Sense of Inner Freedom

Near our village lies Taal Bay Where tides of adolescence curdle-- And quite often, the ripples mirror The kind whispers and loud groans From the blended flavors of youth’s thirst, Hungering for its wild streams of independence Amidst this need for balance between Naiveté and inner freedom: then to allow This growing child-maiden her exploration Along ebbs of questioning old female norms : Through my gazes into moonlit ripples I begin discerning a wider view of choices, which perhaps, the bamboo’s sway or powdered sand grant a firm yet gentle awareness of my response To life’s new challenges.
Brian Strand's Contest 485
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Godwin Avatar
August 18, 2018 at 10:11 PM
You wowed me, Nette - love how you wove this and told this to spark my want to hold this. Such good writing! Poetry hugs ... CayCay
Richards Avatar
August 12, 2018 at 3:42 PM
As always, dear Nette, you have a gift that exceeds the norm. Never are your poems simply ordinary. Exquisite is your trademark! This is no exception! :)
Man Avatar
August 11, 2018 at 9:48 PM
Nette, Your sense is uncommon.. such a rare and graceful pen that creates and then arrests its environment. You write so vividly in the present that no words related to the senses are needed. Nette, your skills are remarkable and you bring continual delight to the reader.. blessings!
Michael Avatar
August 11, 2018 at 7:02 PM
It lives in you, the scenery of Taal comes alive...A lot of feelings here...Nice write
Kendrick Avatar
August 11, 2018 at 9:16 AM
Reads like a very good contender for the contest. Way to go. Thanks for the visits to my p age. Sara
Pandit Avatar
August 11, 2018 at 7:22 AM
I like that comment below (nice sixth sense). You covered them all without using the words..your talent shines my friend.
Vaso Avatar
August 11, 2018 at 4:02 AM
So sweet and soft! Good luck!!!
Blown Avatar
August 10, 2018 at 11:42 PM
nice sixth sense
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