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Shadow In Self Alouette

The midnight tossing
with next light browsing
throughout the dream — where floor breaks
but the dragging lasts,
an impression past
the shadow within that frays

the little girl's spur
and the woman's lure —
the nimbus from her steps born
from heaven's dark gaze —
approaching her gait...
her shadow, a braid for morn.

Copyright © Paige Hind | Year Posted 2024

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Alesia Leach Date: 5/23/2025 5:10:00 PM This reads like a dream dissolving into memory. "Her shadow, a braid for morn" is such a delicate and powerful image--femininity, history, and haunting all bound together. The rhythm glides, even as the floor breaks. Beautifully surreal. Login to Reply

Anonomus Scorpio Date: 2/16/2025 3:44:00 PM I love the use of enjambment. It brings out a level of urgency like no other device. When I read your work, Paige, I always love the way you trace yourself into writing. This us such a smile provoking line. "the little girl's spur and the woman's lure —" A.S. Login to Reply

Victor Buhagiar Date: 11/26/2024 8:42:00 AM A transition from girlhood to womanhood, using vivid metaphors and abstract imagery. Great poem. Login to Reply

Hilda Greenhough Date: 11/26/2024 2:37:00 AM From girl to woman, it seems to occur in a minute. I love your poem. The metaphors are outstanding. Login to Reply

Kim Rodrigues Date: 11/25/2024 7:24:00 PM Very nice, Paige! I love those first two lines! Hugs ~ Kim Login to Reply

Sotto Poet Date: 11/25/2024 4:32:00 PM I adore the rhythm of this poetry, and your use of metaphors and abstract writing is incredibly distinctive and honest! I enjoyed reading this gem. Login to Reply

Ink Empress Date: 11/25/2024 2:12:00 PM Dear sweet Paige, I just wanted to take a minute to thank you for being a beautiful soul, and for checking up on me and also i love the cadence of this poem, your way with metaphors and how you write abstract is very original and sincere! Pleasure reading this gem. Sending you light always. Isnt it thanksgiving soon? Happy thanksgiving to you and your family xx Login to Reply Paige Hind Date: 11/25/2024 2:41:00 PM Yes, it's Thanksgiving soon! Sending light to you and yours as well! xx

Silent One Date: 11/25/2024 2:07:00 PM Nice rhymes in your poem, Paige Login to Reply

Sam Kauffman Date: 11/22/2024 3:57:00 PM Well done, Paige, with wonderfully creative images of a little girl and a woman. Best wishes for the contest if this is for a contest. Stay blessed! Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 11/22/2024 11:54:00 AM What Daniel said. I too found the braid line quite striking, Paige Login to Reply

Daniel Henry Rodgers Date: 11/22/2024 4:39:00 AM My Dear Paige, So hauntingly beautiful! The way you interlace dreams, shadows, and the transition from girl to woman is mesmerizing. I loved your imagery of the "nimbus from her steps" and "shadow, a braid for morn" is strikingly evocative. Your artistic and insightful words dance gracefully through complex emotions. Enchanting! Autumn Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel Login to Reply