Susan Ashley Poet Pantoum

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Shades of Gray Grief

Man of melancholy - memories ashen and shadow gray,
heart harrowed, solicits solace from her psychic energy.
An offering, his woebegone weeping wildflower bouquet,
teardrops titian, sorrow scintillant, reflects rueful reverie.

Heart harrowed solicits solace from her psychic energy,
free falling through forlorn filigree, he mourns at her gravestone.
Teardrops, titian sorrow scintillant reflects rueful reverie
of his Earth angel, soul-lifted too soon, spiritually sown.

Free falling, through forlorn filigree he mourns. At her gravestone
fragrance haunting, flowers flaring heartsick hallucinations
of his Earth angel soul-lifted too soon; spiritually sown
blue scented efflorescence of suffering lamentations!

Fragrance... haunting flowers flaring heartsick hallucinations
of inamorata, flame extinguished expectant with their child.
Blue scented efflorescence of suffering lamentations
bedevil his mind. Happiness, hope exiled, ego beguiled.

Of inamorata flame extinguished expectant with their child,
an offering; his woebegone weeping. Wildflower bouquet
bedevils his mind, happiness, hope.  Exiled ego beguiled,
man of melancholy memories - ashen and shadow gray.


Susan Ashley
September 16, 2017


~Third Place ~
Premiere Contest: Favorite Pantoum Premiere
Sponsor: Laura Loo


~ First Place ~
Contest: Poems That Paint A Picture 2
Sponsor: Silent One

* based on a pencil drawing by Mike Theuer provided by Silent One on contest page *

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Line Gauthier April 8, 2018 at 9:53 PM Congrats on your win, Susan. Well penned. Susan Ashley April 9, 2018 at 3:13 PM Thank you Line for your lovely comment and kindhearted congrats.. The time you take to visit is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes to you always. ~Susan

Sandra Haight March 29, 2018 at 4:47 PM Amazing depth and imagery in your well-written Pantoum, Susan. So rich with metaphors, alliteration, woven with rhymes perfectly. Congratulations on your well-deserved Podium win! Hugs, Sandra Susan Ashley March 30, 2018 at 11:52 AM I am just so thrilled by your response to my poem Sandra. Your esteemed opinion means so much to me and your beautiful comments fill me with a sense of elation. Thank you for your kindness in your uplifting support of my poetry. You inspire me to continue to reach higher, my friend. Warmest wishes always. ~Susan

Susan Gentry March 27, 2018 at 8:57 PM Congratulations on your win! Susan Ashley March 27, 2018 at 9:03 PM Many thanks for your kind congrats! Warmest wishes ~Susan

Carrie Richards March 27, 2018 at 5:57 PM What a tragic story woven here, Susan! Well done! Congratulations to you! Susan Ashley March 27, 2018 at 7:32 PM I relish your lovely comments and visit Carrie. Many thanks as well for your kind congratulation. ~Susan

Jan Allison March 27, 2018 at 4:03 PM a poem worthy of publishing to a much wider audience than soup Susan! Many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx Susan Ashley March 27, 2018 at 7:31 PM Thank you Jan, for your inspiring comments. Your wonderful appreciation and lovely visit are so uplifting. Many thanks as well for your kind congrats, my friend. Warmest wishes and hugs. ~Susan

Eve Roper March 27, 2018 at 11:44 AM Congratulations on your win , Susan enjoyed reading! Have a nice Easter Hugs Eve ~`* Susan Ashley March 27, 2018 at 2:31 PM Thank you, Eve, it's always so wonderful to see you! Your lovely comments are cherished. Happy Easter to you and yours. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Beautiful Scars March 27, 2018 at 9:54 AM such depth, imagery...amazing pantoum sweet Susan :) thank you and congratulations :)-luloo Beautiful Scars March 27, 2018 at 4:45 PM you are so very welcome! Be blessed sweet lady :) luloo Susan Ashley March 27, 2018 at 2:28 PM Thank you Laura for your lovely comments and and for the wonderful placement of my poem in your contest. It's so uplifting to share the winner's list with such talented and esteemed poets.. warmest wishes. ~Susan

