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Shattered

He loved her for so long Four decades to be precise She was a wonderful mother His best friend and beautiful wife Compatible and happy Sharing the same life goals and dreams Excited about growing old together The future bright it seemed The children now grown and gone Work life no longer did exist This was their time To pursue their bucket list Retirement came with adjustments Life and roles had changed Bickering and disagreements followed The relationship became strained Distance stood between them They grew apart He asked her to sit down to talk one night Into pieces he shattered her heart

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Bj Legros Kelley

Date: 10/8/2023 1:44:00 AM

This is so sad Deb, written as if with tears for ink. It really delivers a deep emotion, as well as a warning. Sometimes the truest warmth of love can become cold, and that is the most tragic, a warning of impending doom.

Susan Ashley

Date: 9/30/2023 8:13:00 PM

Dear Deb, your golden pen spills a sad but beautifully composed poem. Lovely rhymes, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Deb M
Date: 10/5/2023 5:02:00 AM

Thankyou sweet Susan….l value your thoughts! Debx

Shirley Hawkins

Date: 9/30/2023 6:38:00 PM

Great poem, Deb. Age causes many changes that are not obvious when you are young. It is difficult for both parties to come to terms with it, which is frustrating and can cause friction; a sense of humour helps. You cannot capture youth. Take care, Deb XX

Deb M
Date: 10/5/2023 5:03:00 AM

You Shirley are my lovely wise friend and l just love your wisdom! Debx

Nancy Kaufman

Date: 9/30/2023 2:43:00 PM

Hi Deb, This is so well rhymed and too common what happens in a lot of long term marriages. Some how people seem to grow apart if they don't work on keeping that bond alive. You crafted this so well.

Deb M
Date: 9/30/2023 2:58:00 PM

Thankyou lovely Nancy! Debx

Susan Manley

Date: 9/29/2023 8:19:00 PM

A sadly common tale. Time tests all and for some the hurts along the way stack up to tall to overcome. And then people turn the page.

Deb M
Date: 9/30/2023 1:05:00 PM

Thanks Susan! Debx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/29/2023 1:14:00 AM

What an ending! Your poem is well developed though. Loved reading it. You need plenty of cuddles.

Deb M
Date: 9/30/2023 1:05:00 PM

Thankyou dear Victor…..Debx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/28/2023 6:34:00 PM

So very sad. We change as we get older but must cultivate our marriage, keep the fire lit, not be a lazy lover.

Deb M
Date: 9/30/2023 1:03:00 PM

Indeed Kim….sad when it goes wrong! Thanks….Debx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/28/2023 5:57:00 PM

Gee, the golden years turned brackish brown. That's life sometimes --- though I wouldn't wish it on anyone!

Deb M
Date: 9/30/2023 1:02:00 PM

Me neither BB! Debx

Daniel Turner

Date: 9/28/2023 5:48:00 PM

Sadly, it just goes to show how much we've changed. It used to be "til death do us part", but the old ways are all but gone now and it has become socially acceptable. Great rhyme young lady. Trouble in paradise?

Deb M
Date: 9/30/2023 1:00:00 PM

Hey you…..no trouble in paradise quite the opposite Hehe!! Thank you for dropping in! Debx

Quoth Theraven

Date: 9/28/2023 4:31:00 PM

Hi Deb, Impressionable slip of the relationship tongue. Building bridges should be easier, but burning them is the go-to for parting ways. Just my thoughts on this fine poem. -Richard

Deb M
Date: 9/30/2023 12:58:00 PM

Thanks Richard….Debx