Senryu For Sadness

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Poem for a contest "Senryu for Sadness " by Laura Loo

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The abandoned skin Thoughts dressed into nothingness Eternally gone 9/3/2017

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Aqua Marine

Date: 9/4/2017 4:39:00 PM

Congratulations on your excellant placement, G Jay! Well deserved for a sensitive write...( I learned a lot from being on this site, back after being away for a while...) looking forward to reading your work. :-))

Aqua Marine

Date: 9/2/2017 2:59:00 PM

This is intriguing- I really like your choice of words...( to check your syllable count, use a haiku syllable counter- "dressed " might be one syllable as spoken. 5-7-5 also for senryu. "Thoughts dressed in nothingness" is exquisite Why not enter the competition?. :)

G. Jay
Date: 9/9/2017 4:03:00 PM

once again. thank you. for your call to action"why not enter the competition?"