Sands

sands in my hand
     trickle as I close
my palm to grip them

    I whisper your name
as my teardrops
    flow with the sands





24 May 2021

absencefeelingslonelinessfree verse

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Aniruddha Pathak

Date: 6/21/2021 10:41:00 PM

A poet that touches heart as does this poem, beautiful piece of poetry at its best

Quoth Theraven

Date: 6/12/2021 7:14:00 PM

JCB, Very fine sands. -Richard

Anitha Jayasankar

Date: 6/8/2021 11:38:00 AM

Sad and deep my friend... Your poems are unique and I love reading them..God bless... Hugs ... ~ Ani

Ann Foster

Date: 6/8/2021 11:17:00 AM

Somehow I understand this... and can feel it sift through my hand as I read it. Wow... Well written indeed. Provokes a physical response. Well done! Ann

Lisa Ricci

Date: 6/1/2021 5:56:00 AM

Hello once again JCB - This entry can stand on its own and is more than a contest entry. Truly. Your title is poetic all on its own and your words follow its poetic expression. Your writing and work to be proven skilled work. Thank you for sharing with us. Enjoy poetry soup.

Kim Merryman

Date: 5/30/2021 6:59:00 PM

Sad but vivid images! Congrats on your win, JCB! Blessings, Kim M

Susan Lawrence

Date: 5/30/2021 7:05:00 AM

Beautiful memories.. time and love lost . Poignant and powerful . Congratulations on your win . Blessings, Susan

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 5/30/2021 12:26:00 AM

A STRONG CREATIVE BITE SIZE VERSE - I WAS VERY TOUCHED BY IT AND I SEE YOU WON THE CONTEST, CONGRATULATIONS DEAR POETESS HUGS AND BLESSINGS.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 5/29/2021 11:10:00 AM

Congratulations JCB! This deeply touched my heart with its pensive melancholy and sense of trying to hold onto a lost love like trying to hold sand! Wonderful metaphor! Wonderfully done. Blessings to you.