Eileen Manassian Poet Sedoka

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Sedoka Contest

When you are near me,
     I’m magnetized by your sphere.
          As tides drawn to wooing moon,
I cannot just be
     motionless when you appear.
          Sadly, you fade away soon.

January, 4, 2015
Contest: Modern Sedoka
Sponsor: Laura Loo

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Richard Lamoureux September 14, 2016 at 8:03 AM I enjoyed reading this one again, hugs Rick.

Sara Kendrick January 25, 2016 at 1:15 PM Enjoyed reading your winning work..Congrats..Sara

Dan Cwiak January 20, 2016 at 3:30 PM Very well deserved with this winner, Eileen. Congrats on your win.

Richard Lamoureux January 19, 2016 at 7:25 PM See, I'm not too kind, first place! Laura love obviously agrees with me. Cong atulations on your top spot.

Andrea Dietrich January 19, 2016 at 3:51 PM responding to what you said to me below. I did not ruin your chances at all. GREAT win, my friend!

Paul Callus January 18, 2016 at 4:12 PM How did I miss this excellent sedoka, Eileen!! Sad...beautiful...and a deserved first place in the contest! Love the accompanying visual, too:) Congratulations!!! Hugs // paul

Beautiful Scars January 18, 2016 at 9:57 AM Eileen, when I first read this I knew it would be a winner. Wonderful, thank you for being a part of my contest! *smiles* -luloo

CayCay Godwin January 9, 2016 at 9:56 AM Oh, I like and relate ... CayCay

Kabuteng P.Ink K. January 6, 2016 at 11:36 AM You bind this situation of longing and the moon & tide so wonderfully, Eileen! I really liked this! I pray that you have a 2016 that is filled with more love, joy and hope... sending hugs to you!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser January 5, 2016 at 3:05 AM Eileen, imagery wise two thumbs up, the message quite sad! Belated HAppy New Year! I passed your message to James and he said it was nice of you, thanks in behalf of him, smiles, Olive Eloisa =`) Eileen Manassian January 5, 2016 at 3:09 AM Thanks, Olive....so good to have you visit. I wish you the best in 2016. I so appreciate the visit...hugs

Dr. Upma A. Sharma January 5, 2016 at 2:07 AM Wow Eileen subtle emotion so well penned.. best wishes for contest.. May u n ur dears hv a scintillating year 2016 !!

Ilene Bauer January 4, 2016 at 7:37 PM oh, this one sounds like a winner to me, eileen! lovely!

White Sage January 4, 2016 at 4:38 PM beautiful write Eileen...

Casarah Nance January 4, 2016 at 3:50 PM Very nice! :)

Afolabi Muideen January 4, 2016 at 3:41 PM Beautiful piece, enjoyed the read..............A.M.

Richard Lamoureux January 4, 2016 at 3:31 PM You are very good at these shorter forms! Is there anything you can't do well?? Eileen Manassian January 4, 2016 at 3:34 PM Thanks, dear. You are way too kind in your appraisal. Bless you for it.

Andrea Dietrich January 4, 2016 at 3:03 PM this is wonderful, Eileen. This is the type of contest I really enjoy trying and I hope to get around to it soon. Looks to me like you mastered the challenge! (you did not post the shardoma(?) yet, right?) Eileen Manassian January 4, 2016 at 3:35 PM Thanks...dear. Well...if you're joining...there goes any chance of winning for me....HA HA. Yes...I've posted it. Hugs.

Nette Onclaud January 4, 2016 at 2:06 PM mysteriously alluring, eileen.. one of your best!.. huggs Eileen Manassian January 4, 2016 at 2:09 PM Thank you, Nette. I appreciate the visit and the comment. :) I have the flu and on medication...Been feeling grumpy and miserable, so...these comments bring me joy. Hugs

Charmaine Chircop January 4, 2016 at 2:05 PM Sad yet so beautiful , Sad verses are always the deepest in my opinion. Excellent. Eileen Manassian January 4, 2016 at 2:09 PM Yes, dear....I am with you. There is something about sad that is hauntingly dear. Hugs

Jan Allison January 4, 2016 at 1:47 PM Beautiful but so sad Eileen good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Eileen Manassian January 4, 2016 at 2:07 PM Oh...not MINE...this is a new COLLAB. Part of me...with addition from Richard. :) Jan Allison January 4, 2016 at 2:01 PM I read it yesterday lol:-) hugs Jan xx Eileen Manassian January 4, 2016 at 1:59 PM Hey, sweetie pie....Sad and sappy...What can I say! That's me...OH...but I have a limerick up with Richard. Give it a read, Miss Queen of humor. Love ya.