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Monday's Child (from Mother Goose)

Monday's child is fair of face
Tuesday's child is full of grace,
Wednesday's child is full of woe,
Thursday's child has far to go,
Friday's child is loving and giving,
Saturday's child works hard for a living,
But the child who is born on the Sabbath Day
Is bonny and blithe and good and gay.[1]

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With shining eyes, the prettiest advances leading all the rest. She skips with glee beneath blue skies, the prettiest with shining eyes. The second, with a warming smile, comes dressed in lace, and all the while she lithely romps beneath the sun with warming smile, the second one. And woebegone, the daughter third, walks, scowling, speaking not a word. She trudges slowly on and on - the daughter third and woebegone. Now comes along a steadfast son whose sauntering seems never done. He perseveres though winds be strong. A steadfast son now comes along. The second boy along the trail has charity, which does not fail. He renders aid and brings sweet joy along the trail, the second boy. Another son, now onward pressed, endures although fatigued and stressed. He's labored much and cannot run, now onward pressed, another son. At course's end, a daughter fair who rests - lets down her golden hair. Most cheerful, tender, gracious friend, the daughter at the course's end. Inspired by the nursery rhyme "Monday's Child"

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 3/27/2020 2:11:00 PM
Big oops! THIS was the poem I meant to congratulate you on for the win today (not Golden Sun, which also deserves to be a winner, imho). So creative in expanding on the well-known nursery rhyme and fleshing out the seven children in personality and appearance. I love the device of reversing the first line to make the fourth line. Clever! Maybe the last line could be "Fair daughter at the course's end" to be consistent with the first line? Another fave for me from your prolific pen, my friend.
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Date: 3/27/2020 12:17:00 PM
Andrea congrats on your top win!;)
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Date: 8/3/2012 11:19:00 AM
An awesome and unique write! Hugs
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Date: 5/28/2012 1:24:00 PM
Hi:)
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Date: 4/20/2012 9:25:00 PM
This blows me away with it's uniqueness and presence. Oh, I'll fave this one also, so I can get quick access.:) More gentle and sublime that what I'd done. Plain and simple...It's beautiful!!! best wishes, Mikki
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Date: 4/13/2012 11:15:00 PM
i iked this the first i read it, andie... congrats on your greatt win, and more cheers to you for all the recent placements.. having TPS technical problems, awwwh!..:) huggs
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Date: 4/13/2012 5:48:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in the wonderful contest Francine sponsored "children in rhyme". You did yourself proud with this super poem Andrea. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/12/2012 9:39:00 AM
congrats Andrea on winning an HM for this excfellent entry on children in rhyme luv.. always a pleasure to read u my friend..
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Date: 4/12/2012 12:02:00 AM
Congratulations Andrea on your win in Francine's contest...you are such a blessing...big huggsss,love deb
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Date: 4/11/2012 11:40:00 PM
I never knew what to do about that "About This Poem". This is lovely and so much more understandable when I see what it is based upon. I guess I misunderstood. I thought she wanted poems that one would read to children. Love, joyce
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Date: 4/11/2012 10:30:00 PM
congrats on your HM in the contest Andrea, great job
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Date: 4/9/2012 10:53:00 AM
You have told about North East India, where i am. This state is known as of Seven Sisters. A sister is a girl has the power to depict the end like a mother, i believe. Loved always, bl
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Date: 4/6/2012 1:43:00 AM
This Tuesday child simply adores this super rhyme...my fav stanz is the last...dang, this is so amazing, Andrea!...could it be you?...Love, Gwendolen ps...so tickled you fav'd my I Held It In My Pocket. (I bet you will be spitting out all kinds of these sorts with that new grandson to inspire you...)
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Date: 4/5/2012 10:30:00 AM
incredible poetry Andrea.. u are the best at unique creations luv.. am sure will be top winner.. thankxx for info about the poem .. good luck luv..a stirring tale in poetic wonder luv..
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Date: 4/5/2012 10:23:00 AM
very clever write, my friend - and a great take on the nursery rhyme
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Date: 4/5/2012 12:26:00 AM
You really did this old school nursery rhyme justice. How fascinating to weave this personifying fairy tale together. My gosh, I don't think I have it in me to display this remarkable rendition of rhyme!
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Date: 4/4/2012 11:31:00 PM
Enjoyed this write Andrea,,and thank you for the kind comment,, and comments wish you all the best of results in the contest of Francine..)
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Date: 4/4/2012 1:44:00 PM
delighting me with your regale on children, one after another.. i am a sunday or monday child, andie!... hope you;re fine!.. superb write! :) huggs!
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Date: 4/4/2012 12:15:00 PM
Cute poem Andrea and good luck in Francine's contest. love phyl
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Date: 4/4/2012 11:17:00 AM
I really like this one. You know me - I'm all about kids, the infinite variety. Love, daver
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Date: 4/4/2012 10:44:00 AM
this is delightful and very clever, now that i've read what it's based upon. good luck in the contest!
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Date: 4/4/2012 7:48:00 AM
and thanks for the favourite on my Jesus poem.Re Chris'blog..yes.. its a pity when poems are destroyed even if they are little simple begginers poems,its still who we were and somehow who we are.. Have a lovely morn dear.
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Date: 4/4/2012 7:47:00 AM
I am a Sunday girl Andrea..that would be the last stanza right ?:) Thanks for letting me know the info about the poem..am smilin now.I was born on 1st May 1977 :)
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Date: 4/4/2012 7:59:00 AM
I'm a sabbath girl.. hehe:)
Date: 4/4/2012 7:29:00 AM
good flow and descriptons. good luck in the contest!
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Date: 4/4/2012 2:03:00 AM
Andrea now you see why I dedicated my poem in Gwen's contest to you, this is very clever writing, a good flow from start to end, each stanza ends with a Chiasmus ( yes you were right about mine) I actually thought you were describing your own siblings, this is off to fav's, I just love it, good luck..David
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