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Seven For Chaos and Order - Cesarean

TOTAL FICTION WRITE FOR CONTEST

I’d attempted a home birth but your life was in danger
Sirens wailed, blue lights flashed as the ambulance arrived at hospital
Paramedics and nurses buzzed around me like a swarm of flies
No time to lose; I’m wheeled straight into the delivery suite

Anesthetic is administered and a sense of calm sweeps over me
A screen is placed over me, minutes later I hear crying
Finally my tiny baby son is placed into my loving arms


TOTAL FICTION WRITE FOR CONTEST

Contest Seven for Chaos and Order
Sponsored by Nette Onclaud

01~28~17

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2017

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Winged Warrior Date: 2/2/2017 2:25:00 PM Congrats!!! Jan...a chaotic endeavor indeed lol...god bless...^WW^ Login to Reply

Teddy Kimathi Date: 2/1/2017 5:44:00 PM Hi Jan. Congrats for your placement with this fine piece!!! ;-) Login to Reply

Nette Onclaud Date: 2/1/2017 12:14:00 PM jan, you captured the turmoil with marked impressions and found joy in the end... nothing like a having that healthy baby!... my best congrats on your fine mark and thanks for supporting this contest..huggs Login to Reply

Afzal Nusker Date: 2/1/2017 11:42:00 AM This is a wonderful take on the theme. Congrats, Jan. Login to Reply

Joseph May Date: 2/1/2017 10:11:00 AM A lovely write Jan...Congrats on your win Login to Reply

Jean Murray Date: 2/1/2017 3:34:00 AM This one is close to home for me. I love it Jan. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/1/2017 10:05:00 AM I thought you could relate Jean! I am so glad I just had a hospital birth but thankfully no cesarean:-) hugs Jan xx

Cheryl Hoffman Date: 1/29/2017 8:32:00 PM This is out of the box but in a unique clever way indeed! Good luck in the contest Jan!~hugs~Che xx PS Great way to describe chaos and then order…brings back memories!:) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/30/2017 3:44:00 AM I am sure there are people who have gone through a traumatic delivery like this ... it was the only thing I could think of for the theme at the time:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 1/29/2017 8:22:00 PM oh gosh, Jan. You had me going again. Thought it was your own story. haha. Good example of chaos. The more I thought about it, we could have gone SO many different directions with this topic. But I could not really think of anything very poetic!! I'll probably get last place talking about teaching. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/29/2017 8:24:00 PM I had no idea how to tackle the poem then wrote this yesterday - last place better than no place lol:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight Date: 1/29/2017 8:07:00 PM I love the theme you chose for this challenge, Jan. A beautiful presentation of 'chaos' and 'order' for sure. Best wishes for the contest. 7 Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/29/2017 8:10:00 PM Thanks Sandra it's the only thing I could think of at the time for the contest:-) I hope Nette likes it:-) hugs jan xx

Darren White Date: 1/29/2017 8:55:00 AM Very good, and inventive way to approach the contest subject! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/29/2017 10:27:00 AM A little out of the box:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. Date: 1/29/2017 8:50:00 AM Hi Jan, This is a good take on the contest theme. What you wrote about is what I lived. I wanted to have a natural birth with my second child. However, that was not the case, the umbilicord got wrapped around my child's neck .(causing his heart to beat slow down ). And he wasn't able to move.So I had to have an emergency C- Section. Great job. Reads like a winner to me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A without a doubt seven and fav- Alexis Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/29/2017 10:25:00 AM Not sure if its what Nette is after but it is the best I can think of for the theme:-) hugs jan xx

Joanna Daniel Date: 1/29/2017 4:55:00 AM Like your take on the theme, Jan:) two contrasting situations well described:) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/29/2017 7:03:00 AM Thanks Jo thankfully I never experienced it for real!:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 1/29/2017 3:12:00 AM Certainly it captures the attention of the reader. It reminded me the day my daughter was born dear, Jan. A fine writin. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/29/2017 7:03:00 AM Thanks Demetrios:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 1/29/2017 1:07:00 AM You did well Jan. My daughter was in the hospital and finally he third day they gave her a C-section. ; ) 7 Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/29/2017 7:02:00 AM Pure fiction for me thankfully Connie:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper Date: 1/28/2017 5:25:00 PM Very well done, Jan, it is hard for me to chaos :( me and it don't get along with my blood pressure Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/28/2017 5:30:00 PM I didn't have a clue how to tackle this contest and this is the only theme I could come up with and its a fiction write totally for me:-) hugs jan xx

Winged Warrior Date: 1/28/2017 5:24:00 PM Congratulations! Jan... it's a boy...pass out the cigars! lol...god bless...and good luck...great write...^WW^ Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/28/2017 5:29:00 PM Thanks ^WW^ thankfully a fiction write for me :-) hugs jan xxx