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Premiere Contest WinnerSeen From the Asphalt Road

On the fringe of the morning

              the neat rows of wheat fields, 
              
              with  sweet fragrant grasses,

              are caged with barbed wire 

              reflecting the fire

                                      of a tangerine sun


Fences and grain 

              still damp from the rain

              are home to the masses

              of rodents and rabbits
                
              where the sage used to grow

                                    and the wind sweeps the plains...
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008

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Thalpaguruge Avatar
February 20, 2018 at 4:25 PM
Congrats! Carrie in winning first place in the contest!
Smith Avatar
February 20, 2018 at 11:12 AM
Wonderful write Carrie, congratulations...
Rodrigues Avatar
February 20, 2018 at 5:55 AM
Congratulations, Carrie! I love the layout and the images are beautiful!
Barden Avatar
February 19, 2018 at 11:48 PM
Love this write, Carrie ... such wonderful imagery and flow! Gorgeous - congrats on your win! :-)
Gauthier Avatar
February 19, 2018 at 7:37 PM
Lovely. Congrats on your win, Carrie.
Lawless Avatar
February 19, 2018 at 7:36 PM
WOW, Carrie, I had never seen this one before. Fantastic imagery....sights, sounds, and smells, lift off the page and transport the reader.....Well deserved top spot
Canerdy Avatar
February 19, 2018 at 7:10 PM
So moving and descriptive, Carrie. CONGRATS! Janice
Leiser Avatar
February 19, 2018 at 6:41 PM
Pretty! Congrats on your top win, Carrie :)
Ashley Avatar
February 19, 2018 at 6:31 PM
Carrie, I experienced your poem with my senses and my heart. A moving write. Congratulations on your top win with this beauty! ~Susan
Brown Avatar
July 18, 2012 at 5:43 AM
Congratulations on you win in Brian's "Contest # 189" contest Carrie. Love, Carol
Kendrick Avatar
July 17, 2012 at 5:50 PM
Very descriptive work..Enjoyed reading a winner..Congrats..Sara
Sweetheart Avatar
July 17, 2012 at 4:22 PM
congrats Carrie on a first place win for this dynamic poem luv.. awesome write too..
Song Avatar
July 17, 2012 at 2:39 PM
Carrie, it's as tho I am walking this very descript scene with u...format is strong and inviting! luv, gwendolen
Johnson Avatar
July 17, 2012 at 12:31 PM
Very skillful and colorful description. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
Williams Avatar
July 17, 2012 at 12:23 PM
carrie, congrats on your win..love this and the format..David
Grisetti Avatar
July 17, 2012 at 11:57 AM
Beauifully descriptive images. Congratulations.
O'Leary Avatar
July 17, 2012 at 11:48 AM
Very nice descriptions... Congratulations on your big win! Terry
Suzadail Jr. Avatar
September 28, 2008 at 5:21 PM
A poetic painting. Vince
Loving Iii Avatar
September 27, 2008 at 6:39 AM
you must be a real country girl to be able to write this. good work. jhl
Strand Avatar
September 27, 2008 at 1:01 AM
'Sunrise glistens dew kissed grasses' great imagery Carrie.Rgds Brian
Jordan Avatar
September 26, 2008 at 9:35 PM
I can't help but think you are speaking of Vina, over by Corning and Gerber. If so you be careful in them parts I know some bad folk there. That said I just loved your poem. Autumn is a bountiful time of year and you captured that perfectly. Sorry about the way this comment opened I just know bad things about that area - God Bless
Reynolds Avatar
September 26, 2008 at 2:14 PM
The perfect poem for an autumn read, beautiful. :) oh, and about the old barn - I LOVE old things- I mean really really get off on old things, relics, timeless artifacts...I cannot get enough! So the old barn I work in is a constant source of inspiration, Love Kristin
Foulk Avatar
September 26, 2008 at 11:30 AM
a warm and wonderful poem about my best time of year.
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