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Say goodbye to Mom

Holding head down he simmers in anguish Scribbling restless shapes in red crayon Concealing bitterness of a child forlorn. At a tender young age he knows of divorce Custody battles, and the pointed fingers Of angry gestures condemning each other. Any moment now they'll open the door Pretending like there is love in the air. He dashes towards her, gripping angst Hearing Dad's words: "Say goodbye to Mom" Hugging her tightly, tears rolling down, Reddened eyes now piercing her sight Wanting to ask if she understands why He doesn't color anymore inside the lines, As a smile uplifts from the depth of her eyes. October 14, 2018

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Date: 5/25/2019 1:12:00 AM
Separation or divorce Vijay is so hard, mainly always for the one partner more than for the other - reddened eyes now piercing her sight..........he doesn't color anymore inside the lines - heartbreaking and so disturbing and sad for a child to behold! Beautifully penned but really sad - best wishes and hugs Vijay. Jennifer.
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Date: 11/29/2018 2:00:00 PM
It is so sad when children are torn between two warring parents. At the end of the day, the parents go their way and the children are the ones who are scarred for life! A most heartfelt, touching piece that reflects the hurt and the heartache caused by divorce. As usual, your pen is magical, my friend. Best regards. Pandita
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Date: 11/13/2018 10:41:00 AM
A very realistic theme..the helpless children facing deprivation for no fault of theirs..so touching in the way it's written
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Date: 10/26/2018 1:01:00 PM
"He doesn't color anymore inside the lines," this line so poignantly conveys the depth of the pain and sorrow of divorce. Brilliantly written Vijay! : )
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/29/2018 3:10:00 PM
Thank you Connie..appreciate your kind remarks.
Date: 10/22/2018 6:41:00 AM
Children never give up on their parents reconciling, living in their fantasy that things can always be rectified. Sad to see this happening, but happening none the less. Beautifully and emotionally written Vijay, a fave for me....Maria hugs
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/29/2018 3:09:00 PM
So true--your comments are spot on..appreciate your visit, Maria.
Date: 10/20/2018 9:50:00 AM
How could that love ever die...in between the lines maybe...but not with an open roof and an endless sky...Nice...All the best Vijay
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Date: 10/29/2018 3:09:00 PM
Thank Arturo..appreciate the kind feedback.
Date: 10/20/2018 7:28:00 AM
Hi Vijay, a strong write on your subject. It is so sad that children must suffer through a divorce. A painful and true poem to read. This happens too often. An excellent poem Vijay. have a wonderful weekend. Your friend always....Mike.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/20/2018 8:19:00 AM
You are right Mike..children do suffer..they are never prepared for something like this. Appreciate your visit and comments..many many thanks, friend.
Date: 10/18/2018 7:13:00 AM
What a powerful and sad poem, well expressed, Vijay. Such a sad reminder of how divorce so deeply affects our children...
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Date: 10/20/2018 8:18:00 AM
So true, Laura. Appreciate your visit and kind words.
Date: 10/17/2018 3:45:00 PM
Very sad what happens in divorce, kids always suffer.. many people will be able to relate to this..
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Date: 10/17/2018 4:19:00 PM
You are so right..thank you for your visit and comments Silent One.
Date: 10/17/2018 10:15:00 AM
You paint a sad picture, my friend...I witnessed this personally thru a friend...and his 7 yr son let out a huge silent scream...one of the saddest things ever to see...love & healing...^WW^
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/17/2018 11:05:00 AM
Yes--heartbreaking to hear about the experience such as the one you describe. Many thanks for your comments, my friend.
Date: 10/17/2018 10:06:00 AM
A soul wrenching act that plays out too often, so painfully told with such poetic skill my friend, well done...
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Date: 10/17/2018 11:04:00 AM
So true my friend..appreciate your visit and comments, Charlie.
