Senryu 1

lies break tender hearts
big strong arms feel very safe
suitcase sits on bed

©Donna Jones

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James Fraser

August 13, 2013 at 2:14 PM

So many people will have lived your words Donna, so true, nice one. James :)

Sara Kendrick

August 11, 2013 at 1:16 PM

Truth spoken about lies.Enjoyed reading your creative work..Thanks for stopping by...Sara

Sean L Sanders

May 21, 2013 at 7:00 PM

Nicely done!! I love it poet

Debbie Duncan

May 21, 2013 at 5:02 PM

I know this verse well enough,,, well penned Donna ;}

Robert Johnson

May 20, 2013 at 9:51 AM

Unsung songs and letters not written. A silent remembrance of when you were smitten. A journey into a possible dream. Where reconciled love shines on a moonbeam.

Kash Poet

May 18, 2013 at 11:18 AM

Very nice Senryu here Donna.Enjoyed the read.Thanks for your comments at my poems.

Donna Jones

May 18, 2013 at 9:37 PM

Thanks Kash. I enjoy your work also....

Tim Ryerson

May 18, 2013 at 8:03 AM

Love the contrast between lines two and three...Beautiful and hearbreaking - Tim

Donna Jones

May 18, 2013 at 9:41 PM

Thanks Tim ..I'm really enjoying the challenge of these short forms..I'm just learning or trying!

Anne-Lise Andresen

May 18, 2013 at 6:37 AM

- Comforting arms, gives security - Well done, Donna. - Have a nice day. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Demetrios Trifiatis

May 18, 2013 at 6:17 AM

A bitter truth very well expressed!

Donna Jones

May 18, 2013 at 6:29 AM

Thank you.

Harry Horsman

May 16, 2013 at 3:24 PM

wow this is good

Donna Jones

May 16, 2013 at 6:26 PM

Appreciate it much Harry..

Timothy Hicks

May 16, 2013 at 1:00 PM

I loved how you compacted this dramatic scene all into a haiku... the suitcase implying how serious the issue was. A conflict, a twist, and then a conclusion all in three tiny lines... VERY cool!

Donna Jones

May 16, 2013 at 6:27 PM

Oh thanks Timothy...nice compliment..

Russell Sivey

May 16, 2013 at 11:54 AM

This is quite the intense and truthful write my friend! I really enjoyed reading this enlightening poem this afternoon! What a powerful statement you have made with this piece, Great work!!

Donna Jones

May 16, 2013 at 6:33 PM

You are a very wonderful friend Russell. Thanks.

Eileen Manassian

May 16, 2013 at 11:38 AM

:) MD....I'm here! Lies are the worst. I'm afraid of people who lie...you never know where you stand with them. I often tell my daughter...hurt me with the truth. I will bear it...but I can't bear a lie. Lovely thoughts here! HUGS!

Donna Jones

May 16, 2013 at 6:35 PM

Yes...I don't know how people can lie to people they care about..thanks sweetie

Bl Devnath

May 16, 2013 at 11:31 AM

Right is protected by might, is it not? Under compulsion there's no way to defeat. Suitcase must sit on bed. Wonderfully done. Thanks.....,loved always,bl

Donna Jones

May 16, 2013 at 6:36 PM

Yes..thanks for your continued support....