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2/6/2025 for Roses on Firefies Poetry Contest sponsored by Ink Empress

He conjures pretty poems and proses, but something in the wicked wind forewarns, In his eyes, a sea of roses, in his flesh, the pain of thorns.   A child, swinging gaily on the beach, in back, a little girl, within his reach, before his eyes, a sapphire blue, but behind him, soon his ears, heard a toddler on the sand, in tears. In school, he read of heroes, brave and true - when he'd grow up, that's what he'd do, but some things wash away with time. The ideals seen by the young man's eyes would flit away like butterflies. One day, in matrimony, he would wed, "To have and to hold", is what he said. He cursed his eyes, which would betray. A happy family is what they could see, but the wind said it was not to be. He conjures pretty poems and proses, but something in the wicked wind forewarns, In his eyes, a sea of roses, in his flesh, the pain of thorns.

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Date: 2/21/2025 3:56:00 AM
Dear david, something about the way this poem is woven truly gives a very poignant energy that would hit the soul of the readers so strongly! Especially the opening and ending with the refrain, is truly touching and soulful! Love how youv used the prompt in here too! Thank you for supporting my contest. Congratulations on your win
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David Crandall
Date: 2/21/2025 8:35:00 AM
Thanks so much Ink!
Date: 2/7/2025 5:23:00 PM
Oh that refrain! A sad tale indeed!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/8/2025 7:31:00 AM
Seems very effective!
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David Crandall
Date: 2/7/2025 7:26:00 PM
I kinda like the refrain, too, so I put it in there twice, hoping it didn't sound corny - lol :-)
Date: 2/6/2025 11:29:00 PM
impressive write dear poet. way to go!
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David Crandall
Date: 2/7/2025 8:12:00 AM
Thanks!

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