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Santa Man

First try at limericks 
If not correct could some genius limerick writer advice ... ta <3

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There once was an old man called santa 
Who loved a big glass of cold fanta
He grew fatter and fatter and fatter
Couldn’t stop eating sausage in batter
He sure had good banter

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Ink Empress

July 20, 2026 at 1:43 PM

Hahah i love this!!!! Made me smile!!! Just wat i needed twin spirit unicorn siszta!! Erhm. I used to love fanta when i was little ~ now not so much! Me think, you must do limericks more often aye!! (Did I pull a wee touch of scottish accent here?) Hah! Love your sense of humor! Pleasure reading! Sending you light always ~ and also mermaid moonbeams ~ (multiple emojis)

Dorothy Gibbons

July 20, 2026 at 3:32 PM

Ha ha i need to adjust it touch but was fun trying . Aye u sure got da wee scottish word right. I'm impressed :))) hugzzzz <3<3

Hiya Sharma

July 20, 2026 at 8:54 AM

Aww. Dear Dorothy, I've never tried writing a Limerick, I find it very tricky! But seeing you here, attempting for the first time, ahh, i find it really good ~ the opening lines really have me a bit chuckle haha.. pleasure reading your words always.. sending light and love, huggssszzzz

Dorothy Gibbons

July 20, 2026 at 8:57 AM

I got to tweek it andrea helped I forgot. I'm trying new styles as normally I just write from heart n soul it flows but I need to work on styles.. hey hiya have u been to my shoot the Moon since i added music to it xxx how u keeping xx hugsss <3

Andrea Dietrich

July 15, 2026 at 6:42 PM

Since you wanted advice, here goes. Your first lines are really good for first time writing a limerick. Each line has 9 syllables. So last line needs 9 syllables too. Try something like this: but at least that guy had good banter. As for lines 3 and 4, they need to be around 5 or 6 syllables. Eliminate the extra fatter and write this: he grew fatter and fatter. ( 7 syllables is ok too. So you need next line to have 7 syllables too.) Just write this : eating sausage in batter. There u have it!

Dorothy Gibbons

July 15, 2026 at 7:23 PM

Awww thank you so much I will adjust it soon appreciate your advice . As I want to do it right not wrong. Andrea your a star. Hugs <3 3.20 am ere and im playing with words better shut eyes lol Going out at 8.30 am son dropping me off on his way to work x

Paula Goldsmith

July 14, 2026 at 12:33 PM

What a creative/fun Limerick write you have here. Love It... On the top of SOUP's home page, there is "Poem Types." Maybe this can help you out, it has helped me a few times. Have a fun day writing away............

Dorothy Gibbons

July 14, 2026 at 5:45 PM

Thank you dear Paula for your lovely comment and you pointing me to poems types page. Its 1.40 am im still reading n writing. Need to start counting sheep to sleep but id end up writing a poem of the beautiful sheep. I love sheep. Theirs a field of sheep behind my house Herdwick sheep i talk to them my son says if anyone hears you they think your crazy ha ha ha <3