Lin Lane Poet Couplet

Shadowed Night Grew Cold

I was crushed and miserable from love unfulfilled
Like a mourning dove whose blood had been spilled

I cried in deep lament as shadowed night grew cold
Sorrow burgeoned my heart with miseries untold

Overwhelmed with fear, l fell to somberly weeping
Wisps of silver moonlight crossed the sky, sweeping

It was a pale light in darkness; my hopes were felled
On the edge of oblivion with sullen thoughts, I dwelled

My eyes tormented, I searched for benevolence anew
How I longed to take flight, trading grey skies for blue

In need of faith and courage instead of dismal dread
I yearned for paradise where happiness is daily bread

I longed to soar among shining stars at great height
No longer bemused and alone on such a mawkish night

I wished for wings so I could soar with poetic volition
Without fetters keeping me tied to melancholy perdition


May 15, 2023
Couplet Poetry Contest
Sponsored by Sotto Poet

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Anne-Lise Andresen May 18, 2023 at 10:31 AM - Congratulations on your win ... a well-deserved 1st place, Lin :) - hugs Lin Lane May 18, 2023 at 10:41 AM Thank you for your kindness and comments, Anne-Lise.

Alexis Y. May 16, 2023 at 9:22 PM Wow! Lin, This is so well written. I found it to have a profound sadness, however, the later part was uplifting with a ray of hope. Excellent job. Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved. Have a great evening-Alexis Lin Lane May 18, 2023 at 10:41 AM You are very discerning with insight, Alexis. I've watched you grow in confidence to do just that along with writing. Thank you for so many comments you've offered over the years.

Valsa George May 16, 2023 at 8:04 PM "In need of faith and courage instead of dismal dread/ I yearned for paradise where happiness is daily bread"...... Lovely lines. A poem so deep and profound depicting the silent sorrow of a grieving heart that has lost the love of the dear one. Congratulations Lin on your first place win. Lin Lane May 18, 2023 at 10:39 AM Dear Valsa, your comments are very supportive of what I try to reflect in poetry. Thank you.

Christuraj Alex May 16, 2023 at 7:23 PM Each couplet is very powerful. Congratulations! Lin Lane May 18, 2023 at 10:37 AM Hi Chris, and thank you.

Kim Rodrigues May 16, 2023 at 6:45 PM In need of faith and courage instead of dismal dread I yearned for paradise where happiness is daily bread…Congratulations, Lin! Lin Lane May 18, 2023 at 10:37 AM Thank you so very much, Kim.

Jay Narain May 16, 2023 at 12:20 PM nice poem Lin Lane May 16, 2023 at 12:51 PM Thanks very much, Jay.

Sotto Poet May 16, 2023 at 11:49 AM LIN, Your writing is excellent and descriptive. Your winning couplet in my contest deserves earnest acclaim. Congratulations on your win. Lin Lane May 16, 2023 at 12:03 PM Thank you very much, Lasaad. I'm honored by your comments and having a place on your winning list.

Victor Buhagiar May 14, 2023 at 11:18 PM One cannot but admire your sentimental feelings. Lin Lane May 15, 2023 at 12:18 AM Victor, I’m glad to learn of your admiration for the sentiments in my poetry. Sincere thanks.

Daniel Turner May 14, 2023 at 9:14 PM Reads like your wish came true:) Like a phoenix you rose from the ashes. Very nice Lin. Lin Lane May 14, 2023 at 10:10 PM I guess I did, Danny, though not from any recent life experiences. Thanks for your insightful perspective.