Brenda Chiri Poet I do not know?

Seasons

Seasons

Each season she will rise
Changing them with her sighs; to tame
the seasons with no shame 
In life none can share blame; you see
Because she sets them free
Taking the old, so we can play
Refresh the earth each day, the land 
she rules with iron hand



My attempt at this form! It is called a Luc Bat form!

The luc bat is a Vietnamese poetic form 
that means “six-eight.” In fact, the poem 
consists of alternating lines of six and eight syllables.
This form is interesting in its rhyme scheme that 
renews at the end of every eight-syllable line 
and rhymes on the sixth syllable of both lines.

xxxxxA
xxxxxAxB
xxxxxB
xxxxxBxC
xxxxxC
xxxxxCxD
xxxxxD
xxxxxDxE

And so on. Luc bat poems have 
no set length or subject matter, 
and some run on for thousands of lines.

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Kelly Deschler December 6, 2019 at 8:44 PM I love to watch the seasons change, somehow it makes me feel alive and renewed right along with the scenery ... Your poem is so powerful in both it's words and it's imagery. Very nicely done Brenda! Brenda Chiri December 6, 2019 at 11:30 PM Kelly thank you so very much!;)

Gershon Wolf November 30, 2019 at 10:17 PM Wow. This luc bat is no simple task. Very, very well done, Poet!! (Should have been POTD, btw) :) gw Brenda Chiri November 30, 2019 at 11:15 PM Ahh Gershon thank you so much! I haven't gotten a potd in awhile but I'm not complaining as long as you and others come read! It is a difficult form to do but it was fun trying it! Thank you Gershon so much!;)

Johnson Vdev November 27, 2019 at 12:20 PM Another great writing ... Got to know the new form...thanks Brenda Chiri November 27, 2019 at 12:24 PM Your welcome and thank you for the read and comment!;)

Paul Callus November 26, 2019 at 6:58 AM Mother Nature knows what she's doing, and we partake of what she offers us. I had never heard of the Luc Bat form, but you appear to have grasped it with apparent ease. I am tempted to have a go at it. ~ Warm regards // paul Brenda Chiri November 26, 2019 at 7:58 AM Paul please do! Richard did and did quite well at it! It does tend to be a bit tricky though! Please let me know when you do!;)

John Hamilton November 25, 2019 at 4:42 PM Very nice Brenda, I just reads Ricks, both are outstanding...not a rhyme scheme that appeals to me personally... but well done! Brenda Chiri November 25, 2019 at 4:46 PM I know I'm not too big on it either but had to try it out!;) thank John!;)

Alexis Y. November 25, 2019 at 2:35 PM Hi Brenda, This is a lovely new form you have introduced to us. PS, you inspired Richard to do one as well. He did a great job too. I enjoyed the read. Happy Holidays and have a great day:-) Alexis Brenda Chiri November 25, 2019 at 2:48 PM Alexis thank you so much! I just checked Ricks our and he did an amazing job! Thank you for letting me know!;)

Charles Messina November 25, 2019 at 10:01 AM You did well with this form. Thanks for introducing this to us. Wonderful poem, Brenda. Bravo! ~Charlie Brenda Chiri November 25, 2019 at 10:59 AM Thank you Charlie I appreciate that! It is much harder than it looks!;)

Richard Lamoureux November 25, 2019 at 8:46 AM Yes it does make sense. I did try it. I’ll post it in a few days. Brenda Chiri November 25, 2019 at 9:58 AM Ok Rick can't wait to read it!;)

Richard Lamoureux November 25, 2019 at 6:05 AM Very cool form with a perfect result. Well done! Thanks for sharing. Hugs Rick. Brenda Chiri November 25, 2019 at 6:21 AM Rick I hope you will try it! It's easy but not lol if that makes sense! Thank you for your visit!;)

Regina Mcintosh November 25, 2019 at 1:27 AM Wonderful new form for me... You did wonderfully. Love to you, Gina Brenda Chiri November 25, 2019 at 6:20 AM Thank you Regina! I'm glad you liked it!;)

Ann Foster November 24, 2019 at 7:18 PM Beautiful words. Ann Brenda Chiri November 24, 2019 at 7:49 PM Thank you ann you are too kind!:)

Sandra Adams November 24, 2019 at 1:48 PM this turned out nicely...sometimes playing with new forms is fun... Brenda Chiri November 24, 2019 at 1:56 PM Thank you sandy I think it did too! My first one I tried got all mixed up! Lol it is kinda tricky with the rhymes though! Give it go girl!;)

John Fleming November 24, 2019 at 10:26 AM Hey -- this is damn good stuff! One of my favourite poets, Ezra Pound, experimented with various poetry forms from lots of differing cultures, and I am quite positive he would have embraced "Luc bat" with great enthusiasm...it would have suited his writing style perfectly; come to think of it -- would lend itself to mine as well! I am most impressed with this, Brenda...was it something you came across...or was it something you researched? Whichever one -- most compelling! In administration. :) j Brenda Chiri November 24, 2019 at 1:55 PM Ah John thank you so much! I'm quite sure you would enjoy it too! I know how you like to use different rhyme schemes and all! And yea I know pound is your all time favorite! Lol! Remember I tried reading up on him and got lost!;) thank again John!() hugs!

John Gondolf November 24, 2019 at 9:10 AM I love seeing new forms, Bren, nicely done. Perhaps I will have to try this. All the best me dear friend. Hugs, John Brenda Chiri November 24, 2019 at 1:53 PM PlEase do John and let me know I'd love to see what you come up with!;) thanks John!;)

Matthew Anish November 24, 2019 at 8:57 AM New one on me! Who is the "she" - "Mother Nature"? Stimulating! Peace & Love Matthew Anish Brenda Chiri November 24, 2019 at 1:52 PM Yes she would be Mother Nature! I had it planned where I would explain it better but started to get lost in it so I just stopped at the eight lines! Thank you!;)

Pace Ink-U-Script November 24, 2019 at 6:09 AM I’m going to have to write this form down and try it out...your words written above are soothing! INK Brenda Chiri November 24, 2019 at 1:51 PM It's really fun it's not how I started out with then it just s life Of it's own! The whole subject ended up changing!;) thanks G;)

Fred Jagenberg November 24, 2019 at 6:00 AM I really like that pattern. Nicely worked. And thank you for the instruction for the poetry toddlers like me. Brenda Chiri November 24, 2019 at 1:49 PM Lol poetry toddler huh! Well I will have to check you out!;) but thank you I'm not far off from toddler!;)

Pashang Salehi November 24, 2019 at 5:48 AM This is really nice, thanks for the explanation. You may write to the poetry soup administrator with explanation they might add this form to the list... Brenda Chiri November 24, 2019 at 1:48 PM Thank you Pashang it was just a form I had seen and I tried looking up here but they didn't have it! It's an interesting form to say the least!;)

Na Na November 24, 2019 at 12:16 AM Hi Brenda you did well. Thanks for sharing this. Happy Thanksgiving Brenda Chiri November 24, 2019 at 2:53 AM Thank you and happy thanksgiving!;)

Jenish Somadas November 24, 2019 at 12:10 AM Nice attempt.. Brenda Chiri November 24, 2019 at 2:52 AM Thank you so much!;)