Shantelle

A brand new car is what I love,
Love the body, the new car smell,
So to local luxury garage I drove,
that’s where I met lovely Shantelle!

Bright blue was the colour in mind,
A four wheel drive good for snow,
For my golf kit, lot of space behind,
A shapely front, as men will know!

I was shown to a desk at the rear,
Sitting in her chair was Shantelle,
Divine looks, heart stopping stare, 
Like a Sharon Stone, behind a Dell!

What transpired? I can’t remember!
Who spoke and if anything was said?
My mind stoned my legs were timber,
Was I dreaming? Was I still in bed?

Later in the open, to show me the car,
She walked like she was on catwalk,
Blue skin tights kept my mouth ajar,
Her pretty smile was her sales talk!

The blue she wore, was blue I love,
every breath I took was her perfume,
She was so close, when I test drove,
my eyes on her, eyes focus and zoom!

The deal was done, the car was sold,
Shantelle I loved, not the four by four!
Ignored the price, paid what I was told,
Borrowed from a bank, to settle score!

Stone by stone every necklace grows,
Drop by drop, love and ocean soar,
Shantelle I wed, with marriage vows,
Now we are four, in our four by four!


N/A 27/02/2020
Dated 18/02/2020
Premier poetry contest Shantelle  
Sponsor Julia Ward

Entered for John Hamilton N-A contest
12/Jan/2021
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020

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Hoffman Avatar
November 30, 2020 at 5:18 PM
I love this! It's fun, it flows, and it would make a great song!
Radhakrishna Avatar
May 23, 2021 at 8:10 AM
Thanks Franci! Wish someone would put it to music!
Jae Avatar
November 29, 2020 at 7:55 AM
Shantelle. Beautifully written. Good brush strokes with words. You succeeded to capture as well as preserve the moment. It needed to be preserved.
Radhakrishna Avatar
November 29, 2020 at 8:04 AM
Thanks abel jae! pleased to have your words of support for my poem! :)
Rodrigues Avatar
November 26, 2020 at 7:10 PM
Definitely enjoyed it! Congrats on lifetime membership!
Radhakrishna Avatar
November 26, 2020 at 9:46 PM
Thanks Kim!:)
Misra Avatar
November 25, 2020 at 9:48 PM
Beautifully written! Definitely deserved a top spot. Cheers!
Radhakrishna Avatar
November 25, 2020 at 10:00 PM
Thanks Karam! I am so pleased with your support!
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November 25, 2020 at 11:33 AM
Love the story of how you and Shantelle met - written expertly through poetry... Belle
Radhakrishna Avatar
November 25, 2020 at 11:40 AM
Thanks Belle! your words make me happy!
De Beaulieu Avatar
November 25, 2020 at 10:21 AM
Hello Krish Radhakrishna, I like this poem. For me it is a winner for you. I read it several times. Enjoy your day my friend.
De Beaulieu Avatar
November 27, 2020 at 11:25 AM
Hello Krish, yes ther are certain sponsors that are good. Be careful what you choose. Your welcome . Enjoy your day my friend.
Radhakrishna Avatar
November 25, 2020 at 11:04 AM
Thank you Darlene! Appreciate your support! I am now careful to avoid certain sponsors! There are many good, fair ones!
Spence Sr Avatar
November 25, 2020 at 8:55 AM
This is an excellent post and poem, my brother of God's grace, Shantelle. I love the flow of the words and the impact of the message. The descriptive excellence is lovely. The theme great and the tenor move the piece along with much grace. Great job! Have a fantastic day, don't forget to pray, stay encouraged, inspired, ingenious, and God's richest grace and blessings to you and your loved ones always! https://www.goodreads.com/book/show/53812816-sincerely-speaking-spiritually.
Radhakrishna Avatar
November 25, 2020 at 9:46 AM
Joseph Thank you and I really appreciate your time and kind words! God bless and wish you good health and life! :)
Romios Avatar
November 25, 2020 at 8:01 AM
Loved your poem from beginning to end. Much fun...made me laugh. Krish, as long as you loved it. You have to be the one who makes it a winner.I do not enter contests. One person as a judge is far too subjective! You don't know them personally nor their training nor background. Dude, this is a jewel to PANGIE. I give it an Oscar. Pangiexx
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November 25, 2020 at 9:41 AM
Pangie Thank you my dear Pangie! I am most grateful for your wonderful support! It funnily did not win in the contest. But I have received very positive feedback from soupers! Pangie, Thanks. Stay well and happy!
Misra Avatar
March 30, 2020 at 9:27 AM
Loved the poem, Krish. The story so beautifully told unfolding like a short movie with all its hues. Nice ending, too - kept waiting for it. Personally, I feel it deserved a placing very high on the list; but never mind - take cheer and satisfaction in delivering a beautiful baby (pun intended)!
Radhakrishna Avatar
March 30, 2020 at 9:32 AM
Nice one Karan!:) Thanks indeed. Thanks for your support!
Shines Avatar
March 18, 2020 at 12:36 PM
loved your poem ,enjoyed reading it.have a great time in your four by four with shantelle !
Radhakrishna Avatar
March 18, 2020 at 1:03 PM
Thank you Kenisha! Happy you took a ride in my 4 by 4 too!
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March 17, 2020 at 11:25 PM
Krish, A superb bargain you've recounted in this supercharged poem. Just one thing I wondered at, did you get the free rust-proofing for the undercarriage? -Richard
Radhakrishna Avatar
March 18, 2020 at 1:01 AM
Thanks Richard! I did not know there was such a thing! I shall enquire! Shantelle however got rid of my rust!!:)
Adams Avatar
February 18, 2020 at 7:41 PM
love this Krish...you told a whole story poetically and beautifully told... best wishes in the contest! hugs
Radhakrishna Avatar
February 19, 2020 at 12:48 AM
Thanks Sandra. Some wonderful gifted people on this site! Happy to get positive views from you all!
Dietrich Avatar
February 18, 2020 at 6:09 PM
you sure took Shantelle to a new level, Krish. Cute story in rhyme!
Radhakrishna Avatar
February 19, 2020 at 12:47 AM
Thanks Andrea. Very happy to get your views!
Romios Avatar
February 18, 2020 at 4:09 AM
Krish! A stunner of a quatrain. Your brilliance as a poet is nearly blinding, in a good way. I admire your no short cut Poetry. A FAV in caps from me, dear Krish. Pamagiota xx
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February 18, 2020 at 4:19 AM
Oh Panagiota Thanks so much! Just finished writing this morning before leaving to go to work!
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