Shaft of Light

As the black clouds parted, a shaft of light suddenly shone down
It hit the grass where I was laying, a silver circle like a crown

There was no rainbow there, so it was no pot of silver or gold
The shaft of light was dazzling, but it made my heart feel cold

 It seemed to be an icy shaft, but dazzling all the same
 Shinning I was fearful, was this God’s finger pointing out my shame

Shaking with fear I watched, the shaft of light still glowing there
Then I saw it shining, on the head with silver hair

The head of hair belonging, to the man beside of me 
The shaft of light shining, showing the love that I now see

The light is still glowing and it is just like a crown
On the head of the man beside me, the one that was also lying down.

© 3/02/2013
Entry For Shaft of Light Contest Sponsored By: Seren Roberts
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 2/17/2013 9:32:00 PM
Mandy, stopping by to enjoy all of Seren's "Shaft of light " winners.. Congratulations with your awesome poem. xox~ PD
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Date: 2/17/2013 9:04:00 AM
Mandy congratulation on your win. An awesome poem from your heart. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 2/17/2013 8:44:00 AM
I like what you have done with this one, great job, congrats.
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Date: 2/17/2013 7:08:00 AM
congrats on your win Mandy
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Date: 2/16/2013 11:59:00 PM
many congrats on your win with this lovely entry
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Date: 2/16/2013 10:06:00 PM
This is just so sweet...Congrats on your win !! I do like your shaft of light being like a crown.
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Date: 2/16/2013 7:44:00 PM
Well done Mandy, loved it.....Seren
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Date: 2/4/2013 4:53:00 AM
this is different Mandy, love the personification here,, and as always a joy to read your poetry...
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Date: 2/3/2013 6:35:00 PM
a very interesting one. Quite different from the others I am reading in the way you employed the shaft of light on a person. I enjoyed this one. BTW, I forgot. Where did you go recently?
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Date: 2/3/2013 4:31:00 PM
This one has great poetic qualities of great rhythm, rhyme and flow..I like the surprise ending..Reads like winning material to me ..Good luck in the contest..Thanks for stopping by..I hope your away trip was great...Sara
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Date: 2/3/2013 2:45:00 PM
Mandy a wonderful poem. The special take on this poem...shaft of light shining on the man in your life, the one you dearly love. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 2/3/2013 1:35:00 PM
This is a wonderful and amazing write my friend! You have delighted me with this tender write with your significant other, a wondrous poem! What a harmonious piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 2/3/2013 12:01:00 PM
a wonderful take on the topic....good luck for the contest
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