Seductive Saltiness Beckons Me

leaving the hot sands of comfort wading into the salty unknown diving headlong into its coldness that shocks my body I rise to breathe while the waters burn my eyes its profound stength nudges me as, a mother does her children huge churning waves crash closer, growing in size until it seems a beast, slicing into the bubbly turquoise colors One sweep of my arms propels me, Into this turbulent force tossing me about in the churning fury as my lungs burn for air, disoriented I finally break the surface, sweet air cooling the fire in my lungs glancing towards the sands yet the seductive ocean beckons to me free from the comfort craving the unknown heartbeat races from excitement as those waves win, like a mermaid, I dive into the seductive saltiness swimming towards the sunset Leaving the comforting sands behind

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Date: 11/5/2019 2:26:00 AM
This is some pretty darn good writing!!! Comments below are entertaining...lol INK
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Date: 10/29/2019 10:26:00 AM
I think you do "Free Verse" as good as anyone, Brenda -- I am really very impressed!! Lovely writing. Fondest thoughts. :) john
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 10/29/2019 10:40:00 AM
Thank you so much John! But unless I feel it I have trouble doing it! But using nature makes it so much easier than it could been! Kisses!;)
Date: 10/28/2019 7:54:00 PM
Gosh, I really like how you've captured that ocean saltiness. Haven't tasted it for decades, but I remember it as if it were yesterday, even the bitter taste of it in my mouth, and the way it burned some cuts I had on my knees. Bravo, Brenda! Cheers, Gershon
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 10/29/2019 2:27:00 AM
Ahh thank you so very much Gershon I really appreciate your visit!;)
Date: 10/27/2019 10:08:00 PM
This is awesome. I miss the sea.. I haven't been there in years. Stay in the mountains where there are small streams. Love you poem... Bless you, Gina
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 10/27/2019 10:11:00 PM
Thank you so much Regina! I really appreciate your visits!;)
Date: 10/27/2019 8:41:00 PM
Hot wet and just the right amount of steam
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 10/27/2019 9:39:00 PM
Ahh T that so sweet of you to say! Haha! I could say more but I best not lol! Thank you!;)
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