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Seeds of Sorrow

teeth bared
fierce snarled

claws sharp
deep scarp

maw clenched
fur drenched

eyes aimed
she claimed

mount tensed
head sensed

red heat 
conceit 

snug haze 
new ways

day's gray 
like clay

harsh frost
gas cost 

weak knees
feet freeze

night walk
knee chock

cow-poke
now broke 

brawl play
war sway

rope toy
stop ploy

vast flop
may drop

joy lust
no trust

clay earth
pain birth

tides beat
pale feet

Written: November 27, 2022


A Brian Strand Premiere No 53 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Brian Strand
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Kauffman Avatar
November 29, 2022 at 10:50 AM
Lasaad, congratulations on your win with this footle that runs the gamut of emotions from grayness to freezing feet. So well done. I felt every line. Blessings and a hug my friend!
Fowler Avatar
November 29, 2022 at 9:57 AM
Nice string of footles Lasaad! Congratulations on your win! :)
Andresen Avatar
November 29, 2022 at 5:37 AM
- Well done, Las ... I know footle is not easy - Congratulations on your win :) - hugs
Alex Avatar
November 29, 2022 at 4:33 AM
A very grand footle. Congratulations!
Kendrick Avatar
November 29, 2022 at 4:22 AM
Congratulations on this winning work. No so easy to write. Way to go in Brian's contest. Sara
George Avatar
November 28, 2022 at 8:33 PM
These are footles so masterfully strung together into a beautiful ornament ! All the Best in Brian's Contest dear friend !
Trifiatis Avatar
November 27, 2022 at 12:11 PM
A necklace of sparkling diamonds, my dearest, Lasaad. Good luck!
Young Avatar
November 27, 2022 at 11:04 AM
A bouquet of terse verse, some little nicks and hits, and a dart or two. "Day gray/like clay" imagery you not only see, but you can touch and even smell--in four syllables. Skillful indeed!
Pandit Avatar
November 27, 2022 at 8:45 AM
Highly emotive pairs. Skillfully done in Brian's favorite form. No doubt a winner my friend.
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