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Shell I Live Here

vacant possession
empty shell on golden sands
hermit crab’s new home

08~06~14

Submitted to Bite Size poetry contest 15

sponsored by Line Gauthier

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2014

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Aniruddha Pathak

August 2, 2021 at 11:58 PM

Delightfully clever, dear Jan, my congratulations

August 2, 2021 at 1:46 PM

Such a clever title Jan - love the play on words! Reminds me so of Shelley's Nautilus - a home remodeling project! Absolutely delightful haiku! Congratulations on your win! Hugs

Mystic Rose Rose

August 1, 2021 at 3:31 PM

You shall live there by the ocean and the sand and be happy, congrats on your win dear friend, :)

Paula Goldsmith

August 1, 2021 at 12:55 PM

Congratulations on your win. What a creative write. Few words with much said. Have a blessed day with your win...............

Christuraj Alex

August 1, 2021 at 6:35 AM

Beautiful Bite. Congratulations on your win!

September 24, 2014 at 4:37 PM

Many a shell, barren and alone, what was once, of a fitable home. Now discarded, worn to sand. If you can read nature, you'll understand. Fine Haiku Jan. Golly, I so love the beach, James :)

September 24, 2014 at 4:55 PM

Me too James I am 5 minutes walk from a glorious sandy beach - but with very few shells:-) Hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

September 2, 2014 at 11:26 AM

Another sweet reply...Linda

August 19, 2014 at 8:15 PM

Very clever, Jan, from title to finish. Congratulations.

August 19, 2014 at 8:16 PM

thanks so much Faye I do appreciate your comment:-) Hugs jan xxx

August 19, 2014 at 5:54 PM

I think that a vacant shell on golden sands would make for a very nice home!.... Great poem, Jan. I loved the title! Congrats on your win! Hugs :)

August 19, 2014 at 6:03 PM

Thanks Kelly I do appreciate you taking time to comment:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Charlotte Puddifoot

August 18, 2014 at 4:33 PM

this is a very different one and I like the witty way you've used 'shell' in the title - congrats on your win in the contest :)

August 18, 2014 at 4:40 PM

Thanks Charlotte I do appreciate your comments:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Richard Lamoureux

August 18, 2014 at 8:42 AM

They are interesting creatures, congratulations Jan.

August 18, 2014 at 8:46 AM

Yes, they are Richard. Thanks for dropping by Hugs jan xxx

August 18, 2014 at 5:32 AM

Congratulations on this wonderful win, Jan. congrats

August 18, 2014 at 5:45 AM

Thank you so much Dr Mehta:-) I cannot believe how I have grown so much in confidence since I started writing in February this year - poetry has changed my life forever! Hugs jan xxx

August 18, 2014 at 1:41 AM

stunning 'ku, jan.. applause to you!

August 18, 2014 at 3:56 AM

Thank you so much Nette:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Poet Destroyer A

August 17, 2014 at 10:19 PM

Hi Jan, Congratulations, in Andrea's sorta Shell, contest:)....Love Linda

August 18, 2014 at 3:55 AM

Many thanks for dropping by Linda - always a pleasure to see your beautiful smile:-) Hugs jan xxx

Pandita Sietesantos

August 17, 2014 at 7:54 PM

Congratulations, Jan on a beautiful win!!! I enjoyed reading this piece - excellent, clever write! You just have the gift, my friend! Warmest regards. Pandita

August 18, 2014 at 3:55 AM

Many thanks for the very kind comments Pandita:-) Hugs Jan xxx

August 17, 2014 at 7:22 PM

Loved it Jan , congrats....Seren

August 17, 2014 at 7:29 PM

Many thanks Seren:-) Hugs Jan xxx

August 17, 2014 at 6:10 PM

Love the haiku Jan...congrats

August 17, 2014 at 6:12 PM

Many thanks David:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich

August 17, 2014 at 5:35 PM

Jan, I loved this haiku from you. It is really good. Also loved the clever use of "shell" in the title. That did not go unnoticed! My one suggestion would be for you to not capitalize your lines in a haiku! Congrats in my contest, luv, andrea

August 17, 2014 at 5:38 PM

Many thanks for the lovely comment and advice Andrea I am delighted to be placed so highly in your contest:-) Hugs Jan xxx

August 17, 2014 at 4:22 PM

Congrats Jan on another beautiful win...hugs Tim

August 17, 2014 at 4:56 PM

Many thanks Tim :-) Hugs Jan xxx

Regina Mcintosh

August 7, 2014 at 6:42 AM

Love it. Good luck in the contest and God bless you.

August 7, 2014 at 9:32 AM

Thanks for the lovely comment Regina:-) Hugs Jan xx

August 7, 2014 at 6:33 AM

Well crafted thought with images, Jan

August 7, 2014 at 9:32 AM

Thank you for dropping by Dr Mehta :-) Hugs Jan x

August 7, 2014 at 4:40 AM

What a great little Haiku! Good luck in the competition!

August 7, 2014 at 9:31 AM

Thanks for the lovely comment John:-) Hugs Jan xxx

August 7, 2014 at 2:51 AM

hermitage in a shell- nice idea, Jan. Mohan

August 7, 2014 at 3:06 AM

Thanks for the lovely comment Mohan:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Frederic Parker

August 6, 2014 at 6:30 PM

Nice Haiku, knowing how many hermit crabs there are in a given area your crab is going to fight to keep that shell...good luck with the contest

August 6, 2014 at 6:34 PM

Thanks for the lovely comment Frederic:-) Hugs Jan xx

August 6, 2014 at 6:04 PM

OOOHHH I love it!!!! I always wanted a hermit crab! but my husband said he didn't want to be with a girl who had crabs, i don't blame him

August 6, 2014 at 6:07 PM

Ha Ha Ha - wonder if this will inspire a poem about crabs now LOL You are awesome Casarah! Hugs Jan xxx

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