Manny Paras Poet Sedoka

Sedoka

Hush me forever
when sea winds light the ember
as your eyes bid a goodbye
on a tidal pool
drained by lashed rain of the sky---

and yet, I still drool.

If we meet somewhere
these my  glances will not dare
look beyond your shade
even if flowers
blossom near, far to invade
the darkness of lone hours


Contest No 222, Brian Strand

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Poet Destroyer A February 5, 2016 at 3:18 PM Manny, Enjoyed the way you expressed every line. Please keep writing and sharing your poetry. Always with LUV ** LINDA

Andrea Dietrich January 27, 2016 at 8:31 PM You have Nette's flair in this one, Manny!!

Andrea Dietrich January 8, 2016 at 10:03 PM Manny thanks for what you said at my Jenny poem. She is my best poetry supporter and often visits my poems. I am waiting for when she finally sees the one I wrote about her!!

Andrea Dietrich January 5, 2016 at 5:36 PM this is really lovely, Manny. Yes, I was thinking it was for the contest but noticing inconsistencies for the syllable count they asked for, etc. However, as a poem on its own merits (not following sedoka rules) it is fantastic! (loved the lashed rain line!)