sage push

light body turns in my sleep—clean through sheets, ghost whimpers

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Hilo Poet

Date: 12/9/2023 8:11:00 AM

A mesmerizing view, Paige. An exceptional brevity was noted. Aloha, William

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/8/2023 4:38:00 PM

Insightful Monoku, with a profound poem, thought, and surely a poetical style.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/6/2023 1:23:00 PM

very mysterious one!!

Hiya Sharma

Date: 12/5/2023 7:53:00 PM

Woah, this is quite a profound and intriguing monoku poem! It compelled my thoughts to wander in a mysterious way.. I especially love ur impeccable wordplay here & of course those 'ghost whimpers' gave a captivating touch.. Wow.. Immense depth has been conveyed in just few words.. Love this!

Yann Rolland

Date: 12/5/2023 6:01:00 PM

delicious poem, sleeping can be an aventure, and surely a poetical moment, enjoyed yann

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/5/2023 3:53:00 PM

such depth in such a few short words...left me pondering, especially ghost whimpers. Nicely done, Paige. Have a splendid evening, Sara

Ink Empress

Date: 12/5/2023 2:02:00 AM

This is so deep and intriguing, how in few syllables you’ve expressed something so thought provoking is beyond impressive. You always say so much in your poems be it short or long, and i cant help but wonder, … but i love your wordplay. Pleasure reading you as always