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sailing in silence

d r e a m e r s trace the rose moon like poets chasing w a v e s of silver sparkles sailing in s i l e n c e and yours is the heartbeat I ache for in the dark beneath the f a d i n g glow of jinxed s u n s e t s

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/23/2025 4:22:00 PM

Congratulations on your winner in Brian's contest. Way to go. Very creative work. Sara K

Paige Hind

Date: 2/6/2025 8:36:00 PM

What a Cinquain! Flowed so beautifully! and yours is the heartbeat I ache for in the dark "

Valsa George

Date: 2/6/2025 7:41:00 PM

This is so sweet and short and touches the heart with its romantic intensity and deep sense of yearning. You are adept in every form of poetry dear Empress." In the fading glow of jinxed sunsets."..... Lovely image!

Duke Beaufort

Date: 2/6/2025 8:42:00 AM

IE, I’m taken by your passion. I do hope you have smooth sailing!! It’s not easy to stay out of troubled waters and locate the blue lagoon. Many have struggled with this. I know you will take good care of yourself and those near! Smiles!!!

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 2/5/2025 9:41:00 AM

Written with evocative imagery and vivid emotions, a couple of cinquains display love gained and lost. Always elegant language. The light is always with you.

Tonye George

Date: 2/5/2025 9:25:00 AM

Short, precise and lovely written. "like poets chasing waves of silver sparkles sailing in silence." We poets chase almost everything especially the things that do not have voices.

MD Johnson

Date: 2/4/2025 9:47:00 PM

Beautifully done. It’s an elegant intertwine of the wistful beauty of moonlit dreams and the aching desire of the heart. Captivating and evocative —MDJ

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 2/4/2025 7:02:00 PM

A beautifully told tale of love and longing, with stunning images! Best wishes for the contest, dear Ink.

David Crandall

Date: 2/4/2025 6:48:00 PM

Beautiful poem!

Ink Empress
Date: 2/4/2025 7:31:00 PM

Thank you so much dear David

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/4/2025 1:11:00 PM

this is SO gorgeous. Soupmail

Ink Empress
Date: 2/4/2025 7:31:00 PM

Awwn thank you, i love this form, used to be the form i do when i am in a rush lolol easy

Silent One

Date: 2/4/2025 9:19:00 AM

Even with this short form you have written a beautiful pome that is so romantic and full of yearning.. I hope his heart and yours can beat together...

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/4/2025 7:04:00 AM

Reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Way to go. Sara K

Ink Empress
Date: 2/4/2025 12:24:00 PM

Awwn thank you dear sara, always a pleasure hearing from you: its ok not winning, I enjoyed writing a cinquain after ages.

Tom Woody

Date: 2/4/2025 6:37:00 AM

So sweetly romantic, yearning. "Yours is the heartbeat I ache for in the dark." Lucky fellow

Ink Empress
Date: 2/4/2025 12:23:00 PM

Ah thank you tomsz. I cant believe i havent posted on soup previously any cinquains, this is one of my fave forms

Di11y Da11y

Date: 2/4/2025 2:50:00 AM

The shift that occurs with the use of the word 'jinxed' is palpable. Excellent write.

Ink Empress
Date: 2/4/2025 12:22:00 PM

Ah sometimes yes some beautiful things can get jinxed. Thank you so much dear dd appreciate your support

The Aura Rhymes

Date: 2/3/2025 11:09:00 PM

Wow love it

Ink Empress
Date: 2/3/2025 11:26:00 PM

Awn thank you dahlin