Richard Lamoureux Poet Imagism

School Dance

Young boys
Looking in the mirror
Combing hair with wet comb
Practicing alluring smile
Flexing developing biceps
Steel yet to be hardened
Dreaming with sweaty palms
Hoping she says yes


Inspired by Monterey's poem Hope

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Robin Davis October 23, 2013 at 8:57 AM Richard This write is cute and creative. The descriptive words lets the reader imagine past dances and the fear of asking someone to dance. Nice job Richard Lamoureux October 23, 2013 at 9:24 AM Thanks Robin

Richard D Seal October 19, 2013 at 9:02 PM Ah and the memories come flooding back. Captured perfectly in this write. Rick the Watch part three is not showing in your list, I'll check you out again later. Take care, Richard Richard Lamoureux October 23, 2013 at 9:25 AM Hi Richard, I'm glad you found the ending.

Emmie Ay October 18, 2013 at 12:50 AM So cute! Short but sweet and with so little words you described my entire prom experience lol Richard Lamoureux October 23, 2013 at 9:26 AM Hi Emmie, thanks!

John Posey October 17, 2013 at 7:07 PM You have perfectly captured the situation... Girls always looked much older when you asked them to dance. After the first dance I felt much bolder.... Jake Richard Lamoureux October 23, 2013 at 9:26 AM Thanks John.

Charmaine Chircop October 16, 2013 at 3:35 PM 'Dreaming with sweaty palms hoping she says yes-How sweet this is.Reminds me of the exitement of my first teen dates..What a lovely feeling. Richard Lamoureux October 23, 2013 at 9:27 AM I'm pleased you like it.

Joseph Matose October 16, 2013 at 8:20 AM Great Imagism. It's good you've thought of these boys..it reminds me of those years; shadow boxing, rehearsing a step to lure girls, fine-tuning the voice....Thanks for sharing. JM By the way, I featured you in my latest poem: POPCORN MUSIC.JM Richard Lamoureux October 16, 2013 at 9:12 AM I will check it out Joe.

Eileen Manassian October 16, 2013 at 7:55 AM Good morning, Richard...4:00 pm, my time...without fail...You're there! :) Read this one before....came back to comment....Adorable write! Have a great day! Richard Lamoureux October 16, 2013 at 9:11 AM Good morning 7:11am my time. Easing my way into the day.

Sandra Adams October 14, 2013 at 4:28 PM this one really hit home as I just dropped some giddy girls off at the homecoming dance last night...great piece Richard! Richard Lamoureux October 16, 2013 at 9:10 AM That is a nice image, I hope they had a fun evening.

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders October 14, 2013 at 10:58 AM And now we get the guys point of view...wonderful! I enjoyed reading both you and Monterey today and thanks so much for stopping by my pages. Love and blessings, Rhonda Richard Lamoureux October 14, 2013 at 11:25 AM Blessings to you as well, thanks for commenting:

Poet Tacito October 14, 2013 at 10:24 AM Awesome! I used to be one of those boys! Combing my curly afro hoping my nerdy smile will attract that tall, brunette girl. Ah, what wacky days... Richard Lamoureux October 14, 2013 at 11:26 AM Me too, I still love to dance. Fortunate for me No more worry of being rejected. The sweaty palms have also dried.

Monterey Sirak October 14, 2013 at 10:03 AM I absolutely love it! This is the perfect balance for my poem. The view from the other side of the dance floor. Richard Lamoureux October 14, 2013 at 11:27 AM I am pleased you like it. Thanks for the inspiration.