Shadorma

~strove abyss… gathering nothing… illusions… gross shadows… signifying, not a thing… Love is the leaven… ~life is gift… precept is profit… abundant… wealthy store… Divine infinite, the source… immortal is Love! For and in honor of Nette Onclaud And contest: Share a Shadorma Written by John Moses Freeman

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/8/2011 8:50:00 AM

Stopping by your outstanding poetry today to thank you for your kind comments on mine Moses. Love, Carol

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/23/2011 8:23:00 PM

hey there ;) i'm not a fan of them either! [carnivals] she did give you a win without ever mentioning them though! i guess all life can be viewed as a carnival? congrad's light & love

John Freeman
Date: 8/23/2011 9:38:00 PM

Allegorical Shadorma Debbie. Life is like a three ring circus at times. Allegorical Poetry is not suppose to be written or read like a novel. "I Have poetic license too!" In part a poem's brilliance is in the reader's preponderance. Smile. Agape, Moses

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 8/23/2011 7:49:00 PM

congratulations on your win John! a great ending :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/23/2011 4:11:00 PM

way to go, john, on this most unique take on the theme of carnival!

Kash Poet

Date: 8/23/2011 1:48:00 PM

Congratulations John on your well deserved win ...enjoyed your Shadorma.

Tony Lane

Date: 8/23/2011 12:34:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. Tony

Jack Horne

Date: 8/23/2011 12:12:00 PM

I haven't been on Soup for a day or so and have just seen all the contest results I've missed! Please excuse this quick message of congratulations - well done on all your wins : ) Thanks, John - your contest was fun!

Caryl Ramsdale

Date: 8/23/2011 10:57:00 AM

Congratulations on your winning placement in nette's Shadorma contest. Fascinating verse! Caryl Ramsdale

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/23/2011 10:04:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement in Nette's "Share A Shadorma" contest Moses. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/23/2011 9:06:00 AM

Congrats Moses on your terrific third place win with this elegant entry on carnival my friend..luv..from Florida...

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/23/2011 9:00:00 AM

Congratulations on the third place win in the contest of nette, John

David Williams

Date: 8/23/2011 3:55:00 AM

hey John congrats on your very worthy win David

Cyndi Macmillan

Date: 8/22/2011 10:43:00 PM

Congrats on the contest, John! From Cyndi

Nancy Jones

Date: 8/22/2011 10:01:00 PM

yah.. true that. a sober write midst all the revelry. Well done!

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 8/22/2011 3:20:00 PM

There is little to be found in the "abyss" but illusions. Only after your open your heart to love can you sense the difference between concept and precept. Excellent poem for Nette's contest, my friend, and I wish you success. And thank you so much for telling me about that dove, John. It's a sign from God, a good omen that things will go well in your future. Love and blessings, Carolyn

Robert Ball

Date: 8/22/2011 11:40:00 AM

excellentxxxxxxxx great job and thanks for the congrats. Couldn't be done without the Holy Spirit. God bless

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 8/21/2011 8:51:00 PM

Well written poem!! Great work!! Thanks for honoring my poem in your contest....I tried to be silly when I wrote it....I liked the look on the guys face, like the lights are on but nobody's home!!