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She Was Only 16

She didn’t know any better Was the excuse of the day And 16 is hard enough Without sibling children in the way “I didn’t birth these urchins,” She screamed for no one to hear But mom and dad were out the door In good spirit, full of cheer Selfish 16 year-olds rarely do as told And such was true that day She took the money they paid her And she was on her way The girl across the pond would do So she handed her a twenty “I’ll be back before they’re home,” For a good time, she had plenty And in that smoke filled barn With laughter, booze and boys 16 year old had few cares in the world Except for that tell-tale noise She tried to drown it out But she knew that she was wrong And it didn’t matter even a bit When they played her favorite song For the noise in her head grew louder It tugged it shouted it pulled She knew she had to get home, quick Her mother could not be fooled She steadied her hands on the wheel To relieve the stranger sitter But the gravel pulled the car from her And that’s when it hit her Broken glass around an old oak Sirens blaring from afar That one poor choice cost her family More than just a car And In the passing days Hushed whispers full of half truths Sobbing, crying, asking why? 16 drunk on 90 proof They say she was babysitting Left the kids all alone But she’s not here to tell her side She resides beneath granite stone

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




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Date: 4/11/2020 12:19:00 PM
A good combination of rhyme and narrative, Tara. A very sad ending, and a lesson to be learned. ~ Regards // paul
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Date: 2/8/2020 4:25:00 AM
Very nice story and well written. You can feel the spirit of the 16year old. Lovely. Well done!
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Date: 1/4/2020 8:51:00 AM
I was hoping to see a new one. This one however is worth another read. When I was a kid there was a young girl who snuck out of the house and was killed in a car accident. My parents would often tell us the story to prevent us from taking chances. ( it didn’t stop us) luckily we were ok.
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Date: 1/2/2020 7:07:00 AM
Nicely done, good story poem. I enjoyed it. You make me wish I wrote it.
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Date: 12/28/2019 8:37:00 AM
Happy New Year to you as well. Thanksfor the visit.
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Date: 11/4/2019 1:52:00 PM
this is heartbreaking, but that could easily happen... well written..
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Tara Dawn
Date: 12/27/2019 7:16:00 PM
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. Appreciate it greatly.
Date: 10/24/2019 3:49:00 PM
That's deep! I know many people that are stuck raising their siblings. It takes away from one's youth to have that sort of responsibility at such an early age. In this case it literally took away her youth. Nicely put. I felt like i was there
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Tara Dawn
Date: 12/27/2019 7:14:00 PM
Thank you so much for reading and enjoying!! It means so much to me!
Date: 10/18/2019 8:36:00 PM
Hi Tara.. I enjoyed this read... even though it's sad and tragic.. but your words are magic! .. best DAMO
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Tara Dawn
Date: 12/27/2019 7:14:00 PM
So kind of you to say. Thank you thank you, a million times thank you.
Date: 10/18/2019 11:49:00 AM
This is so sad but oh so well told. Exceptional poetry and story telling.
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Tara Dawn
Date: 12/27/2019 6:28:00 PM
That’s so kind of you to say! Thank you! Gonna stop by and check out some of yours now that Holidays are over and I can breathe again! Happy New Year
Date: 10/18/2019 8:59:00 AM
Tara, I liked the impact in your words.Very nice poem on teenage days and the highs and lows discovered. -Richard
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Tara Dawn
Date: 12/27/2019 6:27:00 PM
Thank you, kind sir. Much appreciated
Date: 10/18/2019 6:37:00 AM
Oh how tragic! Thanks for writing about this topic, it needs to be heard.
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Tara Dawn
Date: 10/18/2019 10:29:00 AM
Thank you.
Date: 10/16/2019 12:05:00 AM
Mmm.. Sad ending.. Teenagers are difficult to handle..
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Tara Dawn
Date: 10/18/2019 10:28:00 AM
I wrote this 20 years ago. It’s kinda immature but apparently how I felt.

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