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5/8/2025 for  Shadows of the Valley Poetry Contest sponsored by Robert James Liguori

Shadow of the Valley

I jumped on the train, feeling bad.
It cost me all the money I had.
Is that seat empty, tell me bub?
I asked, clutching my ticket stub.
I knew not where it was going. 
The man across from me looked knowing.
Will it take me to a safe haven?
Through the window, I saw a raven.
The man marked down one more tally
as the train bogged down in a valley.
The low sun cast a shadow dark
as I was forced to disembark.
The knowing man, he would not talk,
but I was going to have to walk.
I felt I would not be afraid,
as I looked to the sky and prayed -
and breathed my last earthly breath,
in the valley's shadow of death.
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Liguori Avatar
May 27, 2025 at 7:01 AM
Interesting journey you have explained. Congrats on placing.
Crandall Avatar
May 27, 2025 at 4:27 PM
Thanks Robert!
Wolf Avatar
May 8, 2025 at 7:58 PM
Thanks for this light, cheerful poem, David, which I'm reading here before I retire -- permanently now. LOL. Well-done. ~ 'Yea, though I walk through the Valley of Death...' KING David
Crandall Avatar
May 8, 2025 at 8:39 PM
Thanks, Gershon, nice to enjoy a few laughs, LOL!
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