Arturo Michael January 18, 2018 at 6:28 PM I'm going to study this one...here you let it all out...For me, this is your signature style...All the best Susan Susan Ashley January 18, 2018 at 6:53 PM Thank you my friend, Arturo. Your presence is a pure delight as always. Thank you for your precious thoughts that warm my heart. Your light of kindness enlivens my spirit and makes me smile. Your beautiful comments are truly appreciated mon ami. I hope you are having a lovely evening... Warmest wishes ~Susan

Paul Callus November 27, 2017 at 7:34 AM Congratulations on a superbly accomplished Pantoum, and a most deserved first place in the contest, Susan. The poem is beautiful, with smooth flowing rhyme, rich alliteration and metaphoric use. Of note...how a few deft touches to punctuation (as in the final stanza) can deliver a desired/effective result. Warm regards // paul Susan Ashley November 27, 2017 at 8:00 PM Paul, I adore your appreciation of my poem. This poem is very special to me because in this write I really start to express my 'poetic' emotions of melancholy, sadness and grief. I was really ready to 'let go'.. and I've been 'letting go' ever since :) ..my 'Wild Mango Fandango' phase soon followed.. lol! Your thoughts and ideas are cherished my friend. Warmest wishes ~Susan

John Michaels October 15, 2017 at 5:36 AM Wow! Exquisitely composed!! Pantoums are a tricky beast, but you've pulled it off with aplomb. The emotion practically weeps from your words and it's packed with powerful alliteration! Congratulations on your First Place win! Regards, John. Susan Ashley October 15, 2017 at 6:06 PM John, I read your lovely words of praise with so much appreciation. Thank you for your warm visit and generously wonderful comment. I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem, and I love that you used the word 'aplomb'.., isn't it just a really great word? I think it should be used so much more! Many thanks :) ~Susan

Alesia Leach October 5, 2017 at 3:05 PM I don't find Pantoum poems easy. Yours is amazing. Enjoyed reading. Congrats!! Susan Ashley October 5, 2017 at 4:04 PM Hi Alesia, I so appreciate your wonderful visit and warm words. Thank you for your lovely comment and I'm happy you enjoyed my poem. Warmest regards always! Susan

Freddie Robinson Jr. October 5, 2017 at 1:49 PM Beautiful poetry, Susan! You pen such exotic words w/perfect graceful tapestry. This is a fave for sure. Pure poetry. Love and peace forever. Susan Ashley October 5, 2017 at 4:13 PM Hi Freddie, I so appreciate your visit and treasure your kind words. Thank you for your lovely and heartwarming comment and for the fave - that means a lot to me coming from a fine poet like you! Hugs and friendship :) Susan

Sara Kendrick October 3, 2017 at 10:41 AM Flowery words paint a picture..Enjoyed reading your lines..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara Susan Ashley October 5, 2017 at 4:05 PM Sara, I so appreciate your visit and kind words. Thank you so much! Susan

Andrea Dietrich October 1, 2017 at 8:30 PM Congrats, Susan. I am noticing this was another really great win for you with a picture. Too bad the new pantoum contest is asking for new poems. It could have been an excellent entry for that one, but I know you are going to come up with another really good pantoum. Susan Ashley October 1, 2017 at 8:59 PM Thank you Andrea for your lovely words of praise and the congrats. I so appreciate your wonderful visits and your comments. I don't know yet if I will have time to write for another contest for now, since this is a very busy time for me presently. That's why I've only been posting about 1 poem per week and this week so far I haven't posted any but I'm hoping I might have one ready for tomorrow. And I've fallen way behind in my commenting on other poetry as well :( I'm in the 50's in the Poet's Community..sad. Thanks again and we'll see!

