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Shell I Live Here

vacant possession
empty shell on golden sands
hermit crab’s new home

08~06~14

Submitted to Bite Size poetry contest 15

sponsored by Line Gauthier

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2014

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Aniruddha Pathak Date: 8/2/2021 11:58:00 PM Delightfully clever, dear Jan, my congratulations Login to Reply

Sam Kauffman Date: 8/2/2021 1:46:00 PM Such a clever title Jan - love the play on words! Reminds me so of Shelley's Nautilus - a home remodeling project! Absolutely delightful haiku! Congratulations on your win! Hugs Login to Reply

Mystic Rose Rose Date: 8/1/2021 3:31:00 PM You shall live there by the ocean and the sand and be happy, congrats on your win dear friend, :) Login to Reply

Paula Goldsmith Date: 8/1/2021 12:55:00 PM Congratulations on your win. What a creative write. Few words with much said. Have a blessed day with your win............... Login to Reply

Christuraj Alex Date: 8/1/2021 6:35:00 AM Beautiful Bite. Congratulations on your win! Login to Reply

James Fraser Date: 9/24/2014 4:37:00 PM Many a shell, barren and alone, what was once, of a fitable home. Now discarded, worn to sand. If you can read nature, you'll understand. Fine Haiku Jan. Golly, I so love the beach, James :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/24/2014 4:55:00 PM Me too James I am 5 minutes walk from a glorious sandy beach - but with very few shells:-) Hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A Date: 9/2/2014 11:26:00 AM Another sweet reply...Linda Login to Reply

Faye Gibson Date: 8/19/2014 8:15:00 PM Very clever, Jan, from title to finish. Congratulations. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/19/2014 8:16:00 PM thanks so much Faye I do appreciate your comment:-) Hugs jan xxx

Kelly Deschler Date: 8/19/2014 5:54:00 PM I think that a vacant shell on golden sands would make for a very nice home!.... Great poem, Jan. I loved the title! Congrats on your win! Hugs :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/19/2014 6:03:00 PM Thanks Kelly I do appreciate you taking time to comment:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Charlotte Puddifoot Date: 8/18/2014 4:33:00 PM this is a very different one and I like the witty way you've used 'shell' in the title - congrats on your win in the contest :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/18/2014 4:40:00 PM Thanks Charlotte I do appreciate your comments:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Richard Lamoureux Date: 8/18/2014 8:42:00 AM They are interesting creatures, congratulations Jan. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/18/2014 8:46:00 AM Yes, they are Richard. Thanks for dropping by Hugs jan xxx

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 8/18/2014 5:32:00 AM Congratulations on this wonderful win, Jan. congrats Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/18/2014 5:45:00 AM Thank you so much Dr Mehta:-) I cannot believe how I have grown so much in confidence since I started writing in February this year - poetry has changed my life forever! Hugs jan xxx

Nette Onclaud Date: 8/18/2014 1:41:00 AM stunning 'ku, jan.. applause to you! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/18/2014 3:56:00 AM Thank you so much Nette:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Poet Destroyer A Date: 8/17/2014 10:19:00 PM Hi Jan, Congratulations, in Andrea's sorta Shell, contest:)....Love Linda Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/18/2014 3:55:00 AM Many thanks for dropping by Linda - always a pleasure to see your beautiful smile:-) Hugs jan xxx

Pandita Sietesantos Date: 8/17/2014 7:54:00 PM Congratulations, Jan on a beautiful win!!! I enjoyed reading this piece - excellent, clever write! You just have the gift, my friend! Warmest regards. Pandita Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/18/2014 3:55:00 AM Many thanks for the very kind comments Pandita:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Seren Roberts Date: 8/17/2014 7:22:00 PM Loved it Jan , congrats....Seren Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/17/2014 7:29:00 PM Many thanks Seren:-) Hugs Jan xxx

David Mohn Date: 8/17/2014 6:10:00 PM Love the haiku Jan...congrats Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/17/2014 6:12:00 PM Many thanks David:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 8/17/2014 5:35:00 PM Jan, I loved this haiku from you. It is really good. Also loved the clever use of "shell" in the title. That did not go unnoticed! My one suggestion would be for you to not capitalize your lines in a haiku! Congrats in my contest, luv, andrea Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/17/2014 5:38:00 PM Many thanks for the lovely comment and advice Andrea I am delighted to be placed so highly in your contest:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Tim Smith Date: 8/17/2014 4:22:00 PM Congrats Jan on another beautiful win...hugs Tim Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/17/2014 4:56:00 PM Many thanks Tim :-) Hugs Jan xxx

Regina Mcintosh Date: 8/7/2014 6:42:00 AM Love it. Good luck in the contest and God bless you. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/7/2014 9:32:00 AM Thanks for the lovely comment Regina:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 8/7/2014 6:33:00 AM Well crafted thought with images, Jan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/7/2014 9:32:00 AM Thank you for dropping by Dr Mehta :-) Hugs Jan x

John Michaels Date: 8/7/2014 4:40:00 AM What a great little Haiku! Good luck in the competition! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/7/2014 9:31:00 AM Thanks for the lovely comment John:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Mohan Chutani Date: 8/7/2014 2:51:00 AM hermitage in a shell- nice idea, Jan. Mohan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/7/2014 3:06:00 AM Thanks for the lovely comment Mohan:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Frederic Parker Date: 8/6/2014 6:30:00 PM Nice Haiku, knowing how many hermit crabs there are in a given area your crab is going to fight to keep that shell...good luck with the contest Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/6/2014 6:34:00 PM Thanks for the lovely comment Frederic:-) Hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance Date: 8/6/2014 6:04:00 PM OOOHHH I love it!!!! I always wanted a hermit crab! but my husband said he didn't want to be with a girl who had crabs, i don't blame him Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/6/2014 6:07:00 PM Ha Ha Ha - wonder if this will inspire a poem about crabs now LOL You are awesome Casarah! Hugs Jan xxx

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