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Seasons Each season she will rise Changing them with her sighs; to tame the seasons with no shame In life none can share blame; you see Because she sets them free Taking the old, so we can play Refresh the earth each day, the land she rules with iron hand
My attempt at this form! It is called a Luc Bat form! The luc bat is a Vietnamese poetic form that means “six-eight.” In fact, the poem consists of alternating lines of six and eight syllables. This form is interesting in its rhyme scheme that renews at the end of every eight-syllable line and rhymes on the sixth syllable of both lines. xxxxxA xxxxxAxB xxxxxB xxxxxBxC xxxxxC xxxxxCxD xxxxxD xxxxxDxE And so on. Luc bat poems have no set length or subject matter, and some run on for thousands of lines.

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Date: 12/6/2019 8:44:00 PM
I love to watch the seasons change, somehow it makes me feel alive and renewed right along with the scenery ... Your poem is so powerful in both it's words and it's imagery. Very nicely done Brenda!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/6/2019 11:30:00 PM
Kelly thank you so very much!;)
Date: 11/30/2019 10:17:00 PM
Wow. This luc bat is no simple task. Very, very well done, Poet!! (Should have been POTD, btw) :) gw
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/30/2019 11:15:00 PM
Ahh Gershon thank you so much! I haven't gotten a potd in awhile but I'm not complaining as long as you and others come read! It is a difficult form to do but it was fun trying it! Thank you Gershon so much!;)
Date: 11/27/2019 12:20:00 PM
Another great writing ... Got to know the new form...thanks
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/27/2019 12:24:00 PM
Your welcome and thank you for the read and comment!;)
Date: 11/26/2019 6:58:00 AM
Mother Nature knows what she's doing, and we partake of what she offers us. I had never heard of the Luc Bat form, but you appear to have grasped it with apparent ease. I am tempted to have a go at it. ~ Warm regards // paul
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/26/2019 7:58:00 AM
Paul please do! Richard did and did quite well at it! It does tend to be a bit tricky though! Please let me know when you do!;)
Date: 11/25/2019 4:42:00 PM
Very nice Brenda, I just reads Ricks, both are outstanding...not a rhyme scheme that appeals to me personally... but well done!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/25/2019 4:46:00 PM
I know I'm not too big on it either but had to try it out!;) thank John!;)
Date: 11/25/2019 2:35:00 PM
Hi Brenda, This is a lovely new form you have introduced to us. PS, you inspired Richard to do one as well. He did a great job too. I enjoyed the read. Happy Holidays and have a great day:-) Alexis
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/25/2019 2:48:00 PM
Alexis thank you so much! I just checked Ricks our and he did an amazing job! Thank you for letting me know!;)
Date: 11/25/2019 10:01:00 AM
You did well with this form. Thanks for introducing this to us. Wonderful poem, Brenda. Bravo! ~Charlie
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/25/2019 10:59:00 AM
Thank you Charlie I appreciate that! It is much harder than it looks!;)
Date: 11/25/2019 8:46:00 AM
Yes it does make sense. I did try it. I’ll post it in a few days.
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/25/2019 9:58:00 AM
Ok Rick can't wait to read it!;)
Date: 11/25/2019 6:05:00 AM
Very cool form with a perfect result. Well done! Thanks for sharing. Hugs Rick.
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/25/2019 6:21:00 AM
Rick I hope you will try it! It's easy but not lol if that makes sense! Thank you for your visit!;)
Date: 11/25/2019 1:27:00 AM
Wonderful new form for me... You did wonderfully. Love to you, Gina
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/25/2019 6:20:00 AM
Thank you Regina! I'm glad you liked it!;)
Date: 11/24/2019 7:18:00 PM
Beautiful words. Ann
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/24/2019 7:49:00 PM
Thank you ann you are too kind!:)
Date: 11/24/2019 1:48:00 PM
this turned out nicely...sometimes playing with new forms is fun...
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/24/2019 1:56:00 PM
Thank you sandy I think it did too! My first one I tried got all mixed up! Lol it is kinda tricky with the rhymes though! Give it go girl!;)
Date: 11/24/2019 10:26:00 AM
Hey -- this is damn good stuff! One of my favourite poets, Ezra Pound, experimented with various poetry forms from lots of differing cultures, and I am quite positive he would have embraced "Luc bat" with great enthusiasm...it would have suited his writing style perfectly; come to think of it -- would lend itself to mine as well! I am most impressed with this, Brenda...was it something you came across...or was it something you researched? Whichever one -- most compelling! In administration. :) j
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/24/2019 1:55:00 PM
Ah John thank you so much! I'm quite sure you would enjoy it too! I know how you like to use different rhyme schemes and all! And yea I know pound is your all time favorite! Lol! Remember I tried reading up on him and got lost!;) thank again John!() hugs!
Date: 11/24/2019 9:10:00 AM
I love seeing new forms, Bren, nicely done. Perhaps I will have to try this. All the best me dear friend. Hugs, John
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/24/2019 1:53:00 PM
PlEase do John and let me know I'd love to see what you come up with!;) thanks John!;)
Date: 11/24/2019 8:57:00 AM
New one on me! Who is the "she" - "Mother Nature"? Stimulating! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/24/2019 1:52:00 PM
Yes she would be Mother Nature! I had it planned where I would explain it better but started to get lost in it so I just stopped at the eight lines! Thank you!;)
Date: 11/24/2019 6:09:00 AM
I’m going to have to write this form down and try it out...your words written above are soothing! INK
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/24/2019 1:51:00 PM
It's really fun it's not how I started out with then it just s life Of it's own! The whole subject ended up changing!;) thanks G;)
Date: 11/24/2019 6:00:00 AM
I really like that pattern. Nicely worked. And thank you for the instruction for the poetry toddlers like me.
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/24/2019 1:49:00 PM
Lol poetry toddler huh! Well I will have to check you out!;) but thank you I'm not far off from toddler!;)
Date: 11/24/2019 5:48:00 AM
This is really nice, thanks for the explanation. You may write to the poetry soup administrator with explanation they might add this form to the list...
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/24/2019 1:48:00 PM
Thank you Pashang it was just a form I had seen and I tried looking up here but they didn't have it! It's an interesting form to say the least!;)
Date: 11/24/2019 12:16:00 AM
Hi Brenda you did well. Thanks for sharing this. Happy Thanksgiving
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/24/2019 2:53:00 AM
Thank you and happy thanksgiving!;)
Date: 11/24/2019 12:10:00 AM
Nice attempt..
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/24/2019 2:52:00 AM
Thank you so much!;)

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