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Salty Rivers

If I were to close my eyes or dare to blink I'd sink in salty rivers of tears on my cheeks I wonder how long the flow will continue to linger My fingers tire but cannot wipe them all away I feel the burdened weight of my sodden lashes fearing the gashes in my heart will go on bleeding June 6, 2023 Bite Size no 65 Contest Sponsored by Line Gauthier

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Bill Baker

Date: 6/7/2023 4:23:00 PM

Powerful bit size poem for the contest, Lin. Pain and loss are both hard to overcome. That want to be recognised over and over. Good luck in the contest, my friend. Bill

Lin Lane
Date: 6/8/2023 7:40:00 AM

Thanks so very much for your kind thoughts and comments, Bill.

Robert Lindley

Date: 6/7/2023 3:55:00 PM

A very discriptive bite size piece. Very fine poetry in short verse , A definite fav. God bless..

Lin Lane
Date: 6/8/2023 7:39:00 AM

I'm very grateful for the fave and your supportive comments. Thanks, Robert.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/6/2023 11:13:00 PM

Quite a sad scene you paint with your words Lin, A scene we all encounter from time to time. Hope you're on the mend now. Tom

Lin Lane
Date: 6/8/2023 7:39:00 AM

Finally on the mend a titch, Tom. It's been a really gloomy week. Thanks for liking this one.

Deb M

Date: 6/6/2023 7:09:00 PM

Hi Lin love the title love the poem! Did you have fun with your grandson? Debx

Lin Lane
Date: 6/8/2023 7:38:00 AM

Thanks very much, Deb. My time away with family was great until I caught the flu.

David Kavanagh

Date: 6/6/2023 12:31:00 PM

Heya Lin, hope that flu is not getting you down, some very raw emotion going on here, yet metaphorically brilliant, great to have you back and almost in one piece, cheers David

Lin Lane
Date: 6/6/2023 2:29:00 PM

Hi David. It's been rough going since Saturday, but I'm on the mend, ever so slowly. lol One piece is debatable with sneezes and coughs flying around me. Thanks for your fine comments that always leave me smiling.

Jan Allison

Date: 6/6/2023 11:35:00 AM

aww Lin a heartache piece, i love the inner rhyme with the end line - very creative indeed:-) hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 6/6/2023 11:51:00 AM

Likewise Lin, you and Mark have got me through the most challenging times of my life since June last year and the phrase that's what friends are for have never been more true. I am so happy to be writing again and working on my book project which is so exciting. I may write poopy silly poems but at least people read and enjoy them:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 6/6/2023 11:49:00 AM

You are my longest friend on this site, Jan. We've been through lots of joys and sorrows together and I always look forward to your comments. I am so very pleased that you've returned. Thank you, sweet friend for your remarks and for always being with me when I need you.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 6/6/2023 11:14:00 AM

Lin, in your six lines, with your stunning imagery, you have eloquently exposed deep grief and mourning - the burden of pain unhealed and the deep fear of the heart that the pain will not be healed. Best wishes for the contest. Your words leave their signature in the heart. Blessings my friend! Have said it before but will say it again, so wonderful to have you back in the soup!

Lin Lane
Date: 6/6/2023 11:46:00 AM

Sam, it's comments and friendships such as yours that welcomed my back that have me continuing to write in PS. I've been away and then battled with the flu, but somehow managed to post a couple of things this morning. Thank you for the kindness of your thoughts.