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Secrets In a Storm

Secrets sail on the whirling winds,
along with the dark and driven clouds.
Carried aloft with litter and leaves
are invisible, partly submerged longings:

to hitch a ride on the primal rawness,
to abandon all things set and tethered,
to project oneself toward the unknown,
while thriving through the natural chaos.

Copyright © Carol Mays | Year Posted 2015

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Line Gauthier Date: 5/29/2021 7:17:00 AM Love the flow and rhythm of this lovely piece... But ~~~ wow wow wow you really took it to the next level with your recording. The voice, the sound effects and the echo were amazing ~~~ Login to Reply

Ralph Sergi Date: 6/13/2015 5:16:00 PM Hi Carol: I love your style of poetry. Beautiful description of a storm. Login to Reply Carol Mays Date: 6/16/2015 8:30:00 PM Thank you.

Shadow Hamilton Date: 2/26/2015 4:11:00 AM excellent pen Carol full of feeling and imagery hugs 7 Login to Reply Carol Mays Date: 3/1/2015 10:56:00 PM Thank you!

Debbie Duncan Date: 2/22/2015 10:47:00 PM nice :) Login to Reply

Carolyn Crawford Date: 2/17/2015 2:50:00 PM Both poems well done. Thanks for sharing. Login to Reply

Graphite Drug Date: 2/10/2015 5:50:00 PM A good read with interesting construction. Two quatrains separated by a colon: actually two sentences meditating on secrets. Login to Reply Carol Mays Date: 2/10/2015 11:00:00 PM Thanks for your attention and comments.

Janet Eaton Date: 2/9/2015 6:53:00 PM Wonder Carol. Enjoyed this so much. Janet Login to Reply

Ibrahima Diaby Date: 2/6/2015 6:25:00 AM oh that's wonderful,wish i could do that! Login to Reply Carol Mays Date: 2/6/2015 7:42:00 AM Ibrahima--Thank you. Glad you enjoyed the poem. Carol

Jaafar Sadig El Waad Date: 2/6/2015 2:42:00 AM WMy Goodness! so well-said and sealed that I dont know where to start. let me look for more comments and the authors replies! Login to Reply Carol Mays Date: 2/6/2015 7:45:00 AM Thanks, Jaafar, for reading the poem and for your wonderful comment! Carol

Teddy Kimathi Date: 2/5/2015 11:40:00 PM A well-written poem Carol!! I have enjoyed your read!!! ;-) Login to Reply Carol Mays Date: 2/6/2015 12:06:00 AM Teddy--Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it. Carol

Paul Callus Date: 2/5/2015 2:02:00 PM A top rating for this beautiful blank verse, Carol!! I hope you don't mind me hitching a ride on your delightful words! // paul Login to Reply Carol Mays Date: 2/5/2015 11:08:00 PM Not at all. :) I was hoping someone would hitch a ride on them. Thanks for the compliment. Carol

Bl Devnath Date: 2/5/2015 12:57:00 PM Excellent it's, i feel. Very deep and touching poem. A miraculous happening with in self understanding where hidden consciousness floats with beautiful words. No words of thanks for sharing but out of words thanks to you only. Loved always, my lovely friend,bl Login to Reply Carol Mays Date: 2/5/2015 11:10:00 PM Wow! Thank you. I'll be reading some of yours, also. Carol

Marilyn Williams Date: 2/5/2015 12:47:00 PM I loved both poems. It makes feel like a person on the move and not sure where I am going. But when I get there I'll be fine. Thank you for the mood. Login to Reply Carol Mays Date: 2/5/2015 11:19:00 PM Thanks, Marilyn, for appreciating my poems. If you want to feel like a person on the move, you might like my latest book--Stardust, Shadows, and Secrets. It's part essays, part poetry, and part novella--all with the aim of finding new possibilities and enchantment in life. Available as a paperback and e-book. Carol

Dave Timperley Date: 2/5/2015 11:53:00 AM Odd that a line from an old Country song leaps into my mind as I read these poems. A Slim Whitman song. " Drifting along with the tumbling tumbleweed". I just enjoyed, what I saw as, your portrayal of "drifting on the breeze though life's troubles. I must look up the lyrics now as it's a lovely song. God Bless. D. Login to Reply Carol Mays Date: 2/5/2015 11:26:00 PM Dave--Thanks for reading my poems. I like the song you mentioned. Another song comes to mind, too--"The Wayward Wind." Carol

Eve Roper Date: 2/5/2015 11:10:00 AM Carol, depiction of the wind as it sails through the air. 7 Blessings Eve Login to Reply Carol Mays Date: 2/5/2015 11:29:00 PM Eve--Thanks for reading my poem. Carol

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty Date: 2/3/2015 4:09:00 AM to hitch a ride on the primal rawness--a wonderful (fantastic?) journey through natural chaos . Now Now I know the secrets of the storm Carol. God bless. Regards>rajat Login to Reply Carol Mays Date: 2/3/2015 9:14:00 PM Thank you for noticing and appreciating my poem, Rajat!

Kelly Deschler Date: 2/2/2015 10:15:00 PM To be as free as the wind and avoid a life that is becoming stoic would be wonderful... I loved this poem, Carol. I was just swept away by these expressive lines. Beautifully done!... Welcome to Poetry Soup. I am looking forward to reading more of your work! Login to Reply Carol Mays Date: 2/3/2015 12:18:00 AM Thank you, Kelly. I spent a few hours this morning writing this poem during the storm, hoping it would speak to someone. I'm glad it did. Looking forward to reading your poems, also.