Date: 10/17/2018 5:41:00 AM
Very sad and yet real life. Been there. Divorced myself and strangely had wished in my youth that my parents would separate. Only when the situation comes, do we know how difficult life can be. Many kind wishes, Kai
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Date: 10/17/2018 7:15:00 AM
Many thanks Kai..appreciate your visit and comments. Thank you as well for sharing your personal experience..kids are devastated as they are so unprepared to face this.
Date: 10/17/2018 4:11:00 AM
Very sad and yet real life. Been there. Divorced myself and strangely had wished in my youth that my parents would separate. Only when the situation comes, do we know how difficult life can be. Many kind wishes, Kai
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Date: 10/16/2018 7:35:00 PM
This is heart-wrenching, Vijay! The significance of the child's not staying within the lines while coloring is especially moving! Janice
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/17/2018 7:12:00 AM
Yes-your comments are on the mark..many thanks Janice for your visit and feedback.
Date: 10/16/2018 8:39:00 AM
So heartbreaking and well written, Vijay.~ Warren
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/16/2018 11:46:00 AM
Thank you Warren.
Date: 10/16/2018 5:40:00 AM
This is painful, I always feel for the children caught in a divorce, you have captured the pain very well:)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/16/2018 6:25:00 AM
Thank you Jo.
Date: 10/15/2018 2:28:00 PM
Very deeply personal and painful. You've conveyed the grief with great care and empathy.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/15/2018 2:58:00 PM
Many thanks Lawrence..appreciate your visit and comments.
Date: 10/15/2018 1:07:00 PM
- A breakup is not the child's choice and will always affect the children, Vijay - It is heartbreaking how many children who experience this - A great write about this theme - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/15/2018 2:58:00 PM
Thank you Anne-Lise..appreciate the kind feedback.
Date: 10/15/2018 12:12:00 PM
Its heart wrenching when parents split up . The young ones always seem to be the ones who suffer the most. Well written and heart felt from my end. Thanks for sharing Vijay, you always have a humanistic side to all your poems
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/15/2018 2:57:00 PM
You captured well the aftermath of divorce on children in your comments..many thanks, Pixie.
Date: 10/15/2018 11:43:00 AM
There is pain, anger, disappointment and discontent "in the air".. achingly and bitterly touching the very heart of an avid reader who can but identify with the "forlorn" child and understand that some parents fail to assure Harmony within themselves thereby cause harm to their children.. A great work of art that deeply touches human nature.. powerful diction.. a masterful rendition.. a great pleasure to read despite the pain! My deepest regards dear Vijay, stay blessed always.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/15/2018 2:55:00 PM
Your analysis is on mark, as always. Thank you for your generous remarks, Besma. I appreciate your visit and value your feedback. My deepest regards to you as well, my friend.
Date: 10/15/2018 11:01:00 AM
So Powerful Vijay. I don't think that unless it has been experience, that it can be truly understood. Your words help one gain insight, Well done !!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/15/2018 11:32:00 AM
Appreciate the kind words Mike. Many thanks.
Date: 10/15/2018 10:55:00 AM
Divorce does wreak havoc on some children; not having one parent there a great deal of the time is even traumatic for a child. A powerful poem, Vijay that grips my heart like a vise. Well done.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/15/2018 11:27:00 AM
You are so right about the pain divorce causes, M.L.K...always happy to read your comments..many thanks for the positive feedback.
Date: 10/15/2018 9:42:00 AM
Gripping! Every line is decorated and intense. Powerful piece Vijay!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/15/2018 11:26:00 AM
Thank you Vegter--appreciate the kind words.
Date: 10/15/2018 7:04:00 AM
Your powerful words pull at our heart strings, Vijay, especially the last stanza. Unfortunately it is the children who usually suffer most. Regards // paul
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/15/2018 8:57:00 AM
So right you are Paul..about the effects on children. Many thanks for the kind feedback.
Date: 10/15/2018 1:43:00 AM
Powerful verse Vijay, couples part, that's life but heartbteaking when there are kids involved. Well written. Tom.
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Date: 10/15/2018 8:56:00 AM
Appreciate the kind remarks..many thanks, Tom.
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