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You scorched my heart. In small corners laughter lives light phrases that dance through dark places illuminated candles oh how you shake foundations, feebly protected Your voice dances through my dazed thoughts hazed vision, with your eyes: glimmers mischievous marbles bicoloured forever etched amid little wrinkles, silvery spun in a web of evermoving mystery The tips of my fingers know your skin ticklish giggled Oh how you stamped small imprinted signatures, everywhere permanently *** May 17, 2017 6th place in contest: Right here in my Heart Sponsor: Mystic Rose

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Jean Murray

Date: 5/27/2017 4:22:00 AM

Now I am dazed. Amazing as always.

Darren White
Date: 5/27/2017 7:47:00 AM

Jean, thank you :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/26/2017 6:14:00 PM

Very nice, Darren! Congrats!

Darren White
Date: 5/27/2017 12:55:00 AM

Thanks Kim!

Janice Canerdy

Date: 5/26/2017 3:24:00 PM

Darren, congratulations on your win with this lovely poem--great use of personification! Janice

Darren White
Date: 5/27/2017 12:55:00 AM

Thank you so much Janice :)

Carole Duet

Date: 5/24/2017 3:14:00 PM

Passionate and deep, Darren. A poem to remember...especially that last verse. I love it.

Darren White
Date: 5/27/2017 12:53:00 AM

Thanks Carole!

Chris Green

Date: 5/24/2017 8:15:00 AM

Yep, I was right...I don't stand a chance. My word Darren or better yet, your words...simply amazing. What an incredible and well designed poem you have presented. This one blew me away. I'd say good luck but you won't need it. This is a winner for sure.

Darren White
Date: 5/24/2017 8:38:00 AM

Hahaha, if I counted the times people told me that, but the judges ruled N/A???? I never say that anymore. And honestly, yours is soooooo beautiful, I don't stand a chance :D

Maria Williams

Date: 5/24/2017 7:21:00 AM

I see this is for a contest, good luck, but in my eyes you are a Winner already. A7++ Dear Darren.... Maria xxx

Maria Williams
Date: 5/24/2017 7:28:00 AM

Ok shall do lol

Darren White
Date: 5/24/2017 7:25:00 AM

pssst Maria, tell Mystic I have won ;)

Winged Warrior

Date: 5/23/2017 6:57:00 AM

A heart filled poem my little penguino friend...god bless & best of luck...^WW^

Darren White
Date: 5/23/2017 7:57:00 AM

Thank you :)

Lisa Ricci

Date: 5/22/2017 7:00:00 AM

Hello Darren. Top of the afternoon to you. If a heart must be scorched then this is the only way for it to be done. My goodness Darren everything is right within such expression and execution and within life itself. Love should be as you say to feel alive. You once again met the emotive factor. Good luck with the contest. Have a wonderful afternoon penguin. Wonderful in its entirety. Honestly

Darren White
Date: 5/22/2017 8:07:00 AM

Hi my friend :) I hope Mystic likes it, but if not, I am still satisfied with it, and will keep polishing till I am satisfied. We hope for a good day today!

Anne-Marie Coreggia

Date: 5/21/2017 9:33:00 PM

I love the imagery in this poem Darren and how you skillfully accented some of the words with your formatting, making them dance off the page into our mind:) Amitiés

Darren White
Date: 5/22/2017 12:19:00 AM

Thank you Anne-Marie :) I hoped people would indeed perceive the formatting as dancing. Your comments tells me I may have succeeded.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/21/2017 7:30:00 PM

Wow, Is this for Mystic's contest? I really like this. The ending is my favorite part. They are like a tattoo, forever etched.

Darren White
Date: 5/21/2017 11:45:00 PM

Oh indeed Andrea, I never noticed the contest, but I entered it with this poem, thank you :)

Verlecia Fields

Date: 5/21/2017 9:14:00 AM

the poem made me think of everlasting true love - with soft touches and caresses

Darren White
Date: 5/21/2017 9:20:00 AM

You got that right, that was indeed my intention :)

Jan Allison

Date: 5/21/2017 8:46:00 AM

what a beautiful love poem Darren I love the way you formatted it too:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White
Date: 5/21/2017 8:59:00 AM

Thanks Jan, happy you like the formatting too :)

Sara Ella

Date: 5/21/2017 8:26:00 AM

Love the different pictures of.... is this a cat??? Hmmm This one with all of the senses, is a lovely poem. <3

Sara Ella
Date: 5/21/2017 11:01:00 AM

:D Cats are cool! I like the way you have the words spaced so that reading them gives pause and accents each word. Cat or no cat, the memory seems like a lovely one. :)

Darren White
Date: 5/21/2017 8:56:00 AM

A cat? Haha, silly friend!

Tim Smith

Date: 5/21/2017 8:06:00 AM

Some beautiful thoughts here my friend. May heart beat forever strong.

Darren White
Date: 5/21/2017 8:55:00 AM

Thank you, Tim :) May our hearts just do that!