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Shell I Live Here

vacant possession empty shell on golden sands hermit crab’s new home 08~06~14 Submitted to Bite Size poetry contest 15 sponsored by Line Gauthier

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Aniruddha Pathak

Date: 8/2/2021 11:58:00 PM

Delightfully clever, dear Jan, my congratulations

Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/2/2021 1:46:00 PM

Such a clever title Jan - love the play on words! Reminds me so of Shelley's Nautilus - a home remodeling project! Absolutely delightful haiku! Congratulations on your win! Hugs

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 8/1/2021 3:31:00 PM

You shall live there by the ocean and the sand and be happy, congrats on your win dear friend, :)

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/1/2021 12:55:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. What a creative write. Few words with much said. Have a blessed day with your win...............

Christuraj Alex

Date: 8/1/2021 6:35:00 AM

Beautiful Bite. Congratulations on your win!

James Fraser

Date: 9/24/2014 4:37:00 PM

Many a shell, barren and alone, what was once, of a fitable home. Now discarded, worn to sand. If you can read nature, you'll understand. Fine Haiku Jan. Golly, I so love the beach, James :)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/24/2014 4:55:00 PM

Me too James I am 5 minutes walk from a glorious sandy beach - but with very few shells:-) Hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/2/2014 11:26:00 AM

Another sweet reply...Linda

Faye Gibson

Date: 8/19/2014 8:15:00 PM

Very clever, Jan, from title to finish. Congratulations.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/19/2014 8:16:00 PM

thanks so much Faye I do appreciate your comment:-) Hugs jan xxx

Kelly Deschler

Date: 8/19/2014 5:54:00 PM

I think that a vacant shell on golden sands would make for a very nice home!.... Great poem, Jan. I loved the title! Congrats on your win! Hugs :)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/19/2014 6:03:00 PM

Thanks Kelly I do appreciate you taking time to comment:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 8/18/2014 4:33:00 PM

this is a very different one and I like the witty way you've used 'shell' in the title - congrats on your win in the contest :)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2014 4:40:00 PM

Thanks Charlotte I do appreciate your comments:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/18/2014 8:42:00 AM

They are interesting creatures, congratulations Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2014 8:46:00 AM

Yes, they are Richard. Thanks for dropping by Hugs jan xxx

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/18/2014 5:32:00 AM

Congratulations on this wonderful win, Jan. congrats

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2014 5:45:00 AM

Thank you so much Dr Mehta:-) I cannot believe how I have grown so much in confidence since I started writing in February this year - poetry has changed my life forever! Hugs jan xxx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/18/2014 1:41:00 AM

stunning 'ku, jan.. applause to you!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2014 3:56:00 AM

Thank you so much Nette:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/17/2014 10:19:00 PM

Hi Jan, Congratulations, in Andrea's sorta Shell, contest:)....Love Linda

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2014 3:55:00 AM

Many thanks for dropping by Linda - always a pleasure to see your beautiful smile:-) Hugs jan xxx

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 8/17/2014 7:54:00 PM

Congratulations, Jan on a beautiful win!!! I enjoyed reading this piece - excellent, clever write! You just have the gift, my friend! Warmest regards. Pandita

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2014 3:55:00 AM

Many thanks for the very kind comments Pandita:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Seren Roberts

Date: 8/17/2014 7:22:00 PM

Loved it Jan , congrats....Seren

Jan Allison
Date: 8/17/2014 7:29:00 PM

Many thanks Seren:-) Hugs Jan xxx

David Mohn

Date: 8/17/2014 6:10:00 PM

Love the haiku Jan...congrats

Jan Allison
Date: 8/17/2014 6:12:00 PM

Many thanks David:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/17/2014 5:35:00 PM

Jan, I loved this haiku from you. It is really good. Also loved the clever use of "shell" in the title. That did not go unnoticed! My one suggestion would be for you to not capitalize your lines in a haiku! Congrats in my contest, luv, andrea

Jan Allison
Date: 8/17/2014 5:38:00 PM

Many thanks for the lovely comment and advice Andrea I am delighted to be placed so highly in your contest:-) Hugs Jan xxx