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Premiere Contest WinnerSadness

 
My young life, so far, has been a garden ravaged, scarred and weather-stained with deep sorrow and sadness; I hang my head like a dying flower damaged, this rose, bitter sweet and driven to vast madness. Scarred and weather-stained with deep sorrow and sadness, wild, rain storms and great winds shake the sea of my sleep; this rose, bitter sweet and driven to vast madness, lost in this sea of the melancholy- I keep. Wild, rain storms and great winds shake the sea of my sleep, always, curtains stir on my misery and pain; lost in this sea of melancholy- I keep, my heart is drowned in the depths of falling dark rain. Always, curtains stir on my misery and pain, and yet I drink from the deep blue cup of life; my heart is drowned in the depths of falling dark rain, hope is music to the soul- though pierced by life's knife. And yet I drink from the deep blue cup of life, I hang my head like a dying flower damaged; hope is music to the soul- though pierced by life's knife, my young life, so far, has been a garden ravaged. _______________________ February 9, 2017 Poetry/Pantoum/Sadness Copyright Protected, ID 17-8739-02-0 All Rights Reserved. Written Under Pseudonym. Submitted to the contest, Favorite Pantoum Sponsor, Laura Loo First Place ________________________ Written for the contest, Sadness sponsor, Silent One First Place
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Gauthier Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 9:49 PM
what a moving poem. Very powerful and emotive, BW.
Haight Avatar
March 29, 2018 at 4:38 PM
Sad and so beautiful, Constance. Congratulations on your well-deserved First Place Trophy win! Hugs, Sandra
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March 28, 2018 at 6:03 AM
Oh wow, Constance, I think that is the most gorgeous Pantoum I have had the pleasure to read, definitely some of your finest work, congratulations dear poetess xomo
Gentry Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 8:52 PM
Congratulations on your win! Very touching, wonderfully written.
Richards Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 5:55 PM
A big shout-out to you, Constance! Congrats on your win !!
Allison Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 3:59 PM
MANY CONGRATS ON YOUR TROPHY WIN CONSTANCE:-) HUGS jAN XX
Ashley Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 2:10 PM
Congratulations on your big win Broken Wings with your poem of sadly beautiful imagery of deep emotional melancholy.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Roper Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 11:42 AM
Congratulations on your win sweet lady enjoyed reading! Have a nice Easter Hugs Eve ~`*
Scars Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 9:52 AM
oh my! I loved every single word that I didn't want the poem to end! great pantoum sweet lady :) thank you and congratulations :)-luloo
Krampe Avatar
February 12, 2017 at 10:29 AM
So many beautiful sad images in your poem, Constance. And a wonderfully executed pantoum, too! Congratulations on your win. Agnes
La France Avatar
February 12, 2017 at 3:25 PM
Agnes oh thanks for that nice comment
Godwin Avatar
February 11, 2017 at 12:29 PM
Congratulations, it is beautifully sad, sadness delivered in so many of its layers. All the best ... CayCay
La France Avatar
February 12, 2017 at 3:24 PM
Caycay thanks for the compliment
James Avatar
February 11, 2017 at 11:10 AM
Wonderful write great win super 7
La France Avatar
February 12, 2017 at 3:23 PM
James thank you for the wonderful and the 7
White Avatar
February 11, 2017 at 9:58 AM
This pantoum of yours, it's so intricately beautiful.... well deserved win, congratulations
La France Avatar
February 12, 2017 at 3:22 PM
Darren thanks for the nice compliment
Smith Avatar
February 11, 2017 at 9:46 AM
Excellent BW, congratulations :)
La France Avatar
February 12, 2017 at 3:21 PM
Gary thank you for the excellent
Gupta Avatar
February 10, 2017 at 8:43 AM
Beautiful sadness in pantoum ...
La France Avatar
February 12, 2017 at 3:20 PM
Thanks for visiting
Godwin Avatar
February 10, 2017 at 3:43 AM
Beautifully sad and impressively done. I read it twice. Poetry hugs, CayCay
La France Avatar
February 12, 2017 at 3:19 PM
Caycay thank you for the lovely and the hugs
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