wonderful play of words Darren, I love it. 7++

Darren White
Date: 4/11/2017 4:31:00 AM

Maria, I am really happy that you like this, and that you even give it a 7, thank you :)

White Wolf

Date: 4/11/2017 3:48:00 AM

I like how you have constructed this one, Duir! It works really well! Nice job mate!

Darren White
Date: 4/11/2017 3:52:00 AM

I am glad you like it Budgie, I myself think it's arather weak first attempt to a poem after coming back home lol