Eve Roper September 27, 2017 at 9:28 PM Well done, Susan, congratulations on your win hugs Eve Susan Ashley September 28, 2017 at 4:29 AM I so appreciate your wonderful words and kind visit Eve. Thank you for your lovely comment. Susan

Kevin Shaw September 27, 2017 at 3:42 PM Hi Susan, congratulations on your win, you certainly told the story with great skill, Pantoum is a difficult form, I wouldn't even attempt it myself. I enjoyed reading your poem, kind regards, Kevin Susan Ashley September 27, 2017 at 7:30 PM Hi Kevin, thank you so much for your kind appreciation for my poem and your wonderful visit. I'm so happy you enjoyed my Pantoum, I love writing them! Warmest regards! :) Susan

Roy Pett September 24, 2017 at 6:33 AM Absolutely brilliant Susan, I have attempted this form and found quite difficult, congratulations on your well deserved win, you are very talented. :)) Susan Ashley September 24, 2017 at 7:39 PM Hi Roy, thank you for your very lovely comment. Yes, pantoums can be challenging because the meaning of the repeating lines should subtly change as they are repeated in the poem. I've gotten a lot of practice... if you check my poem list you'll see I've practiced quite a few before I started to get the hang of it lol! I so appreciate your kind words and the congrats as well my friend :) Susan

John Hamilton September 23, 2017 at 9:22 PM A pantoum is hard to master, yet you did that, threw in some alliteration, and deliciously delectable word pairing, an exceptional write, a worthy winner! Susan Ashley September 23, 2017 at 9:34 PM I love your scrumptious comment John, deliciously delectable - what sweet praise! I SO appreciate the kindness of you lovely words and your kind visit. Thank you my friend! :) Susan

Michael Tor September 23, 2017 at 7:31 AM Susan heartfelt words conveying much sorrow done masterfully. Congratulations on your win. Susan Ashley September 23, 2017 at 5:56 PM Thank you Michael for your very lovely words. I SO appreciate both your kind comment and visit! :) Susan

Joanna Daniel September 22, 2017 at 6:50 AM Congratulations on your deserving win, Susan:) sad and beautiful interpretation:) Susan Ashley September 22, 2017 at 7:59 PM Hi Jo, thank you so much for both your lovely comment and visit. Much appreciation for your kindness! :) Susan

Bartholomew Williams September 21, 2017 at 10:06 PM Susan, congratulations on your win! I appreciate your heavy use of alliteration in weaving this sad, sorrowful poem. Bartholomew Susan Ashley September 22, 2017 at 8:07 PM Hi Bartholomew, thank you for both your wonderful comment and visit. Congrats to you as well! :) Susan

Andrea Dietrich September 21, 2017 at 7:56 PM gosh you really made it sad and beautifully so, Susan. Congrats for your win. Susan Ashley September 21, 2017 at 8:11 PM Thank you Andrea for both your wonderful comment and visit. Congrats to you as well! :) Susan

Joseph May September 21, 2017 at 4:37 PM Great write and win Susan...Congrats Susan Ashley September 21, 2017 at 7:45 PM Much appreciation Joseph for both your warm comment and visit. Thank you!

Pandita Sietesantos September 21, 2017 at 2:43 PM Susan, I am just swinging back to offer big CONGRATS on your wonderful, well-deserved top win! Just an amazing piece and such a pleasure to read! Best wishes! Pandita Susan Ashley September 21, 2017 at 5:20 PM Pandita, thank you for your kind and thoughtful comment. I so appreciate your friendship. Congrats to you as well! Warmest regards always :) Susan

Winged Warrior September 21, 2017 at 9:19 AM A stupendous pantoum my friend...Congrats!!! on a job well done Susan...god bless...^WW^ Susan Ashley September 21, 2017 at 5:19 PM I so appreciate your awesome message and visit my friend. Thank you for your kind comment Winged Warrior.

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