She

She inhabits every corner of my mind, like wild spring flowers overtaking the meadow, she consumes me, yet she doesn't know that my heart yearns for her love, my arms ache for her soft embrace and my lips long to taste every inch of her, but she can't know this, must never know this for if she did I would lose my best friend, my soul mate, my reason to wake every morning and make it through the day. this is my first attempt, feedback would be appriciated

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Skat A

Date: 1/28/2016 11:30:00 AM

HI MARIE.................SKAT

Skat A

Date: 1/28/2016 11:29:00 AM

ENJOYING THIS A SECOND TIME. SKAT

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/8/2015 12:06:00 AM

Marie, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry when you are ready :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Skat A

Date: 8/4/2015 9:31:00 PM

by the way, this is a good attempt at free verse. But, you might want to look up the form. I really don't know what this would fall under, perhaps verse alone. however, it is a good poem on SHE

Skat A

Date: 8/4/2015 9:30:00 PM

Marie Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT