Senryu 1

lies break tender hearts
big strong arms feel very safe
suitcase sits on bed

©Donna Jones

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James Fraser

Date: 8/13/2013 2:14:00 PM

So many people will have lived your words Donna, so true, nice one. James :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/11/2013 1:16:00 PM

Truth spoken about lies.Enjoyed reading your creative work..Thanks for stopping by...Sara

Sean L Sanders

Date: 5/21/2013 7:00:00 PM

Nicely done!! I love it poet

Debbie Duncan

Date: 5/21/2013 5:02:00 PM

I know this verse well enough,,, well penned Donna ;}

Robert Johnson

Date: 5/20/2013 9:51:00 AM

Unsung songs and letters not written. A silent remembrance of when you were smitten. A journey into a possible dream. Where reconciled love shines on a moonbeam.

Kash Poet

Date: 5/18/2013 11:18:00 AM

Very nice Senryu here Donna.Enjoyed the read.Thanks for your comments at my poems.

Donna Jones
Date: 5/18/2013 9:37:00 PM

Thanks Kash. I enjoy your work also....

Tim Ryerson

Date: 5/18/2013 8:03:00 AM

Love the contrast between lines two and three...Beautiful and hearbreaking - Tim

Donna Jones
Date: 5/18/2013 9:41:00 PM

Thanks Tim ..I'm really enjoying the challenge of these short forms..I'm just learning or trying!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/18/2013 6:37:00 AM

- Comforting arms, gives security - Well done, Donna. - Have a nice day. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 5/18/2013 6:17:00 AM

A bitter truth very well expressed!

Donna Jones
Date: 5/18/2013 6:29:00 AM

Thank you.

Harry Horsman

Date: 5/16/2013 3:24:00 PM

wow this is good

Donna Jones
Date: 5/16/2013 6:26:00 PM

Appreciate it much Harry..

Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/16/2013 1:00:00 PM

I loved how you compacted this dramatic scene all into a haiku... the suitcase implying how serious the issue was. A conflict, a twist, and then a conclusion all in three tiny lines... VERY cool!

Donna Jones
Date: 5/16/2013 6:27:00 PM

Oh thanks Timothy...nice compliment..

Russell Sivey

Date: 5/16/2013 11:54:00 AM

This is quite the intense and truthful write my friend! I really enjoyed reading this enlightening poem this afternoon! What a powerful statement you have made with this piece, Great work!!

Donna Jones
Date: 5/16/2013 6:33:00 PM

You are a very wonderful friend Russell. Thanks.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/16/2013 11:38:00 AM

:) MD....I'm here! Lies are the worst. I'm afraid of people who lie...you never know where you stand with them. I often tell my daughter...hurt me with the truth. I will bear it...but I can't bear a lie. Lovely thoughts here! HUGS!

Donna Jones
Date: 5/16/2013 6:35:00 PM

Yes...I don't know how people can lie to people they care about..thanks sweetie

Bl Devnath

Date: 5/16/2013 11:31:00 AM

Right is protected by might, is it not? Under compulsion there's no way to defeat. Suitcase must sit on bed. Wonderfully done. Thanks.....,loved always,bl

Donna Jones
Date: 5/16/2013 6:36:00 PM

Yes..thanks for your continued support....